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    Posted: 30 July 2013 at 12:10am
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Form: NWWWWL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 July 2013 at 12:16am
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Been talking to this bitch for months, now I wanna kill her
Cut the cunt's stomach up and make her eat her own liver
I've never been in love, I know I'm too young now
I just wanna rip her fucking tongue out and pour salt in her mouth
tear that fucking weave out and slam her face on the pavement
Leave her teeth knocked out with her family tied in the basement
Tape her to the floor so she's lying there helpless
Wrap my hands around her throat and choke her past being breathless
When she's gasping for air and takes a breath in
I'll stomp on her gut and rape the slut again
While she's crying "Please let me go"
I'll kill her dad in front of her and tell her "enjoy the show"
Then rip his fucking heart out and feed it to her mother
Who's regurgitating it in a cup with a tube feeding it to her brother
With another tube through his ass on laxatives feeding it straight to her
coming full cycle into one hydrating them with sewage water (wuter)  Ew..
This is for all the pain you ever put me through
Then make her eat her dad's brains while she's ingesting her mother's puke
then make her vomit it back up so I can make it with ramen noodles too
This bitch laughed at me when I told her I fucking hate her
I think she believes me now that I'm jabbing her stomach with a taser 
Quit screaming bitch I already murdered your fucking neighbors
I already poisoned everybody living in the closest acres
Now shut the fuck up and pass me the rolling papers
Oh wait, I forgot, how you gonna do that without hands?
I was gonna let you go but pregnancy fucked up those plans

I'd rather keep you here longer since youre expecting me to kill it
As soon as you give birth Imma make you watch me grill it
and if you struggle to take a bite Imma break your fucking nose
And skin your stupid brother and make you wear his skin as clothes
I know I've left you traumatized, it's awful I had to do this
But as soon as your momma dies Imma SEW her face on yours with a GLUESTICK (What?) 
Record it, and every day you're gonna see it
You worthless whore, Before this you never wanted me
Now we're in love and hurting you is costing me
I go to bed every night dreaming about you cryin'
screaming for police as I'm beating you like a tyrant
My apologies mean nothing I wish I never acted violent
Haha sike! Dumb bitch, you actually thought I was sorry?
You thought me hurting you would turn around and scar me?
I could kill myself right now and let you die here starving
Matter of fact, let me give you one last kiss good bye
I love you baby but now I'm separating you and I
But before I kill myself, not impregnating you would be selfish
Haha Kidding again bitch! Now watch me break your fucking jaw
Take this fucking dick while I feed you maggots through a straw
After this I'mma let you stay in the attic with my mom
She's been dead for years but she can keep a convo long
In hell...
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The Anesthesiologist


His eyes slowly open but his view is illuminated

Focusing on the sounds but the noises in the room are faded

When his vision comes too he knew he was forsaken 

Couldn't move but was awoken to his body being mutilated

Every nail was torn out of his fingers and toes

By these people who wore withering clothes

He lays here and watches as they slice his skin from chest to stomach

Slowly cracked his rip cage open as his heart began to plummet

Carving each piece as they joke and play in obsession

Getting picked and probed at in every which was and all directions

To his left was a man jumping roping with his small intestines

To the right was a group with his kidneys playing hacky sack

What kind of sick individuals could laugh at that? 

As time went on they continued their operational game

No buzzer if they slipped just another sliced organ or vein

With every second that ticked he slowly began feeling the pain

Still paralyzed the only thing he could do was close his eyes

and use a happy moment to clench the pain in disguise

But when his peepers shut within a moment

one man clamped them open

The other got ready across this brutal table

to clip his balls off and add them to his newton cradle

The anesthesia wore off as each second passed

He tried to say something but murmured as they all laughed


"Are you trying to speak kid", one of them asked

"Maybe, we should cut your lips off turn you on your back

and shove them up rear end so you can talk out your ass"


The laughter ignited again and they continued, Unpassive, Uncivil

One of them picked up the hammer and chisel

Started banging out each tooth one by one

Excruciating pain through his jaw as the shrapnel hit his tongue


"I got a better idea before this bitch starts to shout"


They picked up his large intestine and dumped the shit in his mouth

As the anesthesia wore off completely one man leaned down to his ear and whispered

"Say cheese, and smile for the camera for your picture"

His last thought was maybe my wife will awaken me

But the camera flashed and his heart stopped simultaneously
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Form: LLWN 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 August 2013 at 6:03am
I vote for Dougysnuggy. His words are really fluent, not saying The Law's isn't. Dougysnuggy has a really good story to it. It touches me, and it pops out. So, therefore, my vote goes to Dougysnuggy.
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Form: LLWN 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 August 2013 at 6:08am
Also, Dougysnuggy has a better rhyming method, it just rolls off the tongue. lol
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Form: LNWWWW 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 August 2013 at 12:40pm
umm mods? 

anyways vote it up
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Form: WWNWWN 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 August 2013 at 1:07pm
Rider vote if ever I've seen one, your vote doesn't count TeeDawgg

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Form: LNWWWW 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 August 2013 at 9:38pm
for real.. Lets get some votes in... 
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Form: NWWWWL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 August 2013 at 9:45pm
Yeah, they would be appreciated. There's a decent amount of people on right now..
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My vote goes to Dougysnuggy,

The Law was good but I read the Dougy entry in seconds as to me it flowed so well, very raw

The nose/clothes line was the best for me, made me sick and lol at the same time... Well done to both though!
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Form: NWWWWL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 05 August 2013 at 10:15pm
Explain your vote more.
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Form: WWLLLL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2013 at 7:29pm
Dougy

Verse was good, nice descriptions.  Flow was alright, some spots kinda threw it off.

And skin your stupid brother and make you wear his skin as clothes
I know I've left you traumatized, it's awful I had to do this
But as soon as your momma dies Imma SEW her face on yours with a GLUESTICK (What?) 
Record it, and every day you're gonna see it

Stretched line, short line.  Not a big deal.  Thought it fell off towards tha end of tha verse.  Last 6 lines or so.  

The Law

That was well written.  Flow was there.  Started off a little slow, but picked up well after first few lines.  Coulda came up with a better closer though.

Usually horrorcore battles are about what ya'll would do to each other, this was a different take on it.  It's close as Dougy was more gruesome IMO but Law had tha better overall verse.

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Form: LNWWWW 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2013 at 11:58pm
Thanks for the vote and I wasn't sure how the horrorcore was exactly around here. I always thought it was basically a topical based on horror. 
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Form: NWWWWL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 August 2013 at 1:50am
1-1 i guess? Or?
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Form: WWWWWL 		Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 August 2013 at 9:53am
bump

i agree with you law on the approach to a horrocore. i just go with imagery + horror. rather than 

'taping razor blades to my dick n rapin your face' etc thing

to each their own
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Uppin... 
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