Open Mic: The Love Of Lyrical Art

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    Posted: 11 October 2017 at 2:00am
I won't lie, I want to make you cry, but I don't mean to hurt you.
I just want inside your mind, til these words reach your virtue.
waiting outside your conscience, tappin your intuition
"I know you heard my words, I know you read them, but did you listen?"
Can I, be your gravitation, help you exceed your imagination
til you can fully understand a poets words, and read'm with admiration
I just want this art to affect you, and inject you, how it infected me
Feel it's point of it's love and it's pain. til your affections bleed
wanna tell you stories you already know, but from a different perspective
Wanna re-open your emotions. Get'm coastin, til your feeling is restless.
want you to feel these chills, like when one's sick with a fever
Smile, laugh, cry, dry your eye, then promote this as your leisure
Although some voices, their vocals tower, words alone can be so much louder.
So when words are formed into art, I just hope you know their power
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First off nice verse,i liked, the use of assonace here,but it is a custom here that
you feed others in order to be fed,you have dropped a few pieces but haven't fed
anybody else's work,I feel this is a one sided affair that needs addressing because
ppl here believe you get out what you put in,I will leave feed when I see you being a
little more forthcoming,no disrespect intended here,more of some friendly advice
peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,before you can make an entrance".
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This hit deep. 

Thanks for sharing :)

BTW welcome to Lyrical Assault!


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