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levy420
Superior Member Joined: 22 May 2013 Location: San Antonio TX Status: Offline Points: 3443 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 39-33-4 Form: LWWLLN |
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While concrete's out tripping the Netherlands doing a victory lap back at syndicate headquarters it's the dawn of a new era!!!!!!!!! Ridley squat Syn's back! From zygotic inception to iconic collection Syn 'tax. With prose in flows too psychotic to mention Synapse? All fire off to perfection with cyclonic aggression Cos Syn didn't Nap ... just in cryonic suspension in the depths of a fortress, in leaden-lined boxes labelled "God Help Us All If Ever Defrosted" So be expecting the mob hits, as we settle our conflicts Defending our dogs with, the vengeance of John Wick Centred and spot-lit, as we enter the mosh pit Turn the Pentagon Office to American Gothic Every sentence that Squat spits', the essence of hot shit And they never can stop this ... 4-20 you got this? Levy420 a rhetorical question at least that's my synopsis Verse lined with more force then atomic bomb hits Bar god spit, hypnotic rise to top quick, obnoxious kaos sykotic line up changed with a squad shift Syn's back god's gift, 420 swift, riddles nauseous Mob shit, Mc's get nibbled to bits, one flick of the wrist This isn't a glitch, step up, figure we bitch Beat you're ass with a switch, fast as lickety split Snap stick figures or thick, behemoth's with wit's Metaphorically sick, similes slick, like a Tarantino script Syn city's reservoir dogs kick more ruthless hits then pulp fic Bakardi n game in the click, fix ya lips or get ya repertoire ripped like bong hits ....CHRONIC... AshleyKaos "BOW" Return of Syndicate to Vindicate our status of the Highest Placement "POW" Verse Indicate's that Syn Droppin Sicknin' Set's the rest are just basic Team Of Greatness Trumpin these Failures Like Campaign Mate's of Kasich Might as well Say it, we Spit like Arson lines Blazin and no one can tame it New Queen of LA Reppin' Syndicate like we were born with Parliamental Royalties Squad's far from Ordinary Sewing Certain Defeat Into peasants with Embroidaries Burned by Syn's Inferno wid Fire Bars Like Our Mouth's Vomiting Flame Genocide of These Lames Committin Murder Like Waves of Bubonic Plague We Go so Hard, no soft Roster still bustin out hits like Mike Bubble't Best by Far, Smooth Talkers Running this shit so were always gettin paid Killing Shit like this flow is Homicidal, Divine like reading the Bible Chilling isnt it? Better Prey for survival cause we murder each rival Bakardi You better come correct, or better yet come with checks Yall talkin bars Syn stay with them bayonets Words cut deep, but we barely even break a sweat you aint gonna make it very far deliverin all those vacant threats super bad bitches make em quick to undress we be pullin all the bitches that you tried to finesse you tried to impress, with rhymin skills that you thought you posess but it aint hard to tell that yall workin with less we be workin the legs, got you by the toe while you was tryin to flex rippin out your fucking heart for displaying your pecs im done dealin with stress, I think I proved my point about who really is best im done being angry for awhile, right now im just keepin it blessed. BIG GAME BIG GAME'S BACK!!! Now watch these lames yack, to me, they'll say "You illin!" And aye it's true, cos Triz Tre's my dude, but BG's - LA's True Villain... Me n the crew chillin, smooth sailing, like we out on a battleship. complacent, patient, waiting for a hatin assailant doubtin our craftsmanship. DEATH CAN HAPPEN QUICK! My whole squad's heavy hitters. from Levy, Zin to, Crete to Rid ya, better STOP!! and go check the figures ... It's like I'm ambidextrous, cos I'm, always right, yet the left'll split ya Killa ... with the, hectic scriptures, which ah, summons death to get ya. so never be a hoe like Droid and throw a fucken bitch fit. Cos one attack from me and you could disappear like Slip did. dropped'm a simple diss and, no one seen him since then. He acted Godly, tried to 'cross me', so I left and went direct to synnin' You chumps'r lost in hysteria, but if you lookin for war, I got you, You in my area and you should beware of a, killa round here, said to dig up your dirt'n use it to bury ya. Declarin a, war with Big, You got problems. I'm non stoppin. It's bombs droppin And now that I'm on Lev n Squats squadron, y'all better fear Syn, like God's watchin. mothafuckas Edited by levy420 - 21 July 2016 at 9:48pm |
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AshleyKaos
Standard Member Joined: 11 October 2013 Status: Offline Points: 2511 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 28-63-3 Form: LWLLNQ |
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Dope
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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Exoduzt
Superior Member NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW |
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Ash you need to drop more and better feedback than that!...ill be dropping mine tomorrow...strong looking crew
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Crimson Juice
Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW |
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Whoa,you guys really stamped Syns return here,and to be fair you all
came correct, Ridley I liked your contents here,and the tempo was ripe,I thought you brought a decent verse,and towards the end,the he way you handed it over to Levy like you was passing him a pen to continue was a nice touch,i liked it,good drop.. Levy,we still need to do a collab,I also liked this verse of yours too,carrying on from Ridley and including some of your crews aliases within the piece was cool,as with Ridley I also thought you had some nice content,and your tempo and general feel was good,good work.. Ash as usual you came with some aggression which I like,it makes a verse when in text have a soul so to speak,it's a raw emotion that is often over looked,but adds to the content Overal,it gives a drop meaning,and in a sense validates what your expressing,good work girl.. Bakardi,I must say I do like your in the face approach here,although technically not the strongest verse ever,it still has a place within this crew drop,now don't get me twisted,when I say technically,cuz what it lacks in word choices it makes up for it in rawness,this was a decent addition Overal,and your vocab does convey a message,(don't fuck with us),i also liked this piece.. Big Game,i noticed your skill in your short time in AE,you seemed to to complement Bakardi's and Ash's verse well,I also like the way you hold on to a grudge,(Slip/Droid) and your tempo/contents was also on the decent side of things,I like your tenacious spirt,good work.. Overal,this was impressive as crew drops go,I believe you all came with the goods,and it shows the work Levy and Ridley have put in in reviving this crew is remarkable,as this crew was truly at death door a few months back,well done guys,and in Syns case,I guess your 2 ethics paid off well,now reap the rewards..peace. |
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Goryo.
Groupie Joined: 28 June 2016 Status: Offline Points: 431 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-4-0 Form: LWLWLW |
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Dope. I enjoy a good crew drop, none of the verses were weak or even average. Everyone came hard and meshed well with each other. The vibe of the drop didn't change at all. Ridley - Awesome flow and multis. I liked all the plays on 'syn' and I thought it was fitting for the first section of the first verse. It suited its position setting the tone for the rest, and it really hit hard. in the depths of a fortress, in leaden-lined boxes labelled "God Help Us All If Ever Defrosted" So be expecting the mob hits, as we settle our conflicts Defending our dogs with, the vengeance of John Wick ^ Stand out. Especially the 'God help us all' line. Levy - good job taking the ball and not dropping it. As I said before you all meshed well but the transition to your verse was definitely a highlight. Rhyming and creativity were on point but there were a couple of played lines and choppy sections flow wise. Maybe it was the way I read it but still strong regardless. Ashley - I enjoyed the creativity in your verse, like with rhymes at the start of a line at some sections as well as the usual inners etc. Content wise it went in a few directions which kept me entertained and I would say substance is one of your strongest points. A couple played concepts and filler in there but they did fit into their place and serve their purpose. Another strong verse. Bakardi - Smooth and coherent however it was a little plain compared to the rest. You've got a vet type structure and flow etc but the verse lacked any impactful lines or quotables etc. It was still a good verse though and it did have a cocky kind of swagger to it. Big Game - Substantial, aggressive and creative. I'll start off by saying that some lines are a little stretched but on text that isn't much of an issue for most readers. Just personal taste I guess but inners and multis kept the flow consistent. I was feeling the vibe, like establishing dominance, especially with the dig towards Slip in there. Some good punches like the cross one and bury one (very similar to a line I've written so I can definitely appreciate it lol - don't worry it doesn't exist online so that is not an accusation) Once again though, you all gel with each other really well. I'd like to see more crew drops from you even on the same kind of topic. |
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Lord Puente
Newbie Final Boss Joined: 05 July 2016 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1814 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-2-0 Form: LWWWLW |
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ridley squat, levy420 ashleykaos Bakardi big game over all order in regards to who i thoguht did best |
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levy420
Superior Member Joined: 22 May 2013 Location: San Antonio TX Status: Offline Points: 3443 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 39-33-4 Form: LWWLLN |
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Thanks for the feed an extensive breakdowns appreciate it
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Concrete
Standard Member Joined: 02 September 2013 Location: Oslo Status: Offline Points: 1418 Crew: Tha Syndicate Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 33-6-0 Form: WWWWWW |
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Coming down from the voyage to give my clan some food..
Ridley, you got really tight schemes going on man. The opening bars was clever,ly set up and you followed up the restnicely. I like how unpredictable you are with your angles, stay up. Fav bar: Centred and spot-lit, as we enter the mosh pit Turn the Pentagon Office to American Gothic Levy, you have a very gnarly style to use a skaters term. It's like a mix of old britcore and grimey NY shit. Concepts al over the plae but you somehow pull it all together in aunison and sort of cohesive way. It's raw for sure. Fav bar; a rhetorical question at least that's my synopsis Verse lined with more force then atomic bomb hits Bar god spit, hypnotic rise to top quick, obnoxious Ashley, good to see you still progressing further. Aggressive as alway tho it seems you flex a stronger grip on more advanced vocab usage. My only critics here is to tone down with all the capitalisation. Fav bar: Burned by Syn's Inferno wid Fire Bars Like Our Mouth's Vomiting Flame Genocide of These Lames Committin Murder Like Waves of Bubonic Plague Bakardi, you're style reminds of levi in some ways. Tho you utilise a more simple approach with concepts, looks like this was written to a beat? Either way, feeling the aggro vibes here also, my advice here is try to swith up the rhymes more and add a punch or 2 Still good shit and a nice addition to the team. Fav bar: we be workin the legs, got you by the toe while you was tryin to flex rippin out your fucking heart for displaying your pecs Big Game, I dunno where you been the last years but your pen seems sharper than before. It's just so direct, in your face and beyond. I also noticed how you mix very well blunt statements with witty jabs and punches. You def get the LA beef-o-meter in overdrive. Fav bar: Me n the crew chillin, smooth sailing, like we out on a battleship. complacent, patient, waiting for a hatin assailant doubtin our craftsmanship. Yeah, you know I dug this project, and next time I'm in for sure. |
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BIG GAME
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Thanks to everybody who gave feedback on this.
It's much appreciated. We put some effort into this piece. And thanks to Levy for orchestrating this whole thing. But I'm staring to think that most the crews on LA (these days) must have a new written rule within their crew forum which states: don't give feedback to other crews??? I don't know. Just seems that way. I mean, if one of you crews think you are too good. we could always settle our differences the ol fashioned way jus sayin .. |
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Endeavor
Senior Moderator Wiggle wiggle said the bun that jiggle Joined: 03 April 2009 Location: Your kitchen Status: Offline Points: 10000102 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 5-4-0 Form: WWLWLW |
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Nah, Big. I don't leave feed if I'm not on a PC. I like to take my time, have a nice layout and shit.
I'll feed this soon, though. |
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#Bananas
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BIG GAME
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For sure Endeavor. Not directed at you at all. My impression of you has been: very humble and laid back. I see you giving constant feedback. I appreciate ya bro. |
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Neek
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Dimley Thought:
Syn's back! From zygotic inception to iconic collection Syn 'tax. With prose in flows too psychotic to mention Synapse? All fire off to perfection with cyclonic aggression Cos Syn didn't Nap ... just in cryonic suspension this was a nice little stanza. dug the scheme. for shame no Sinbad lines tho. shame shame shame. in the depths of a fortress, in leaden-lined boxes labelled "God Help Us All If Ever Defrosted" So be expecting the mob hits, as we settle our conflicts Defending our dogs with, the vengeance of John Wick Centred and spot-lit, as we enter the mosh pit Turn the Pentagon Office to American Gothic Every sentence that Squat spits', the essence of hot shit And they never can stop this ... 4-20 you got this? nice hand off. rhymes were onpoint. never seen John Wick but with the manner he is referenced im assuming Keanu goes all Liam Nelson. I thought the squat play coulda been tied together smoother. "even when a bitch cop a squat it's - ".. adds more bounce to the flow and gives a double entandre. but alas... you a beast with this shit. well done chap, pip pip Levy9/11: a rhetorical question at least that's my synopsis Verse lined with more force then atomic bomb hits Bar god spit, hypnotic rise to top quick, obnoxious kaos sykotic line up changed with a squad shift this was rhyme heavy for sure, but kept the content. nice opener. Syn's back god's gift, 420 swift, riddles nauseous Mob shit, Mc's get nibbled to bits, one flick of the wrist This isn't a glitch, step up, figure we bitch Beat you're ass with a switch, fast as lickety split Snap stick figures or thick, behemoth's with wit's Metaphorically sick, similes slick, like a Tarantino script hrm. not sold on this last line. re-arranging would bring it out more. 'metaphorically sick, Tarantino Script like - the similes slick' and the line before, thick sticks? but I did like the barrage. was very rapid fire. felt the energy, can tell you meant the shit. Syn city's reservoir dogs kick more ruthless hits then pulp fic Bakardi n game in the click, fix ya lips or get ya repertoire ripped like bong hits ....CHRONIC... excellent closer. the tie ins were well placed. good shit bro. AshleyKrayons: "BOW" Return of Syndicate to Vindicate our status of the Highest Placement "POW" Verse Indicate's that Syn Droppin Sicknin' Set's the rest are just basic Team Of Greatness Trumpin these Failures Like Campaign Mate's of Kasich Might as well Say it, we Spit like Arson lines Blazin and no one can tame it im not familiar with Kasich, but like Ridley, the manner in which you carry the bar explains it. I think if I have to google something, its already lost appeal..so good on you with writing that bar because even tho im unfamiliar I caught it. The Trump tie really helped me out a great deal. I liked the tame/fire play. was missing a "wild' reference tho to really get it going. but put together well none the less. New Queen of LA Reppin' Syndicate like we were born with Parliamental Royalties Squad's far from Ordinary Sewing Certain Defeat Into peasants with Embroidaries Burned by Syn's Inferno wid Fire Bars Like Our Mouth's Vomiting Flame Genocide of These Lames Committin Murder Like Waves of Bubonic Plague another solid section of ties. the fire play lost appeal as you just ran with the scheme a few bars up. but I dug the last one. We Go so Hard, no soft Roster still bustin out hits like Mike Bubble't Best by Far, Smooth Talkers Running this shit so were always gettin paid Killing Shit like this flow is Homicidal, Divine like reading the Bible Chilling isnt it? Better Prey for survival cause we murder each rival only advice I can offer, if you use a theme, try not to re-use. you did the murder with the plague. in such a short space, its very standout-ish. in a longer verse might not be as blatant. but you piece shit together real well. Batari: You better come correct, or better yet come with checks Yall talkin bars Syn stay with them bayonets Words cut deep, but we barely even break a sweat you aint gonna make it very far deliverin all those vacant threats probably the most straight forward of the bunch. I didnt get the correlation on 'talking bars' and 'bayonets' or 'very far' and 'vacant threats'.. 'we slay with a crazy set, syn cut records like bayonets' some sort of tie together. I do get that you keep a 'straight forward approach'..but I didnt see the unity. super bad bitches make em quick to undress we be pullin all the bitches that you tried to finesse you tried to impress, with rhymin skills that you thought you posess but it aint hard to tell that yall workin with less this was cool. it all went together in a solid theme. not the most over the top shit, but it worked for sure. we be workin the legs, got you by the toe while you was tryin to flex rippin out your fucking heart for displaying your pecs im done dealin with stress, I think I proved my point about who really is best im done being angry for awhile, right now im just keepin it blessed. well there you have it. DIG CHANGE: BIG GAME'S BACK!!! Now watch these lames yack, to me, they'll say "You illin!" And aye it's true, cos Triz Tre's my dude, but BG's - LA's True Villain... Me n the crew chillin, smooth sailing, like we out on a battleship. complacent, patient, waiting for a hatin assailant doubtin our craftsmanship. I liked this for an opener. the slant on the tandem 'out on a battleship/doutbin out craftsmanship' was cool. I like shit you dont typically see. DEATH CAN HAPPEN QUICK! My whole squad's heavy hitters. from Levy, Zin to, Crete to Rid ya, better STOP!! and go check the figures ... It's like I'm ambidextrous, cos I'm, always right, yet the left'll split ya Killa ... with the, hectic scriptures, which ah, summons death to get ya. so never be a hoe like Droid and throw a fucken bitch fit. Cos one attack from me and you could disappear like Slip did. I liked the subtle transitions on the start of the stanza. it wasnt nothing where I was like whoaaa..but it was schemed well. I thought the nod to your current beef was a nice touch. shows that you arent just braggin' you bout dat action, jackson. the crew namedrops were a cool touch. definitely missing some tho. dropped'm a simple diss and, no one seen him since then. He acted Godly, tried to 'cross me', so I left and went direct to synnin' liked the wordplay. You chumps'r lost in hysteria, but if you lookin for war, I got you, You in my area and you should beware of a, killa round here, said to dig up your dirt'n use it to bury ya. Declarin a, war with Big, You got problems. I'm non stoppin. It's bombs droppin And now that I'm on Lev n Squats squadron, y'all better fear Syn, like God's watchin. mothafuckas same thing with Ash.. a religion play that close together I dunno. but you kept a thorough scheme throughout. pretty much how a posse cut should be. flag wavin and war drums. |
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Ridley Squat
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SinBad ... but with ebonic inflection, or ironic intention So there you go ... can I have my sig back now? |
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Ridley Squat
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And big ups everyone for their comments.
Good stuff guys. |
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levy420
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That Sig fits you well rids an neek appreciate the feed but who's levy9/11
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Exoduzt
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Ridley: Opening 2 bars were a great way to open it up. Vocab was on point and the flow was sick. nice mix of the two. Conflicts to mosh pits was pure flames. I felt like it came so effortlessly. thats how it read at least. Also liked how you set up levy in ya final line. that crew shit.
Levy: It took me a few reads to catch ya flow. I found it eventually and it reminded me of some old school wu tang shit. The way it was set up to what you were actually saying. The rhyme scheme was cool but I'd like to see you use your topical rhyme scheme in a drop like this. Thatd be dope. I loved the ripped like bong hits line. That was a dope finisher. This is all I got time for tonight...I'll give the other writers on this joint my feedback tomorrow
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BIG GAME
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We appreciate the feedback to everyone who replied.
especially the extensive breakdowns. Thanks. |
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