Open Mic: The Return of Jaz-Cat (keystyle session) |
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Jaz-Cat
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Posted: 15 February 2017 at 9:55pm |
This is Jaz-Cat Old-school bars comin' up, let's go! Hustlin' ma roots, wit da heavy pen, I'm back... Scufflin' da boots, upped ma jots, fined sack... (Prom in thee S) munched da boulders, dime pack... Slumbin' da best ain't none to what you find wack... I keep ma life real, pure old-school, comp'n God... (Call yo' bus short) wrecking crews, Stomp The Yard... 80's baby, realness to ma core (loo'ing G)... Eye on ma prizes in da 'lore, tuition... Ain't over but I bounce... Ma rolex be running out over da waiting line... Clippers in ma saggin' pants be reppin' '89 #OldSchool #RealOffTheTop Prom in thee S = Prometheus of old-school TV show Call yo' bus short = Columbus Short, main star in Stomp The Yard Loo'ing G = Luigi from 1985 old-school game Super Mario Bros. #Respect
Edited by Jaz-Cat - 15 February 2017 at 10:53pm |
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alicewonder
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I feel like this is one of those pieces which can be very enjoyable when presented as a track, but it lacked the impact on me in its text form. I thoroughly liked the scheme you had here, though, especially in the beginning. It's also rather short. I can appreciate the creativity behind the wordplays, but some of them just seemed a bit far fetched to me, like the columbus short one. Nice work overall, though.
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Jaz-Cat
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A'ight I get ya drift homie. If it was me spittin' wit ma voice, it'd be dope, right?
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DressToKill
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I think you need to get away from the hood style, I'd like to see you go head first into something personal in your life. I always find that the personal aspects help more detail come out in the writing. When you find something worth really writing about I think we'll really see an improvement in the content
Keep at it dude
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The original comeback kid
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JackBarz
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Yo Yo JC I got mad respect fo'Ya MY G,maybe cus I'm also a keystyle kat,lol..sometimes as rap kats we gotta be honest,that's what it is man,rhyme schemes came off for me okay It was short buh straight to the point tho!keep writing my G soon You gon be dropping hay makers word holmes!
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Jaz-Cat
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I'll keep keystyling and jotting bars in here, I ain't flipping y'all heads about me staying in Lyrical Assault, that's fo' real
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CHAIN
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What's with the stereotypical 90's sitcom hippidy hop persona?
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Jaz-Cat
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You new-school lookin' kid, I ain't feeling you. Peace out, son
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Exoduzt
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you trolling the site?..whats with the gimmick?
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rhetorical
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#the80sdidnthavehashtags
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Jaz-Cat
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Exoduzt, I ain't trolling. No gimmicks dawg
Rhetorical lol a'ight next time
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iLL ScriptureZ
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TBH shit was corny... and I hate how you type. To me you sound a lot like this bum around my way who thinks he's cool. He's like 45 and and just is fucking awkward. But you're repping '89 which is the same year I was born.. so I find this even more awkward. Lastly, the bars really made no sense to me. Even tho a keystyle can float away at least make the lines connect. Wordplay was dumb forced as well...keep writin' but the whole act feels forced.
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Sammy
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yo he said "prom in thee s" lmao!!!
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JackBarz
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Lol...@Sammy
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