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Nigma
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Posted: 20 June 2018 at 12:46am |
The Two of Pentacles Life is but a silhouette. Wait, let me elaborate Ignites and then it fizzles, its existence has it’s place Phantoms of the shade, seeking vengeance and pain Light contends with it’s great rays. Empty and a passive state. If walls could talk, it’s speech is draped and blemished with stains I’ve reached an equilibrium. I’m flexing it’s weight Yet feeling hollow from the cost since my sentience drained On this feeble mission, stricken and repenting for days Think back to Easter dinners, now sit drenched in disdain Sheets are tipped with liquids that make squeamish sick Stiffly in this leaned position, victim to an endless debate Think back to work overshadowing all friendship and play The unbalanced proportions between pleasure and pain Compare and then contrast until you feather the grey Most see evil when a blast’s depicted, instead they create. But, Destruction, microdosing it is known to create candid pictures So cups of coffee copious to compensate for bad conditions I’ll paddle friendless, afraid. I must prevail to correct the score If you can’t change the wind, just adjust your sails to perfect the course Still theres... Fear in the distance, bacteria combusts I was too materialistic, not material enough Benevolence is delicate, ethereal to touch Separate my body, mind and spirit, it’s a must Before I, Drift from the heavens eclipse with depression Existence is drifting with Icarus feathers So give me atonement. Whip me with leather Rid me of sins on a Biblical effort But belief can blind a Marxist, it ensnares and holds It’s a cycle, light and darkness, I was sunburnt, now pale and cold Ailments grow, collapsing organs imminent, the trail ends close It’s apples to oranges.. More important, both are stale and old Nailed my soul for crucifixion. Lessons from the dead will haunt it Basking in my loneliness, confessing from my bed in hospice |
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Neek
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you got two pentacles huh? well fella. I got two dilemmas.
first one being.. I cant stand you because you rap good. second one being.. I can stand you because you rap good. Most see evil when a blast’s depicted, instead they create. But, Destruction, microdosing it is known to create candid pictures So cups of coffee copious to compensate for bad conditions and the biblical efforts bit.. both need their own gifs, emojis and meme. good stuff bro. love how well your style has changed since youve gone vocal. it used to be a million multies a second.. now its flavor filled substance with subtle twists and turns. bravo. but fuck you. dot com. |
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rhetorical
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dope shit nigma, man. . . .this little transition right here . . .
fuggin sick bro! the only line in all of this was worded a bit akward to me was "Sheets are tipped with liquids that make squeamish sick" everything else was top notch. Very surreal writing. I can sense the desperation and despair as this poor woman is coming on her final days and coming to terms with dying and her relationship with God. Im not a religious person, but i personally tie in alot of my writing to God, i just like to explore that relationship from different angles when the topic revolves around death or anger, so were very similar in approach to that regard. This was a nice entry here man, glad i made it by to check this one out. Keep it up fam.
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daydizzle89
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Drift from the heavens eclipse with depression
Existence is drifting with Icarus feathers So give me atonement. Whip me with leather Rid me of sins on a Biblical effort _________________________________ If you would have put "Ride my dick on a biblical effort" I would have voted this Verse of the century. Overall Typical Nigma, your assonance on every drop is top tier. You make subtle vocabulary pop and end each bar with punani flow I must say, you have what it takes to be on Americas got Talent and get the GOLDEN BUZZER. Great drop here. You still got that swag juice
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Dave Infinite
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this was really dope. Some imagery and the content wad straight.
Think back to Easter dinners, now sit drenched in disdain Sheets are tipped with liquids that make squeamish sick Stiffly in this leaned position, victim to an endless debate Think back to work overshadowing all friendship and play The unbalanced proportions between pleasure and pain You definitely have a pen game.
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SupaDupa
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“If walls could talk,it’s speech is draped n blemished with stains”..Fcuk ...from da top to bottom it’s a masterpiece fo me...excellent use of words n great imagery...that’s right.
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