Open Mic: They Remember - [Vellum/Nigma]

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    Posted: 06 October 2019 at 7:01pm

[VELLUM]

Lyrical Assault bro we fuckin you up

I stay repping LA like throwing W’s up!! 

Know we cutting you up leaving all of you dead

We got everything from textcees to Audio heads!

If you’re into to hip hop than rush here in a hurry 

I ain’t talkin lawyers but u can come here for attorney! (A tourney)

I punch queers with a flurry to leave those sucker life less

Punks who try this know I got suntin “FORUM” sort of like “This site is!”

My puns is priceless ... shit, Vic is a beast 

My shit is unique and a little bit deep 

When I’m ripping a beat I’m as grim as the reap 

Leaving bitches sunned like a chick on the beach!

I’m quick to let a middle finger flip at a leach

Nigma and Me will disfigure a figure of speech!

If it’s within my reach that means I’m taking it fuck it

I feel like “DJ FLAME” the way “I’m makin a production!”


[NIGMA]

Spook em with the WE DA BEST shit

Proof is in the schemes we mess with

Grew to super humans with the tutelage of predecessors 

Fuel for a fiend is just a need to use the weak as weapons

That's why we compete, and each emcees we meet gets beat to Heaven

We may seem demented, equal essence, good and evil blended

Demon meets the Reverend, bleeding blessings have conceived ascension

Secret to success, be neat and tethered like a seamstress edges

Some may say we're dumb for diving in since we're too deep to measure

Teaches us to step and reach dimensions as we seek the treasure

Jeez, this schemes been deaded, bring it back like Jesus credit

Beasts with vengeance, spectacles, forever hold the lethal setting

Since we massacre the art, Jurassic Park but this the Easter edit

Punches turning meat to veggies, breathe their essence, ease my stresses

Preach prophetic when the greens ingested like I'm eating lettuce

And I’ll keep the heat till theres no beef to send me like a vegans wedding



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This was dope.

Vellum, I liked your Relentless multies and it flowed a beast. "Me and Nigma will disfigure a figure of speech" Shit hot. I liked the "Forum" play but the bar was stretched, other than that flawless.


Nigma, also dope. I liked the scheme you had going and it was structured nice.
"We may seem demented, equal essence, good and evil blended
Demon meets the Reverend, bleeding blessings have conceived ascension"
That's was my favourite bar, vivid.

Good work from the both of you, Nice drop.

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Vellum.

OK firstly not a fan of the use of "up" in the opening 3 lines, especially when there
is no inner rhyme scheme to carry it off, now with that out the way i also felt that
your flow in parts was a little shakey, this would of been icy if you had a tighter
rhyme scheme crackin', however when you was on it (flow wise) it had an heavy
element attached within your wordplay was cool also, i really prefer the 2nd half
as to the 1st part, you seem to hit a stride there, it came off as nonchalant and
aggressive, so i did like this drop, but in truth in parts, thankfully there was more
pluses than negatives so nice work...peace.


Mr Niggles.

A very old school vibe i was feeling here, like I was reminiscing or having a mom-
ent from a time past, (like the old battle scenario of the late 80's/early 90's, where
the weakest was booed off stage) that what I was getting on reading, you also had
this very loose rhyme scheme popping, it read like you had a certain freedom, it
didn't read regimented or restricted, your wordplay was also nice, but for a different
reason you went the simile route which like Vell's play on actual the word was nice,
good to read a drop from you again nice work..

Peace.
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before you can dare make an entrance".
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Vellum Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 October 2019 at 12:44am
Thanks for the feed, I appreciate it. I agree with the criticism and I didn't even notice the up three times thing. That's what happens when I type a verse in 10 minutes. I just wanted to do 4 bars and have Nigma follow but in a matter of 10 minutes I had a 16 so I just sent what I had. I'm still glad it happened cuz Nigma killed it.
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Good to see you two still at it...

Vellum - This was the kind of thing I would expect from you, it was written like an audio verse with nice punchlines and your quality as a battler was very obvious. The tourney/forum lines were cool.

Nigma - This was a great verse and the tutelage of predecessors line really stood out to me. It used to be a standard thing that people would come here and develop their skills by learning from the best. Shame it doesn't happen too much any more. Anyway, nice drop and kudos for keeping the same rhymescheme throughout - you've always been one of the best at doing that.
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Thought this was great and quite fun to read. Plus a Nigma verse is usually nice.

Vellum:

Don’t think I seen your work before, but as it’s mentioned already, this was definitely made for audio. Especially the beginning had a nice, echoing feel to it with the repetitions and variations of “up”, seemed done nicely overall. Also lots of little highlights like the “figure of speech” and forum one.

Nigma:

This was amazing throughout. Never lost momentum especially considering the consistency of the scheme you employed. So the “scheme’s been deaded” is a nice inclusion here. I’d list highlights but really, lots of references and plays were great. The beginning was one of favourites. Thanks for sharing.
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