Open Mic: Time to settle the score

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    Posted: 06 September 2017 at 9:09pm
Fuck it, its time for some truth....

Psycological fears tearing the brain apart
Rememberance day of childhood pain how my day would start
Smash mirrors n pictures, despising my look
Cover cuts an bruises, everyday reminded im shook
Can't even pray for some help never believing in faith
All skin an bones but it adds more fat when seeing my waist
Conceeding im waste, a mistimed accidental mistake
He shoulda pulled, never had a son, semen on face no trace
True story no fakes, they say speakin' out all that it takes
Silently screaming for help but psychologically fallin' no breaks....fuck sake
Close my eyes n see a younger me badly clothed n fed
Hidden by a fake smiling father, kev's so cute the foes had said
Happy child in public, left with no marks to show
They knew of his drink n drugs, but "he loved us"....apart from blows
The young me on my shoulder, not a weak child anymore
No need to hide anymore, wont settle till he's divided an sore

...Time to settle the score...
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This was an okay abuse piece. Some lines were smooth while others, to me, felt wordy. I can relate to the topic and content wise, you were selling in the sense of making us feel the child's emotional, mental and physical pains. That was the shining part of the topical. 
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Originally posted by Kay B Kay B wrote:


Smash mirrors n pictures, despising my look
Cover cuts an bruises, everyday reminded im shook
 
too real.

Can't even pray for some help never believing in faith
All skin an bones but it adds more fat when seeing my waist
 
you went to sleep real and you woke up realer

Conceeding im waste, a mistimed accidental mistake
He shoulda pulled, never had a son, semen on face no trace
 
whoa

True story no fakes, they say speakin' out all that it takes
Silently screaming for help but psychologically fallin' no breaks....fuck sake
 
got a lil bit too wordy there, but dope.


Happy child in public, left with no marks to show
They knew of his drink n drugs, but "he loved us"....apart from blows
 
[N.O.R.E voice] mmmmmmmmmm!

The young me on my shoulder, not a weak child anymore
No need to hide anymore, wont settle till he's divided an sore

...Time to settle the score...
Ouch
 
Emo King season has returned.
+Sick-Witted+
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Props appreciate the feed
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