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Freeda5thDawg
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Topic: Not A Day Goes By (Three 16's) Posted: 25 February 2008 at 9:09pm |
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not a day goes by - without me writing a rhyme- - finding the time to climb in my mind - designing a line- - trying to bind the crying for life - to literature- - a sinner who's cured by the purest scripture he turned... to when he written a verse - used to listen and learn... from niggas who worked to fit in the worst position in earth- - fishin' for words in addition to descriptions of dirt... they lived in, it hurt - to vision a victim hit with a bird- - whistle or chirp through the nerves - it's the way we fight- - in this game of life - play despite the "might" for the day we die- - praying might soothe the spirit - others use the liquid... in liquor or choose to mix it with two more spliffs and... this isn't the way - but shit, if it fades a bit of the pain- - i rather hit it and blaze than stay grippin' a gauge- - wishin' a day will trip in my way - where i'm hittin' a stage- - liftin' the praise for the lyrics i state - spitten with grace- -
not a day goes by - without me smilin' for somethin'- - though the while i'm just frontin' when this style is for nothin'- - pilin' my junk in a sheet - sunk in a beat- - touchin' on deep subjects that mean somethin' to me- - 'fore i stumble between a tunnel that gleams- - my tongue will concieve a lung full of dreams the sun couldn't cease- - it's for the rumble in streets - leave'em humble in peace- - no more struggle to breathe or hustle to reach a bundle of green- - we are crumbs who will link to fill this crust- - they've killed enough - i spill this skill to build a trust- - real enough to heal the lust drilled in us- - cause we revealed the dust - but concealed the brush- - so i peel the dutch to fill my lungs with reasons to fight- - it's weak but it's right to beat these demons inside- - a beast on the mic - but teaching the right lessons- - keeping the mics blessed with meaning in my message- -
not a day goes by - without me wanting more- - for i've seen a lot of poor painted in the art of war- - on the floor - hearts are torn from the start of scorn- - bodies thrown like garbage so afar in shore- - we are the forms of life that tarnished more than rights- - like daughters born with lies and start as whore than wives- - the pardon Lord invites with has spiked kids with a mind- - they'll always be forgiven so they get in the rivet of crime- - their vision is blind - the men and women who tried... to fix it were tied in gimmicks for riches grippin' their lives- - and this is just a bit of the rhyme - nothin' more, nothin' less- - i come to pour from the chest - somethin' for what is left- - we're stuck in war, lustin' sex - drunk and poor, bustin' techs- - clutchin' swords, cuttin' flesh - must i sort up the rest?- - what i warn must progress - throughout this land- - even if i threw out my plan and blew out the chance- -
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SpellBound
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Posted: 25 February 2008 at 10:14pm |
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This was ill man, flow was dope as usual. I liked how you tied the title into the beginning of each verse, and how each one had a different direction. You gonna record this by any chance?
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 25 February 2008 at 10:27pm |
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it was written to a beat...so it's 99.9 possibility...but recording is tough for me cause i get lil opportunities at the moment...thanks for the feed man...
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SageOne
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Posted: 25 February 2008 at 11:40pm |
Freeda...record this shit! I'll buy you a mic and mail it to you, shit.
This was dope...Not too many opens I see ever have a flow like yours...I can appreciate a good flow when I see one, and this...my dude...was ill. I tend to obsess over multies in my shit, and it looks like I'm not the only one. Big ups Freeda....Big ups.
i rather hit it and blaze than stay grippin' a gauge- -"
"this isn't the way - but shit, if it fades a bit of the pain- -
Probably one of my favorite bars...you're always comin correct freeda.
Each little "chunk" of this was dope...I tend to knod off with some of these open mics, but I actually enjoyed this one from the first to the last word. Keep em comin, and I'll be watchin for the audio. 1
Edited by SageOne - 25 February 2008 at 11:42pm
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Freeda5thDawg
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Posted: 26 February 2008 at 1:42pm |
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haha, send it now man...thanks alot for the feedback...yup, multis is a big obsession for me, glad you liked it...
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teken8996
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Posted: 08 March 2008 at 8:12pm |
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Hey Freeda 5th where do you live? if US.. whats ur address
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Fatal
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Posted: 09 March 2008 at 12:56pm |
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^Wtf?....
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Rameez
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Posted: 09 March 2008 at 1:00pm |
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LOL ??? shake head..
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teken8996
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Posted: 09 March 2008 at 5:29pm |
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y u hatin i want to hear him on the mic....
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Rameez
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Posted: 09 March 2008 at 6:04pm |
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lol its not hate, it's really weird askin someone's address like this..
Edited by Rameez - 09 March 2008 at 6:04pm
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