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Not A Day Goes By (Three 16's)

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    Posted: 25 February 2008 at 9:09pm
not a day goes by - without me writing a rhyme- -
finding the time to climb in my mind - designing a line- -
trying to bind the crying for life - to literature- -
a sinner who's cured by the purest scripture he turned...
to when he written a verse - used to listen and learn...
from niggas who worked to fit in the worst position in earth- -
fishin' for words in addition to descriptions of dirt...
they lived in, it hurt - to vision a victim hit with a bird- -
whistle or chirp through the nerves - it's the way we fight- -
in this game of life - play despite the "might" for the day we die- -
praying might soothe the spirit - others use the liquid...
in liquor or choose to mix it with two more spliffs and...
this isn't the way - but shit, if it fades a bit of the pain- -
i rather hit it and blaze than stay grippin' a gauge- -
wishin' a day will trip in my way - where i'm hittin' a stage- -
liftin' the praise for the lyrics i state - spitten with grace- -

not a day goes by - without me smilin' for somethin'- -
though the while i'm just frontin' when this style is for nothin'- -
pilin' my junk in a sheet - sunk in a beat- -
touchin' on deep subjects that mean somethin' to me- -
'fore i stumble between a tunnel that gleams- -
my tongue will concieve a lung full of dreams the sun couldn't cease- -
it's for the rumble in streets - leave'em humble in peace- -
no more struggle to breathe or hustle to reach a bundle of green- -
we are crumbs who will link to fill this crust- -
they've killed enough - i spill this skill to build a trust- -
real enough to heal the lust drilled in us- -
cause we revealed the dust - but concealed the brush- -
so i peel the dutch to fill my lungs with reasons to fight- -
it's weak but it's right to beat these demons inside- -
a beast on the mic - but teaching the right lessons- -
keeping the mics blessed with meaning in my message- -

not a day goes by - without me wanting more- -
for i've seen a lot of poor painted in the art of war- -
on the floor - hearts are torn from the start of scorn- -
bodies thrown like garbage so afar in shore- -
we are the forms of life that tarnished more than rights- -
like daughters born with lies and start as whore than wives- -
the pardon Lord invites with has spiked kids with a mind- -
they'll always be forgiven so they get in the rivet of crime- -
their vision is blind - the men and women who tried...
to fix it were tied in gimmicks for riches grippin' their lives- -
and this is just a bit of the rhyme - nothin' more, nothin' less- -
i come to pour from the chest - somethin' for what is left- -
we're stuck in war, lustin' sex - drunk and poor, bustin' techs- -
clutchin' swords, cuttin' flesh - must i sort up the rest?- -
what i warn must progress -  throughout this land- -
even if i threw out my plan and blew out the chance- -

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Post Options Post Options   Quote SpellBound Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2008 at 10:14pm
This was ill man, flow was dope as usual. I liked how you tied the title into the beginning of each verse, and how each one had a different direction. You gonna record this by any chance?
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Freeda5thDawg Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2008 at 10:27pm
it was written to a beat...so it's 99.9 possibility...but recording is tough for me cause i get lil opportunities at the moment...thanks for the feed man...
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Post Options Post Options   Quote SageOne Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 February 2008 at 11:40pm
Freeda...record this shit! I'll buy you a mic and mail it to you, shit.
This was dope...Not too many opens I see ever have a flow like yours...I can appreciate a good flow when I see one, and this...my dude...was ill. I tend to obsess over multies in my shit, and it looks like I'm not the only one. Big ups Freeda....Big ups.

i rather hit it and blaze than stay grippin' a gauge- -"
"this isn't the way - but shit, if it fades a bit of the pain- -
 
Probably one of my favorite bars...you're always comin correct freeda.
 
Each little "chunk" of this was dope...I tend to knod off with some of these open mics, but I actually enjoyed this one from the first to the last word. Keep em comin, and I'll be watchin for the audio. 1


Edited by SageOne - 25 February 2008 at 11:42pm
"Apostrophes don't mean "holy shit, here comes an S!"
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Freeda5thDawg Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 February 2008 at 1:42pm
haha, send it now man...thanks alot for the feedback...yup, multis is a big obsession for me, glad you liked it...
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Post Options Post Options   Quote teken8996 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 08 March 2008 at 8:12pm
Hey Freeda 5th where do you live?
if US.. whats ur address
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Fatal Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 March 2008 at 12:56pm
^Wtf?....
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Rameez Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 March 2008 at 1:00pm
LOL ??? shake head.. 
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Post Options Post Options   Quote teken8996 Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 March 2008 at 5:29pm
y u hatin i want to hear him on the mic.... 
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Post Options Post Options   Quote Rameez Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 09 March 2008 at 6:04pm
lol its not hate, it's really weird askin someone's address like this.. 

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