Open Mic: Just 4 The Sake Of Nonsense

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    Posted: 03 March 2016 at 8:35pm
I don't give a fuck what you think you see
Not a single one of you bastards are gonna surpass me
Bet you thought you'd never ever see my ass again
But I'm back and now I'm twice as whacky as Eminem
"So where the fucks Kim?"
I wanna stick my tongue in that ass, eat her snatch
Forgot the condom so I hope no more eggs hatch
If they do I'll perform the fucking abortion myself
Hell y the fuck not, shit, doesn't everyone else?
"No?"
oh well, then I guess it really is just me
Is it still gay to fuck a guy if he acts like a pussy
Is it wrong to think of your girlfriends stepmom
when your both in bed
As your Cumming
with both hands on the back of her head.
"Well is it?"
I'll Fucking Shoot her in the cooter, then I'll kiss her cheek
You know the same one that I slap every time she speaks
I like freaky sluts with guns, and crazy cunts with razor blades
Those are the best fucks, and they don't even have to get paid
They just require a shit load of meth X, booze, and bud
Occasionally maybe even a lil bit o blood, why not.
And So what if these bitches are known to have AIDS
At least you don't have to buy any of these dumb cunts a fucking Escalade
HEY!!!!!!

(Hook 2X)

Well I'm back mother fuckers and I'm me
Crazier then ever
I'm straight looney
And if I say something that crosses the line
Would you like a block of cheese to go with your wine


I'm back and I'm wacko, I must be smoking crack oh
Or maybe I'm just lickin the ass crack of some crack hoe
On a back hoe,
And somebodies playing White Walls
As far as I'm concerned. Mr macklefaggot
Can suck on both a my balls.
And fuck going thrift shopping
I much rather be rift dropping
Running my big fat mouth with out any sign of stopping
What's Popping
You ya lil bitch, if you keep yippity yapping
First it's your neck I'll be snapping
Your girls football field size of an ass I'll be slapping.
Hey. Hey
Fuck you bitch why don't you Hey this
Since you like the way my dick taste like piss
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LOL.. The title was funny.. And really disappointing; You're coming up, right? You need feeds, right? Do you think a thread with a topic like this will catch the interest of the members? Next time, you should come up with a better topic, not something like this.. Even if it's a nursery poem, you don't use your own hand to spoilt your own work.



Coming down to the work, you should work on keeping your syllables count at pace(the same or almost) as this would aid in the flow aspect.. Secondly, your inconsistency with rhymes: you should work on that aspect also..

Your wordings- now, just because you're somewhat new or a novice in writing and don't know much vocalbularies to put into your piece does not mean you can't use the ones you know in a very good way(i suggest you read this guy work to see how it's done 'Exodus'.. He's highly skilled and what interest me most about his piece is how he uses basic words to create a fire-flow).. And lastly, try picking a better concept to rap about next time, it will make your work more better especially when the topic deal with facts, about yourself, something touching, etc!.. This wasn't bad but not good either.. Work on your writing, bro!
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Gotta agree here. ^^^




Such a title will have people skipping it over and looking for the next thread. This piece leaves quite a bit to the imagination. It's evident not much thought was put into it, and it's more befitting for an audio piece, than a stand alone one. Cause then at least you have your delivery driving the work from its simplicity. Other than that, it's structured well. Wasn't really feeling the content/subject matter, but that goes back to my previous observation. It's eh for a fuck around piece. Keep at it! 




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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 March 2016 at 10:23pm
maybe im just different..but I liked this.

it had a solid direction, was some straight out the loonie bin shit. I pictured Mikey all hemmed up in a straight jacket with a spitguard trying to kick his legs free.

I felt it delivered really venom filled. the shock value was certaintly present.

the stepmom shit in particular. you stayed over the top the whole time which seemed like the approach.

I dont mind these crazy shits. keep going bananas bro.
#Bananas
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote TittySucker Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 03 March 2016 at 10:41pm
i like this kind of shit too, even if it don't make sense. But this sucks cock because you have no multi's, anything without multi's is considered wack to me, unless your from the 80's or it has some dope ass punchlines to make up for it.
my feedback: get some multis or fuckoff
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Thanks for the feed back I'll rewrite it some what. Thanks NEEK.
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