Open Mic: [OM KING] "A Quick Sixteen to you Bitch Queens"

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    Posted: 12 June 2016 at 6:17am
Law your whack & its a fact that your flow is slow mo to your rivals- 
spinning in circles like netflix loading,  how many times you gonna no show a title...
Neek is my boy, so my deadly spits I guess I won't be givin' the same-
.......Fuck that I'll fuck him up worse than Endev did at that video game!-
plenty of shame, to go around like the 2 pussies who hoe showed,...Nigma & Law-
Cus they couldn't come up with dope lines if they were given a straw-
Cuba acting like hes  gifted & raw,  like hes not missin' the flaws-
His only verse in mad long was against me , my diss musta been pissin' him off- (Golden Era!)
So when I responded  again he went and  just shit in his drawers, Like an infant in awe-
acted like I didn't hurt him twice, and in an instant  he just shifted his gauze-
In heat wave Scotty got 2 votes on me, he still lost but thought he was rhymin' fluid-
challenged me again and when I accepted all of a sudden he didn't have time to do it!-
Ya mind is stupid,  cus I'm the kind of nusance, To find ya 2 cents-
Use it against you so you feel like death, but I'm nice enough to tie your nooses-
I'm hangin'n Art!  Cus for real I need to make sure the picture is perfect-
So what do I 'title it' when I cut him down &   his face 'tags' the 'concrete' ? MISSING HIS PURPOSE-

All in fun homies....


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Dope read duster.

to go around like the 2 pussies who hoe showed,...Nigma & Law-
Cus they couldn't come up with dope lines if they were given a straw-
Cuba acting like hes gifted & raw, like hes not missin' the flaws-
His only verse in mad long was against me , my diss musta been pissin' him off- (Golden Era!)
So when I responded again he went and just shit in his drawers, Like an infant in awe-
acted like I didn't hurt him twice, and in an instant he just shifted his gauze


This shit was dope tbh. Couple parts went off flow could tell this jus a key... But still dope read
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Law your whack & its a fact that your flow is slow mo to your rivals- 
spinning in circles like netflix loading,  how many times you gonna no show a title...
decent start
Neek is my boy, so my deadly spits I guess I won't be givin' the same-
.......Fuck that I'll fuck him up worse than Endev did at that video game!-
cool
plenty of shame, to go around like the 2 pussies who hoe showed,...Nigma & Law-
Cus they couldn't come up with dope lines if they were given a straw-
Cuba acting like hes  gifted & raw,  like hes not missin' the flaws-
His only verse in mad long was against me , my diss musta been pissin' him off- (Golden Era!)
So when I responded  again he went and  just shit in his drawers, Like an infant in awe-
acted like I didn't hurt him twice, and in an instant  he just shifted his gauze-
this was nice segment, flows nice, and some nice shots
In heat wave Scotty got 2 votes on me, he still lost but thought he was rhymin' fluid-
challenged me again and when I accepted all of a sudden he didn't have time to do it!-
Ya mind is stupid,  cus I'm the kind of nusance, To find ya 2 cents-
Use it against you so you feel like death, but I'm nice enough to tie your nooses-
another nice segment shots were heavier in this one
I'm hangin'n Art!  Cus for real I need to make sure the picture is perfect-
So what do I 'title it' when I cut him down &  his face 'tags' the 'concrete' ? MISSING HIS PURPOSE-
i liked the closer went with a more intricate play and it worked well. good shit


I enjoyed this it was put together nicely and i like how your mixing up the "talking to 'em style with more plays intertwined" always good to beef up the arsenal , props

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Endeavor Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 June 2016 at 6:11pm
You know something is the best read when it includes my name in the verse lol. I jest, this was pretty funny and you had some dope lines in it. Can't really give a detailed feedback cuz I'm on the phone right now but this was sweet bro!
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I gotta say exo. out of all the ones so far, this has still remained my favorite. flow was constant. content was really well crafted. but beyond that: it lacked the salt and pent up emotional pain from period strains. you wasnt in your feels, you was just giving the real. I think above all that is what makes a OM King. you craft a certain truth, even if its not absolute. as writing is so subjective, but you painted your assertiveness without being emotional and salty - when you have reasons to be. I truly loved this joint and my favorite line was the one aimed at me. really good man. ten stars out of five.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 19 June 2016 at 6:43am
Flow was insane in this. The multis were on another level. And you had some nm hard punches in there.. I liked this shit.
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Lol niggas just got fucked Yo Axo dope G!
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