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    Posted: 02 January 2017 at 7:43pm
BATTLE ROYALE #3

CONTESTANTS (this is the running order)

#1 Spume Corrupt
#2 S Dubb
#3 Kiki Spirez
#4 Slip
#5 Rutter Knows Best
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Spume Corrupt drops by MIDNIGHT 4th January
S Dubb drops 48hrs later
Voting closes 48hrs after S Dubb drops (or if there is a 3 vote KO / best of 7 applies)

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This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! 
Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me
I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen
Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again
S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it
Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits"
Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude
LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon
Stupid......


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You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In...,
Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks...
You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished...
Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished...
I'll deliver the "L!"  Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League...
I'm smoking this herb!  No roll up needed, Dutch Free...
Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"...
I'm choking this joke,  squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple...

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This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! 
Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me
I fuck with the reference, decent angle. I would of put the even after win.
I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen
Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again
okay reference- felt it coulda been executed concept harsher though 
S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it
Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits"
Didn't like this
Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude
LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon
Had to google doubloon. it ties in okay and the name plays there. could've been tightened up.
Stupid......

Your the champ. I seen better and you know you can do better. First two lines took this for you. It did the job and pretty convincingly. Could of been tweaked a little and would've added a lot still.
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You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In...,
Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks...
Tying in a set up to punch would  of helped here. The fact yur lines are stretched makes this loose weight here
You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished...
Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished...
okay personal in the set but not sure if true. Punch wasn't there though
I'll deliver the "L!"  Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League...
I'm smoking this herb!  No roll up needed, Dutch Free...
nice personal in the set up but you followed it with the most played concept done through the ages
Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"...
I'm choking this joke,  squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple...
Potential in the set up, but just followed wih descriptive text.

Overall there was a pattern to your verse. You fall into the topical hole of doing a lot of describing. You aren't tying in your 1st and 2nd lines. On a personal taste level your punch has more room to work with and carry's a punchier feel when it's longer than your set up. You gotta forget the usual sensibilities of writing a bit and work on the punch. Everything come second to the punchline. 

Vote Spume

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This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely!
Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me
I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen
Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again

(I liked the way you opened here,nothing to heavy I thought,but it still had merit via the
personal attached,so yeah decent first bar,however the 2nd bar was much better,a nice
bit of wordplay/personal which just added extra weight,plus you used the OM he did in a collab with Damage well overall,good punch..)

S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it
Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits"
Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude
LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon

(yep another good personal here but the punch itself read flat really,the wordplay was
good again I thought,it just seemed to lack any real power really still it all counts still,
however you did mess the wordplay up some though,by typing the 2 Ss and then "Hits" lessened the overall blow,I would of just typed "hit" so the 2 Ss would of fitted better,
1 s at the start and 1 at the end,but I do get the angle you was a typing there,I've no
quirms with the play on closing though that was good,a nice punch to end with,the set
up seemed to look redundant at first,but it does tie in on the whole,and to cap it all,the
flow was good too..)



You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In...,
Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks...
You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished...
Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished...

(liked the simile in the first bar there it was quite creative really,stretched/bellies and pregnant chicks,as personals go this was aimed well also,nothing really to heavy as punches go,but still a punch all the same,but the 2nd bar was worded well and again served as a good personal,and the punch for me seemed more of a jab also,it was no
swing or blow..)

I'll deliver the "L!" Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League...
I'm smoking this herb! No roll up needed, Dutch Free...
Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"...
I'm choking this joke, squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple...

(OK I get the concept and theme here about cannabis and "L's",but this didn't work for me as he was up there in the contenders spot when the league was winding to a close,
so it makes he's earlier losses seem irrelevant,the 2nd bar also had like Spume some
nice aggression entow,and the running back in circles was good,the next line had some
decent multi's too,didn't quite match up or marry with the first line though,but still it had merit,good verse..)


Overall pluses and minuses for both here,and to be fair quite close aswell,I had to read
them both twice before I made this choice,and for me Spume gets this just,here's why,I
thought he's personals were better aimed and more of them also,S Dub you held your
own here,but this is all called see that separated you both,unlucky dude..

Vote...Spume.peace.   
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This stupid fuck thinking he can try beat me, he's joking surely! 
Can't even show me a fucking Win when he's voting for me
This was decent..needs to be worded better i think. so this was light
I'll kick you to smithereens you cunt, cos u can't manage my pen
Wen U drop here, people gone think you collabing with Damage again
this was nice. I too just used a damage concept but not as a personal directed at him.
S teaming up with Slip tryna get a champ, but not coming nice with it
Is only two S's mixed with some messed up "hits"...that twice the "S-hits"
nah...not a fan of these bars. stretch for me
Hit the elevation centre you "fool" cos right now you looking fucked dude
LA says yo shit is not on the money! Ironically I'm calling Dub-loon
Stupid......
this was ok. nothing wowing tbh

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You wanted the battle royale, but miss the deadline even after Checking In...,
Your lines are more stretched then bellies of Pregnant Chicks...
This is one of the most played concepts ever bro... not to mention so many rappers have said this shit before. Miss
You only made the title match, because it got closed before the Votes were Finished...
Like a guy that lost all his family, you can see in his face his Hopes Diminished...
Basic punch here. nothing really hitting here
I'll deliver the "L!"  Take you back to the first two weeks in the 1-2 Punch League...
I'm smoking this herb!  No roll up needed, Dutch Free...
Another played concept bro...Think about how many years ppl been doing this. basic punches like that have been done to death
Battling me, I'll leave you running back in a "Full Circle"...
I'm choking this joke,  squeezing your neck until I turn You Purple...
Nothing hitting here. too statementish. nothing clever that makes me think about shit

Overall -  One sided battle but i've seen better from spume. Dubs you gotta come up with more clever shit bro. Fresher concepts. like use current events and try to flip them in to a angle with some humour or aggressive shit bro. But i got spume taking this easy for better punches,personals everything
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3-0 KO...onto the next one.

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Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got,
No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat,
This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept,
A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left,
Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play,
Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today,
Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about,
I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth..
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You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled
That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle
Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef
It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach
This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him
Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison
This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard
They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing"


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You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled
That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle
decent opener, light jab, good multi
Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef
It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach
not feeling this one, not much of a punch more of a light jab
This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him
Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison
decent punch, good metaphore
This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard
They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing"
bad closer, flow was off and wasn't feeling the set up or delivery on this one

Overall it seems to me that you rushed this verse.... I wasn't feeling it at all, one of the worst I've seen from you.....  Your punches weren't landing hard, you didn't use any personals, and even your flow was off in the end...... Poor showing from you here homie......


Kiki:
Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, 
No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, 
Good opener..... I like the personal, it landed a nice punch..
This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, 
A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, 
Decent personal, more of a jab then a punch though
Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, 
Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today,
I like the humor of this, good punch
Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, 
I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth..
Eh, not really feeling this closer, the whole spume froth lines are played

Overall this was a good verse though..... You first bar was what sealed this battle for you, that was a hard hitting personal...... You came with a lot of personals and landed more punches..... Good verse....

Opener- Kiki
Closer- Tie
Punches- Kiki
Personals- Kiki
Flow- Kiki
Wordplay- Spume
Creativity- Tie
Enjoyment- Kiki

Vote- Kiki

Reason- I feel he wanted this battle more..... I feel like Spume didn't put no effort into this battle and dropped light.....  Kiki came with some good personals that landed some solid blows..... So this was an easy choice for me..... good battle guys.....
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More votes please. I want a minimum of 3 to progress onto the next one.
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Kiki


Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, 
No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, 
....Nice opener and personal which you used well. 3/5

This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, 
A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, 
....Nice flow on this, set up was cool decent punch. 2.5/5

Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, 
Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today
....This was cool. Again nice flow which pushed the punchline. 3/5

Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, 
I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth..
.... I see you went to use some defense on the closer. lol not really much impact. 2/5


Total: 10.5




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You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled
That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle
....Ok'ish opener. No real tough angle on this one. 2/5

Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef
It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach
....This was just decent, nothing to hard hitting. 2.5/5


This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him
Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison
....Lol this was funny, decent play, so far the best line you've landed. 3/5


This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard
They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing"
......Meh...Not really feeling this one bro. Thought it missed completely. 1.5/5


Total: 9




Overall: Keeks did his thing. The angles were worded much better then Spume and used the angles much more effectively. Spume my dude, this wasn't anywhere near your writing ability. Felt more of a quick key then anything. Have to go with Kiki on this one as bad for bar he was sharper.


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Already yawning at the 'title jokes' - You want the rhythm I've got, 
No riddle in the play off mag - You went quiet cos you didn't want Squat, 
Decent opener, no complaints. 
This is my spot.. And I BET, after the Axy match, this guy wept, 
A spit slayer? You were a bit player to a worn crew that I left, 
didn't connect the personal in the set up to the punch effectively, second line okay jab
Writes death, then cries when no one gets his dreary play, 
Hear me say.. Imma salute your passing, and drop a bar a year today,
i see the angle your playing off could've been better but a current angle still
Steer away from the same shit, theres tonnes of Ki plays knockin' about, 
I'll not make spume jokes, Cos those make him froth at the mouth..
i thought it was an okay play nice turn of phrase i haven't seen before

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You just fucking choked on 8 regurgitated lines! Because ya stunted game is strangeled
That's one concept worked 4 times! Please stay in the box you Cunt, with that same angle
i thought the angle was okay but it wasn't presented well. Could of same with much less
Already a lame handled, so Kiki go fuck your "rhythm" and get with the sound of my beef
It's saying your Royale Credentials ain't been living, since I punched the crown out of reach
i thought this was a decent personal play, i would've prefered crowns out your teeth personally
This the steady grounding of Keeks, Quick stating even my dick would prolly flatten him
Shit hot enough to see K Stew,-and still come back for another fucking! Like I'm Robert Pattison
rhyme felt a little off when i read it but it's an kay play i just feel once again u could of said it with less
This is the fucking clobber happening so hard, knocking U out! And you're bars you stupid bastard
They are why you "failed" here an it'll take a whole year just 4 U 2 get back an salute me "passing
this was an okay attempt at a flip just wish once again you refined it more.


Tbh i though both had a similar level of play/personals going on. Not much difference between on the creativity i thought they both had a nice mix. No haymakers but no real misses. At the end of the day though fell like kiki presented his better. Spume i feel your execution overall was a bit sloppy, rushed while kiki you kept it all fairly tight. So yeh vote kiki.
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Thanks guys, appreciate that.

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What kind of grown ass man gonna sit there calling himself kiki
I guess a cocknocking donut punching faggot thinks it's easy
The truth is sinking in, Keeks defenceless against the laughter
This hypocrites an actor ,a gay white supremacist claiming to be a rapper
A fucking klew klucks klan fan with all those Kays he kicks around
Kiki's kratos kind sounds like a racist joke put together by a clown
 this blokes lifes hoax I'm feeling bad for Alice and Endeavor 
Having to follow someone like kiki when they can really do better
dooms so gassed up the audio belt won't fit'em,gave it up without defendin it,like a faggot in prison
Still bitchin like hes but hurt over his own decision,cos a true champ stands,&holds his position
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Your name means 'failure', so just quit with the slick shit,
Insult to injury, you're the only time they don't 'feel' a 'Slip disk',
You cling to your partner like you were married to him!
Fact is, you've only had 5 stars when you were carried by Crim,
Like people speak to YOU when they need a word with the bosses,
Leader? You're responsibile for a third of their losses,
He stands for some causes, but i'll make a cunt sit,
Telling Spume who to defend against, when he's never won SHIT..

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OK guys lets do this..

Slip,I liked the personal clowning approach you came with here,in fact the whole verse
was personals really,you had some nice concepts here too,the KKK play was a good shot also,and the fact you added humour brought another level to this overall,from
gay supremacist to him being an actor,you certainly made the most of your ammo,
even down to a cheeky shot at his crew,the angles you came with were good,some
not to orignal though but you made the most of what you had,I also like the fact you
didn't try to make this a complex piece,a plain and simple drop with good direction/
aimed contents coupled with a good flow/vibe,your punches were present also via
the personals/humour,shit there was even a little wordplay to be had here also,so
props on the whole for delivering a piece that stayed constant,good work..


KiKi straight out the gate you came with an approach that was not only personal,but
direct with punches also,your drop had some nice directed aggressive come backs
entow,your wordplay did its job well by adding some depth here too,this piece seemed to have a cold vibe running alongside it that made it stand up and out,and like Slip you also had some lol moments also,the bar about Spume and the belts/and the 3rd of the
losses lines was real creative,not only in the obvious battle record,but crew members too,your flow/tempo and vibe were good and seem to add weight overall,and the angles you came with were ripe I thought,you seemed to be up for this battle aswell which does nothing but add to the concepts..good work..

Overall a good battle here,I feel Slip did well with his offering and the angle in which
he came with,both had a good flow popping too,but for me there is a winner here and
that was Kiki,here's why,he had all the same sort of elements that Slip had,but then
some,not only did his punches land harder,but his aggression and partly factual
content took it for me,Slips sorry to be voting against you here,but I know you'll
appreciate my honesty..

Vote...KiKi..peace.      
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 23 January 2017 at 9:48pm
Gonna break these short verses down bar for bar as I see em

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1..So opening up bro and first thing I noticed is the lack of tie in between line 1and2....That should be fundamental at a certain level?
"Cock knocking dagnat" WTF Is that mean
End rhymes was weak!
This was not a great start man...
2.. Second bar...Wow, just wow...
Slippy my bro, it is simply not good enough to fabricate on some major bs
I mean I know for a 100%Fact that Kiki is not a white supremacist!!!!!
See how this bar falls flat on its ass?
3..See above why this one could never work!
I get the angle with the KKK Thing, but you have done nothing to make it work, no clever play or tie in
4.. Attempt s at good end rhymes thru out and some nice internal s made this read bearable, but the punches was AWOL, this closer had Nathan's my bro
Think about it
... Alice and Endy don't have one quarter the experience with LA As Kiki does, plus he's like top tier and top ten of all time or some shit..
That shit had no mileage....

Mate, I kept it real with you!
I was a lil dissatisfied with this one! Feel like you took a step back
Let's hope Kikadontis dropping the ball eh
Can't see it though
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I will keep it real with you to bruv

1.. Opener, it's classic Kiki here,
Or at least one of your downsides!
All the work in the second line was obvious..So the result is a forced overall feel...Think about it! If line one wasn't forced than why don't it makes sense?.... Slip does not mean failure!
Punchline was dope as fuck though, really get it
2.. This bar!!! Perfect example of the first bars problem....Here you tie them in perfect
Funny.... Insulting.... That's a recipe
3.. This is Kik rolling with the punches
Factual, Insulting, Funny
4...What can I say?
I mean you have compared him with an ameaboa to a champ! When you yourself are only second to him!..... Lol I jest you fam


Overall
60%dope
Against 7%dope

VOTE,... Kuki for the more experience drop start to finish

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