Text Battle Archive: Topical Twist TORNADO: Nigma v Kiki (2-3)

Topical battle
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Topic = Pick any one of the five images here (posting your chosen image BEFORE your verse)
Deadline = Midnight, TWO weeks from today

Edited by Endeavor - 08 February 2017 at 9:29am

Edited by Cuba - 26 January 2017 at 9:43pm

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Terrific tussle here,highly enjoyable from both..


Nigma..

Vibrant and creative start i thought,the self questioning was a ripe starting point to
haul a reader in,which it did,and the flow/tempo here was on the money also,you i
thought was quite creative in this piece,in parts it had a questioning with double
meanings,then it had a battle-ish element to it too,and the plays were subtlety done
aswell,the angles/concepts were worked well here along with the whole of the rhyme
scheme to be honest,your detailed writing here created some fine imagery along with
the theme in relation to the picture overall,which was a fresh take/approach too,i'm
finding hard to spot faults here,so i've stopped trying,this was ripe from opener to closing lines,a well expressed and enjoyable read..


KiKi..

I really liked the way you stayed with the hand theme here,from fist pumps to pushing buttons,I even liked the angles and concept,your creativity was evident here aswell as
tempo/flow,you mirrored your chosen picture well with the contents i thought,plus it
was easy on the eye via the short line route which you took here,this did nothing but
enhance the whole piece overall,and also made it a pacey read too,as soon as I started
to read I was finished,like Nigma's verse this also kept my interest throughout,it was
like an eager student at college,it stayed on course and didn't stray once in its direction,your plays were also good on the whole,again another subtle and in parts stealthy course with them,they remained in the background and help serve to prop this
piece up too,i liked it along with the feel of being an out of the box verse were the thought process lies,again an enjoyable read..

Overall this was a good showing from both,i'll admit that I enjoyed both pieces too,so
picking a winner is not all that easy,but I'm going to go with Nigma here,here's why,not
only did his verse have depth,it also had range too,adding the different elements all
together was a nice inclusion for me,and due to the cryptic nature and in parts a good
blend of subtleness of he's piece swung it here,Kiki you also had your moments too,but your verse really was lacking depth for me due to its contents being so ridged to be
honest,this was an enjoyable battle for the neutral to read,so props to both..

Vote...Nigma..peace.

3-2 Kiki, locked.