Open Mic: (TWD) Pukka

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Mind-born into superior war in trenches for eons 
Remove all oxygen & release my breath as Xenon
Processing & computing concise binary codes 
While wondering… is this life finally broke?
Underwhelming to peers but to humanity, legend
As their characteristics show I’m organically threatened
Passively pressing power to pulsate objects
…in a fury, letting anger relocate logic
It’s pressure, the whole weight constant – a demonic battle
That’s slowly drowning me under aquatic gravel

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iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: (TWD) Pukka Posted: 23 March 2018 at 1:47pm
	Mind-born into superior war in trenches for eons Remove all oxygen & release my breath as Xenon Processing & computing concise binary codes While wondering… is this life finally broke? Underwhelming to peers but to humanity, legend As their characteristics show I’m organically threatened Passively pressing power to pulsate objects …in a fury, letting anger relocate logic It’s pressure, the whole weight constant – a demonic battle That’s slowly drowning me under aquatic gravel

SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 2:38pm
	Who woke this nigga up? Dope shit, iLL. I'm loving the sci-fi lingo and lyricism. The flow is smooth to. It seems like you're warming up to blow up. Now I'm ready for the magnum opus.

iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 2:51pm
	lol im feelin' I wanna come out of hibernation... but fr though my goal was to multi the words and try and make'em work.

SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 3:08pm
	If that's your "goal", then you're wasting your valuable time perfecting a skill that you've already mastered 10,000 drops ago. But maybe that's why your Kung Fu flow is so tough. Endless practice, my son. Endless dedication.

SELF ACTIVATE Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL	Post Options Post Reply Quote SELF ACTIVATE Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 3:13pm
	Ahhh just noticed this was a Word Drop Challenge. Thus making this even more impressive.

The Rap Daemon Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 05 August 2015 Location: Purgatory Status: Offline Points: 1108 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-14-0 Form: LWLWWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote The Rap Daemon Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 3:41pm
	…in a fury, letting anger relocate logic This line is powerful... Not only solid imagery, but something everyone can truly relate to. And this resonates beyond the sum of its parts. This line alone makes this piece great, not just the sense of a battle and struggle you empowered in a way which feels humanely felt which every line stood well on. Not gonna feed on technical shit since it's obvious you know what you're doing (even those who may see this and not having read your previous drops will understand this), but for the imagery and the way anyone from a soldier to a depressed and troubled teenager can feel deeply struck by this in some way to any level/degree, I like this piece a LOT. Love it, in fact, since the fact this came because of a Word Drop Challenge makes it all the more impressive. EDIT: FUCKING TYPOS.
	Faggot

Slip Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 04 June 2013 Location: St Johns. N.L. Status: Offline Points: 1612 Crew: Alter Egos Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 14-33-0 Form: LLLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Slip Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 23 March 2018 at 8:06pm
	That’s slowly drowning me under aquatic gravel Nice end move this whole drop was daf
	See no evil speak no evil silent echo alter ego inner demon violent beast so warn the mother fucking people

rhetorical Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 14 February 2014 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 807 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-0 Form: WWL	Post Options Post Reply Quote rhetorical Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 24 March 2018 at 1:11am
	sup fam, this shit was dope af. loved the flow, loved the cohesiveness and the overall tone. you did really well in strategically placing and presenting the challenge words as well. nothing more i can tbh.... went beast mode on this one


iLL ScriptureZ Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote iLL ScriptureZ Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 8:38pm
	thanks all

Neek Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Super Mario Slaughterer Joined: 05 October 2004 Status: Offline Points: 3862 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 3-1-0 Form: LWWW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Neek Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 26 March 2018 at 10:18pm
	I thought this was a nice addition Mr Ill Scriptz. I kinda felt it lost direction after threatened but the opening sequences really built nice. job well done indeed.
	#Bananas

spume corrupt Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3163 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote spume corrupt Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 27 March 2018 at 10:04pm
	Shit man You shake of the rust in one fucking drop What I really liked about this was its progressive manner You utilised the words like you was permanently rehousing them In ten lines you painted a clear and sadly recognisable persona My fav line here really held the thing together despite containing none of the given word pool, which really didn’t matter Fury/Anger. Relocate logic. Loved that line Keep up


Sammy Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Sammy Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 28 March 2018 at 2:51am
	man iLL stay's being ill. i don't think ive ever read a wack verse from you. Can't say the same for that dude Endeavour tho. but whatever. this is ripe (aint it, crimsy?). surprisingly very thoughtful. most drops of this type (WD) is usually a domino of punch and obvious wordplay but this had an actual "TOPICAL" feel about. it. well done, sir.