Open Mic: Way To Hell

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    Posted: 06 June 2020 at 3:07pm


I'm under the influence since I was a truent youth
Pinched my fathers cider and I swiped his blunts too..
Stuffed girls down the side of my bed like used tissues
Always up to no good ignoring the curfew

Profanity everywhere, F*ck Sh*t C*nt B*stard
Terrorize my neighbour and chase the girls with this wood
Stole marker pens from school.. my dumb ass got booked
Tried to jack a car and only opened the boot

Screws loose, yea got more than a few skewed views
Aint a G, I got a fucking F in school dude
recently I be resident in mental hospitals
talking to myself schitzo lunatic unwell

Still fighting with a pen, shit like professional
Dicey's on the attack you fuckers can melt
I still dont know why they let me out my cell
No turning back now Im on my way to hell
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Well this verse did have a rolling theme,it was a little spatial in parts
but it still came off with a start and end scenario still,i liked how you
highlighted the crimes/sins that put you on the path to hell,i had these
visions of a miss guided youth on reading,the wrongs were more of a
push back to your surroundings than a wayward delinquent who is out
of control,although a short and quick read,you put in enough detail to
give this verse an icy vibe considering its length,nice drop..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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