Open Mic: {WD#1} Asain Persuasian

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    Posted: 12 February 2016 at 3:15pm

ROAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


I got da chedda with gorgonzola, ill chop ya bruh
n feed ya tuh sarcohpagas, im a monsta bruh
you just a rickshaw broke, get rode on by a rhinoceros
you a hoe bitch, ill smack ya up n leave ya Vociferous
youre more absorbant than a refinery of phospherus
keep crying G, ill make sure ya bitch get boned quick
use a dictophone to record as she pisses n moans dizz
Aeromancy i warn, your bitch getting a' golden shower
i devour dat flower n leave er' pussy scolded n sour
After we scour, we gonna get ludic n play as i puncuate
Kerflooey that taint and send her off to you for valentines day



Edited by daydizzle89 - 12 February 2016 at 3:23pm
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Neek Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 12 February 2016 at 4:40pm
this shit was hilarious as fuck. very well played.

only usage I was meh on was your rickshaw play, but overal I felt this was a nice cohesive unit. the ending had perfect timing.

well done broham!!
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Venomonology Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 12 February 2016 at 4:51pm
this made me laugh out loud a few times man, very humourous approach that worked quite well. I liked the aeromancy / golden shower play, that was pretty slick. only thing that seemed off to me was it seemed like there was a line missing, or maybe one too many in the rhinoceros / vociferous / phosphorous part that threw me off the flow a bit, but it picked up again after that.

nice one. 
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