Open Mic: (WD3) Crimes In Truth

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    Posted: 17 March 2018 at 4:47pm
a legend for eons, straight enter the Dragon
"be aquatic" pulsates, the mindstates enamored
humanity has a flair for dramatic, concise theatrics
binary object, cubicals trench the combatants
the gravel been traveled, the path is enslavement
"be water my friend" - but all we see is Oasis.

bottomline, its so basic.. the freedom were chasing
replaced by technology, and the mind has been wasted
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote spume corrupt Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 17 March 2018 at 6:21pm
Honestly
You just went pole position with this little insertion
The read was grimey in its feel and the use of given words was on some superior level
Loving that gravel stuff unraveled
In context this was dope
It is the benchmark I will aim for in my upcoming TWD 3

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Neek as you know i do around up when this event closes,so I won't leave feed
at this time,but damn,this right here is "ICY"..peace.
"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance".
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"humanity has a flair for dramatic, concise theatrics."

dope

"binary object, cubicals trench the combatant"

nice turn of phrase. "cubicals trench". boxed in?

for a short piece, this packed quite the 1 inch punch. dope as usual sir.


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Bruh, I sincerely wish you wrote more often. Your pieces are so fluent it's crazy. I don't know what it is, but this tiny display of text came across so natural and conversational to me. I legit feel like you just Bruce karate chopped us with your textual wisdom. I could read this all day. Always a pleasure, man. Always.
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I didn't even realize until now that this was a Word Drop Challenge. I just saw the name Neek and immediately clicked the link. However, now that I know what's up. I'm even more amazed by what you did here. Props.
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^^ on the real, i didn't realize it either. that made this shit even fresher. 


neek lets get on an audio collaboration, sir.


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a legend for eons, straight enter the Dragon
"be aquatic" pulsates, the mindstates enamored

Dope slant


humanity has a flair for dramatic, concise theatrics
binary object, cubicals trench the combatants
the gravel been traveled, the path is enslavement
"be water my friend" - but all we see is Oasis.

Bruh, you slanting hardcore


bottomline, its so basic.. the freedom were chasing
replaced by technology, and the mind has been wasted

The Technological Singularity is a real thing. Be scare Neeko
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This was dope. Best part was the cubicles trench the combatants. Well done amigo. Only word I wasn’t feeling was aquatic.
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