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spume corrupt 
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 Topic: Wd#5 for the love of the gamePosted: 25 July 2016 at 10:29pm |
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No doubting the Big clowns back in the house, Str8 Impish
Misanthropic cats re-taking the bait be thinking his whole Game stinking Calling Shawn Antagonistic but trust that shit won't stop him If you go cry that member gone Ossify till his own bone throbbing No Respite from holding it tight till he done jet the jism This man been known to pick a fight with himself so forget Nepotism Think dangerous troll that rose in a time from the past S'why most already know his M.O rolls mostly Iconoclast But this Transient bro is thru Osmosis eventually gonna come real Till then though like faggots Conjugal rights he stays getting the bum deal |
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Neek
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:45pm |
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I thought this was well played. you also get 10 bonus points for making your point in lyrical form
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#Bananas
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BIG GAME
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:47pm |
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Eh
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:51pm |
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For real? That was spam?
That's how I felt about the piece. It's a legitimate expression In other words, looks like the same tired shit I've seen since 2010. Not impressed or fazed Is that better? |
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:52pm |
It's all love fam you already know that |
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:54pm |
Since you're from 2010 you would also know that leaving two letters doesn't contribute whatsoever. Elaborate why it's eh in a single post and it won't be marked as freeposting or spam. |
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#Bananas
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spume corrupt
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 10:56pm |
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Duh read it properly man
It's not dissing you It's word drop and I used you as inspiration to work in the words |
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BIG GAME
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 11:01pm |
I am feeling like I'm kinda spamming your thread at this point. The only thing that was a bit annoying was that there's some shit kos and J used to use in there. And anything about them guys annoy me. My bad. You put the words together well tho. |
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 11:25pm |
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This was nice Spume especially to be able to do that a word and line requirement. I was rolling at the pick a fight/nep line and the closing bar.
Nice to see you back around writing man.
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Crimson Juice
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Posted: 25 July 2016 at 11:27pm |
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That was a good drop here,I thought you put this together well,
and the fact you used humour with the key words by their real meaning was quite creative,this is another strong contender I feel,your contents and vocab was good too,the tempo and general feel was also nice,well done..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
before you can dare make an entrance". |
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Posted: 27 July 2016 at 8:59pm |
I echo what my fellow mod squadder's sentiments...this is what I really like about this challenge, it's a good + quick & easy way to get back into writing. You picked a good idea & rolled with it really well. That you kept it on the same theme and were able to integrate all the words throughout was really impressive, some really witty moments in here as well. Overall it's quite an impressive drop in the sense of a simple but unique approach & the quality of how you integrated that across the verse. Real good stuff man.
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Posted: 27 July 2016 at 9:29pm |
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nice little piece bro i was feeling it! i think u should have came for a more harder approach tho imo. i guess im just into straight barz. seems like alot of niggas here try to rhyme with big ass words and it sounds a little sloppy at times. overall tho decent shit man keep it up!
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Posted: 28 July 2016 at 5:37pm |
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Ha!! Spume...good to see ya again bro. I see you still got that heart of fire for writin. This was to the point and structured well.The Pick a fight wit himself shit was funny. Nice to see everyone havin fun with this. Good entry
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Posted: 29 July 2016 at 5:40am |
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this caught me by surprise in that it was thematically directed at a specific individual and yet still managed to utilize the words without losing any of its organicity...ugh that isn't even a word. ..but you know what I'm getting at
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