Open Mic: [WD#7] Oh look.. #BARS

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    Posted: 18 December 2016 at 1:13am



My flows angelic, punches of old..are relics,
Chilled with the depravity, kept the cold aesthetics
Still i scold the tepid, holding "Empire's Back!" on a placard,
We've sang winners songs n positively shat on ya wack bars
You cats wanna act hard, well i talk in strictly guns now,
I'm soo hard all my onomatopoeia just Big T gun sounds
Whut now? "Buck! Bloaw!" now hear the "Boom!" when it detonate,
L.A pull out ya tourney kit, i'll murder it n dead me a heavyweight
Ya beheading's fate, whale all u want u won't see no mercy,
The pulchritude is..any rivals a Mirage i can only see them when i'm thirsty



Edited by Rutter knows best - 18 December 2016 at 2:28am
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Ridley Squat Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 18 December 2016 at 4:30am
This was dope
Playing the (what I thought was the ) hardest word Onomatopoeia with Big T gun sounds was fucking genious tbh.
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just returning the feed 

Quote My flows angelic, punches of old..are relics,
Chilled with the depravity, kept the cold aesthetics

nice assonance and word bending here. 

Quote Still i scold the tepid, holding "Empire's Back!" on a placard,
We've sang winners songs n positively shat on ya wack bars
You cats wanna act hard, well i talk in strictly guns now,
I'm soo hard all my onomatopoeia just Big T gun sounds

nice set ups and deliveries here. 

Quote Whut now? "Buck! Bloaw!" now hear the "Boom!" when it detonate,
L.A pull out ya tourney kit, i'll murder it n dead me a heavyweight

nasty lines there. . . 

Quote Ya beheading's fate, whale all u want u won't see no mercy,
The pulchritude is..any rivals a Mirage i can only see them when i'm thirsty

good closer, i think some grammatical errors in the previous line 

this was a cool little read. Wish it was longer. . . wish there was more i could interject but the length was so short. . all i can say is dope little read here 

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Glad to see you participating. The 'Big T' and 'pulchritude' bits were the highlights here. I thoroughly enjoyed the direct, somewhat nonchalant tone throughout. Great read. 
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This was nice Rut's came off as forceful too,liking how your twisting the key words in
this piece also,(sang winners/sanguine,tourney kit/tourniquet) that was a good bit of
alternative wording there and it was quite creative really,plus the vibe was gritty and flowed well overall,the angles you came with were battle related,which is your thing on
the norm,so it gave this a fresh slant to your concept of topicals,even the slang/yardie talk that littered this drop was good,nice work here,we'll done..peace.
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote SELF ACTIVATE Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 December 2016 at 3:37pm
Word Drop + Battle Bars = Heat! Loved the approach to the topic. Your execution was sick. Didn't even seem like you were trying to make the words fit or rhyme. You just spit 'em and they fell into place perfectly.

Quote My flows angelic, punches of old..are relics,
Chilled with the depravity, kept the cold aesthetics


^Flow/wording/concept/wordplay. Dope!

Quote Still i scold the tepid, holding "Empire's Back!" on a placard,
We've sang winners songs n positively shat on ya wack bars


Aggressive/braggadocios/historical/and funny. Diggin' it!

Quote You cats wanna act hard, well i talk in strictly guns now,
I'm soo hard all my onomatopoeia just Big T gun sounds
Whut now? "Buck! Bloaw!" now hear the "Boom!" when it detonate,
L.A pull out ya tourney kit, i'll murder it n dead me a heavyweight


^You already know, Rut ... this was some live action URL quality stuff. I can imagine you on stage with hella hand gestures, swinging arms, and spitty syllables, rapping this in battle.

Quote Ya beheading's fate, whale all u want u won't see no mercy,
The pulchritude is..any rivals a Mirage i can only see them when i'm thirsty


I like the whale/wail flip and the thirsty+mirage tie-in was nice.

All-in-all: this was type dope with a hashtag needed!

Peace...


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#BARS

Real strong punchline verse, not inhibited in the slightest by the words...wouldn't expect anything else. The tourney kit is an obvious standout but I even dug the swagger behind the placard bit, that was just 100% attitude. You the man right now Rutts.
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Well Shit... You flexed your skills here and I'm impressed, dude shouldn't be fucked with is all I'm gonna say. My favorite part was the hole God damn thing lol, Respect homie I'm out catch ya later.   
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ha i knew Rut was gonna drop something. as usual, way to use these fuckin weird ass words as springboard for punches. this was enjoyable all the way through. and yeah the Big T shit was firrreee, son! 


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SELF and Rhetorical already gave excellent bar for bar breakdowns. All I can say is this was one of my favorites. That Tourney Kit line was just raw dude. Your approach was so grimy. Loved it!!

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