Wicked WordSmiths: week 5 (spume) |
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spume corrupt
Superior Member Joined: 27 April 2011 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 3162 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 20-7-1 Form: WLWLLL |
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Posted: 26 June 2011 at 10:56pm |
Spume accumulates mo’ dough wit da stash a- pot- he- cary
got me an English flower, like mo’ rose, type ya gotta
marry
marvel at this wordplay, pick up a pen- an- ce that ya done!
Spent
I’m an English man that’s mastered this shit, call me the pun- gent
I punch men clean off the demographic, demented an past disabled
kick ya fuckin bums all around town if U- n- ass-
ai- lable
I stay tenacious with
the dissin make ya ear hole feel raped
Digging up dirt fa wat I need like an Aardvark, leaving ya 0-
scill- ate
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Manc
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Done in 8 lines. The first 2 bars were stupidly clever. Especially the penance/pungent bar.
This has gotta be a 10 from me. |
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Kid Kane
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yea nice way of dividing up those syllabuls to make a good play on words, maybe its cuz im young but some of them didnt make sense to me. Oh well still good short verse
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spume corrupt
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Lol thanks 4 da feed Kane
But this is a game mate an not exactly how I write, we got certain rules to follow. (Get involved it will do ya good) People will feed an rate your performance an you will be obliged to return Its Cuba' lil weekly word play number= Word drop None the less good to see you feeding somethin Ps if yo would like ta feed an OPEN MIC ov mine you will find one in da OPEN MIC section Unsurprisingly Cheers Edited by spume corrupt - 27 June 2011 at 12:54pm |
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spume corrupt
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Anything on this peeps
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J504
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This was real nice right here, I like the way you worded alot of this especially- "pun-gent" and "pen-an-ce". I think a few words were a bit more of a stretch for what you were trying to do here, but this was still hella nice! = 9.5
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Cuba
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Can't decide between a 9 and a 9.5...so 9.25, some of the wordplay was top quality, others were stretched...actually, I'm going to bump you up to a 9.5 for the approach to it.
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