Open Mic: Why tf Cant I Battle??

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   First off, jerkoffs!,
No, I'm not out to, be that asshole, or get nobody rowd and rattled
But yo I'm kinda baffled, how I'm at-a-battle, site where I'm not allowed to battle???

Ha! 

Had to just, laugh at ya. Not the Las Vegas massacre. tho I'll see that guy in hell
Cos well, I aint much different than him
since I sit levels above ya, and could kill ya all easy, by myself ...
Who tf said I can't battle?? I came here to murder your minds, not hoarder my rhymes.
What I have in store for ya, still you're a, disgruntled customer wanting me to shorten my lines
But fuck you ... you motherfuckas!
I'll lay you squares down, in a pattern.
then ask uhm .. now who suffer's structure??"
my lyric's sHarp, sharp enough to cut ya 
Can clown, fuck around and give it meaning ...
so what the .. fuck ya, bitches thinkin?
hit short bars, with no midgets drinkin
throwing hooks and it aint even fishing season
bait you in with these lines. Ya kids give me reason
It's lame regardless so for real, it doesn't matter
so like a pissed off marine, I'm screaming,
IM READY TO FUCKING BATTLE

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Who-Is-You? Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 03 October 2017 Status: Offline Points: 89 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-0-0 Form: WW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Who-Is-You? Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Topic: Why tf Cant I Battle?? Posted: 07 October 2017 at 4:03am
	First off, jerkoffs!, No, I'm not out to, be that asshole, or get nobody rowd and rattled But yo I'm kinda baffled, how I'm at-a-battle, site where I'm not allowed to battle??? Ha! Had to just, laugh at ya. Not the Las Vegas massacre. tho I'll see that guy in hell Cos well, I aint much different than him since I sit levels above ya, and could kill ya all easy, by myself ... Who tf said I can't battle?? I came here to murder your minds, not hoarder my rhymes. What I have in store for ya, still you're a, disgruntled customer wanting me to shorten my lines But fuck you ... you motherfuckas! I'll lay you squares down, in a pattern. then ask uhm .. now who suffer's structure??" my lyric's sHarp, sharp enough to cut ya Can clown, fuck around and give it meaning ... so what the .. fuck ya, bitches thinkin? hit short bars, with no midgets drinkin throwing hooks and it aint even fishing season bait you in with these lines. Ya kids give me reason It's lame regardless so for real, it doesn't matter so like a pissed off marine, I'm screaming, IM READY TO FUCKING BATTLE

Crimson Juice Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 20 December 2015 Location: U.K. Status: Offline Points: 3258 Crew: Lyricist Inc. Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LLWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Crimson Juice Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 07 October 2017 at 8:48am
	Yeah i liked this verse you showed some sprite here,and i know that 20 post before you can battle may seem lame,but it is there for good reason really,i feel this piece came off like a parting shot/warning,which is all good,i also thought your similes were fresh within this drop too,content wise this piece shown some nice gravel/ruggedness for the reader to digest,as well as your capacity to write/type bars that have substance,all whilst saying a big fuck you in the process,you keep that fire stoked and before you know it you'll be at 20 posts ready to kick ass,(or getting your ass kicked),anyways i believe you gave a decent account of yourself,but let me stress caution,there are ppl here who can battle very well,so choose wisely before you take a battle on,oh and nice verse here,i enjoyed the vibe/tempo on reading..peace
	"You need to learn how to make an exit, before you can dare make an entrance".

D-NoS Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Groupie Joined: 10 October 2014 Location: UK-Wales Status: Offline Points: 207 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 0-6-0 Form: LLLLLL	Post Options Post Reply Quote D-NoS Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 07 October 2017 at 10:57am
	Word up. This flowed well off my lips feeling ya man, keep it up - good stuff!

Stalin Members Profile Send Private Message Find Members Posts Add to Buddy List Site Moderator Joined: 24 November 2003 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 2587 Crew: Renegades Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 34-12-2 Form: LNWWLW	Post Options Post Reply Quote Stalin Report Post Likes(0) Quote Reply Posted: 08 October 2017 at 2:12am
	I agree with everything crimson said, some lines I thought were a little long but I liked the flow and the way you carried the rhymescheme, also how you carried the concept into the following line with the fishing references.. look forward to seeing you in battles. Stay active.
	+Sick-Witted+