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hanGing
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Posted: 07 August 2004 at 4:19pm |
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SHould have a warning here (WIP)
"Baby I love your eyes, Their radiance, their Brilliance, You cant disguise their beauty - I want to be able to Look into those forever..." You stare at me through the box i keep your EYES IN! I fuck your rotting corpse with love and adrenaline The cold snap of your love flaps solved with hairdryers I'd burn in hell for fantasies of love and funeral pyres Maggots escape through your eyelids onto the sheeting I cant forget the moments before our first meeting Hiding in the bushes in the fields where you walked A vision like you appears equals a new target stalked The way you walked, breathed and flicked your hair couldnt wait to soak your blood up using your underwear Psychotic urges and chaotic surges, i had to meet you Smelt your perfume - a frightened face a love so true I stroked your face while you quivered in fear "how can you deny this is something special my dear" True youre not my first special lady friend I ground the others up - they jammed in my u bend Their hearts still beating as i placed them on the oven Cadaverous love, If they aint breathing it aint cheating (WIP) |
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Miia
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Damn this piece was filled with great sense of emotion, I loved the whole poem. Keep up the good work :) Pc ~1~ Fav part: Maggots escape through your eyelids onto the sheeting Edited by Miia |
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Eternity
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Lol, another classic from the good old hanging productions. A lot of... discreet gore. Nice emotion, class topic. Lol, damn, I love your work. We should collab sometime. Pz. |
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Anubis
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S double C
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excellent work u managed to scare me once again....
Nah was very good like every other post ur've done |
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SdoubleC
hit the floor,an duck for cover,my spits bring gore,u wont recover, from my raw spit,ur bone an flesh,im young an fit,well hung an feelin fresh, |
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Hindsight
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You twisted fuck!! lol, nice one man.
"the cold snap of your love flaps" - LMFAO |
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Noxious
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HanGing... anotha nice one... like it... love the Style... Holla... 1 |
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King Jehu
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sick...
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Insert something rappy here
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hanGing
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im working on the rest of it - keep your eyes peeled
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hanGing
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but any more comments?
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Jayred
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what tha fuckkk..im disturbed..sounded like sum kinda ted bundy n shit...i wuld say good job..but by doin that im encouraging thoughts of a psychopath...yikes
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hanGing
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i dont need encouraging... |
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G-Pfeif
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very good flow.. liked it... but... HANGING, YOU ARE A SICK FUCK!!!! BUT ANYWHO....
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BurnerOfBridges
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It's sick, I'm twisted... I like it I especially like this bit: "The way you walked, breathed and flicked your hair What are you going to add to it? ***Off Topic*** Hi to Scotty ***Off Topic*** Anyway, I'm being summoned by the evil dustbunnies... I must go... they have a hoover... Until next time... |
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hanGing
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i missed you |
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Scotty32
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hello there - hows ziggy land doing these days - aint been there in like a year
urr what happened to the evil toasters and evil monkeys (lol i wonder wot LAs thinkin ) |
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hanGing
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yeah.. the madness is back!
And she finished the "concept piece" "Baby I love your eyes, Their radiance, their Brilliance, You cant disguise their beauty - I want to be able to Look into those forever..." You stare at me through the box i keep your EYES IN! I fuck your rotting corpse with love and adrenaline The cold snap of your love flaps solved with hairdryers I'd burn in hell for fantasies of love and funeral pyres Maggots escape through your eyelids onto the sheeting I cant forget the moments before our first meeting Hiding in the bushes in the fields where you walked A vision like you appears equals a new target stalked The way you walked, breathed and flicked your hair couldnt wait to soak your blood up using your underwear Psychotic urges and chaotic surges, i had to meet you Smelt your perfume - a frightened face a love so true I stroked your face while you quivered in fear "how can you deny this is something special my dear" True youre not my first special lady friend I ground the others up - they jammed in my u bend Their hearts still beating as i placed them on the oven They say the way to a man's heart is through his stomach I grab your arm and you scream like a siren beckoning me I'm gonna take you home to enjoy your company Dim lighting and a crack on your skull create the atmosphere Lying face to face I whisper sweet nothings in your ear I carry your limp and weak body to my bedroom You manage to moan a little as I undress you Your flesh quivered slightly as I moved in to taste Your perfect damp white skin, as soon it will be grey Because now I'm letting my knife penetrate your throat I lick my weapon just before I remove my clothes Using your blood as a lubricant we make love I know you like it too darling, I know you like it rough |
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Darijuana
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haha the second version ihas a funnier ending ... i know u like it rough
and using blood as lubricant. by the way what's cadaverous? |
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BurnerOfBridges
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Scotty, the evil toasters and monkeys are still going strong... and the evil camel... Ziggy-Land's pretty dead at the moment Back on topic... yay, you used my ending! |
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hanGing
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lou post more often - please |
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