Open Mic: Electric Connection

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    Posted: 18 June 2007 at 1:24pm

I know this is long but any feedback or criticism would be greatly appreciated.

 

Intro

Show our affections through our hip-hop obsession

Spreading light on concerns and on worldly possessions

Use these words to question political rule and deception

Being heard is a choice, open your ears with discretion

Evolved a voice since seven, developed vision till 11

Then imbedded in my soul was this electric connection…

 
Verse 1

It starts with a thought, turning into a blueprint

Then sought from the heart we start the process of doing it

Swearing never to abuse it or to never refuse it

Because if we confuse it then we could eventually lose it

And then like Cupid we shoot it, you fall in love with the music

And to do this you can’t argue or therefore dispute it

Whether you’re new to it or you’re just straight use to it

For even if it fails to the artist it will still prevail lucrative

And leaders will rebuke it, saying you have to mute it

Claiming and stating that this form of speech is just stupid

But this movement now has peoples ears glued to it

Anticipating and awaiting so tell me is it diluted ?

And to those trying to ruin it, trying to just loosen it

Loosen the grip we have, their action is punitive

So through this each hope’s they can fine tune the music

Using it, speaking out on problems so you can soothe it    

 

Chorus

More then a game it’s a voice armed and loaded

Aggressive and potent, It’s a language that’s spoken

Addressing the issues, push envelopes with a riddle

Provoking a thought, when it connects and it hits you..

 

Verse 2

We take this connection and put it into perspective

Taking themes and harnessing them into a message

Where most listen attentively, being filled where their empty

We use sound as a weapon so our voices are plenty

I’m just glad the lord sent me to use my gift for the good

From the hood to the suburbs we are misunderstood

Most in the game try to change it but we need to just phase it

Cause when it was praised it was for how we had made it

So bringing back those places, re-route it with pages

And a pen to jot down why it was really created

Because this is sentimental to both me and my life

Help me through the strife and mentally gives me flight

Over the plight and settle on the side where there’s light    

It’s connected by means when there’s nothing but a scheme

A theme to penetrate thought and prolong our life dream

So respect the art, respect the artists and respect the connection

Because those in recession often look to our lessons

 

(Chorus)

 
Outro

Show our affections through our hip-hop obsession

Spreading light on concerns and on worldly possessions

Use these words to question political rule and deception

Being heard is a choice, open your ears with discretion

Evolved a voice since seven, developed vision till 11

Then imbedded in my soul was this electric connection…

 

(Chorus) x 2

 
 
Thanks for reading.
 
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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote lynxx Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 20 June 2007 at 1:10pm
yo...i say your multies in ya flow kinda obv tip.....next time dont write in yellow because i bet alot of people saw it then decided not to read it...its hard on ya eyes..lol ...highlight it wit ya cursor for those who r gona read it in future....tbh i dont see the point in having the intro bit n outro bit....i wood jus use the chorus there if i was you but hey its your choice so do what u wna.........step ya rhymeschemes up a lil...try n sustain a constant rhymescheme to improve your flow ....maybe use internal rhyme......keep droppin n you elevate as long as u take on advice wit action ......
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