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Intellect
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Posted: 18 June 2007 at 1:24pm |
I know this is long but any feedback or criticism would be greatly appreciated. Intro Show our affections through our hip-hop obsession Spreading light on concerns and on worldly possessions Use these words to question political rule and deception Being heard is a choice, open your ears with discretion Evolved a voice since seven, developed vision till 11 Then imbedded in my soul was this electric connection… Verse 1
It starts with a thought, turning into a blueprint Then sought from the heart we start the process of doing it Swearing never to abuse it or to never refuse it Because if we confuse it then we could eventually lose it And then like Cupid we shoot it, you fall in love with the music And to do this you can’t argue or therefore dispute it Whether you’re new to it or you’re just straight use to it For even if it fails to the artist it will still prevail lucrative And leaders will rebuke it, saying you have to mute it Claiming and stating that this form of speech is just stupid But this movement now has peoples ears glued to it Anticipating and awaiting so tell me is it diluted ? And to those trying to ruin it, trying to just loosen it Loosen the grip we have, their action is punitive So through this each hope’s they can fine tune the music Using it, speaking out on problems so you can soothe it Chorus More then a game it’s a voice armed and loaded Aggressive and potent, It’s a language that’s spoken Addressing the issues, push envelopes with a riddle Provoking a thought, when it connects and it hits you.. Verse 2 We take this connection and put it into perspective Taking themes and harnessing them into a message Where most listen attentively, being filled where their empty We use sound as a weapon so our voices are plenty I’m just glad the lord sent me to use my gift for the good From the hood to the suburbs we are misunderstood Most in the game try to change it but we need to just phase it Cause when it was praised it was for how we had made it So bringing back those places, re-route it with pages And a pen to jot down why it was really created Because this is sentimental to both me and my life Help me through the strife and mentally gives me flight Over the plight and settle on the side where there’s light It’s connected by means when there’s nothing but a scheme A theme to penetrate thought and prolong our life dream So respect the art, respect the artists and respect the connection Because those in recession often look to our lessons (Chorus) Outro
Show our affections through our hip-hop obsession Spreading light on concerns and on worldly possessions Use these words to question political rule and deception Being heard is a choice, open your ears with discretion Evolved a voice since seven, developed vision till 11 Then imbedded in my soul was this electric connection… (Chorus) x 2 Thanks for reading.
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lynxx
Standard Member Joined: 03 February 2007 Location: United Kingdom Status: Offline Points: 417 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-2-0 Form: LLWW |
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yo...i say your multies in ya flow kinda obv tip.....next time dont write in yellow because i bet alot of people saw it then decided not to read it...its hard on ya eyes..lol ...highlight it wit ya cursor for those who r gona read it in future....tbh i dont see the point in having the intro bit n outro bit....i wood jus use the chorus there if i was you but hey its your choice so do what u wna.........step ya rhymeschemes up a lil...try n sustain a constant rhymescheme to improve your flow ....maybe use internal rhyme......keep droppin n you elevate as long as u take on advice wit action ......
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