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Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
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Posted: 30 June 2009 at 4:14pm |
Crimson clouds hover over the land of chilling silence |
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Calibra
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This was sick. Great concept. Wording was brilliant.
"Crimson clouds hover over the land of chilling silence
Lifeless battlefields, where Death stepped in to kill the violence Fissure's have split the plains into 6 miniature islands.. An my ears are still ringin from the sound of missiles n sirens" And...
"Til the corpses from the street wake up, shrouded in rage
They're cookin up a storm with a thousand ounces of hate I look around at the place, truly wonder what its done to my mind I've went from the sharperst-tool-in-the-box to the bluntest of knives" Sick! Edited by Calibra - 30 June 2009 at 4:19pm |
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rapdisup
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fuckin sweet man this tha sorta stuff i attemp most dayz an i jus cnt write like this!(wud make a great audio )
ne ways tha first set of lines Cal' pointed out were fire tha flow was cool i even felt my own emotion as i read em out load so thats cool i was also feeling tha end "So if you want some advice.. Stop reading this note, then kill yourself, or run for your life Coz if you dont: you will continue to suffer tonight As the world is falling apart right in front of your eyes." brilliant closer imo went well wit tha piece an alough it was quite random tha read was gud keep dropping boss Peace |
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The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'!
It aint over till I Rapdisup |
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Point Blank
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Cheers...bump |
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JoeyNice
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great read..
I look around at the place, truly wonder what its done to my mind
I've went from the sharperst-tool-in-the-box to the bluntest of knives" shit got deep yo.. props..
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Cuba
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Yeah, I'd basically echo what Calibra said...I thought this was awesome, effortless multis and great vocab knowledge which meant that you weren't limited in what you were saying, some of your word selection was poignant:
"Survivors just scurry in gutters, lookin for lunch" Don't think anyone else picked that line out but linguistically that was a perfectly constructed line, in other words...it killed it. "To this widow of a city, once again lookin for love" Great metaphor, worded brilliantly...I think the whole concept was fantastic and you were consistant to a high standard throughout with a unique and progressive idea... 1st July, but we probably have the open mic of the month already...and if Hanging sees it might even welcome you to the club |
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Point Blank
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This was dropped yesterday so this would be under june OMOTM (H) and what club are you talkin about ? lol
Anyway ye, thank you for the feed. |
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Cuba
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Oh wells, shoulda checked the date
Classix club sonny Jim...I'll have to think of a new punch
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You only said that coz you know hanging won't check this haha
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Cuba
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Plus he doesn't like to be told what to do
*edit* P.S. Congrats on the 5,000...Nep seems to think it's some kind of achievement Edited by Cuba - 01 July 2009 at 11:12pm |
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Point Blank
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LMAO...I didn't even notice.
I'll make an open mic to commemorate it tomorrow :D
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Cuba
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We should do a collabo with 5,000 lines each
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that guy
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dope
it flowed, imagery was good (there was a line about a ghost town of crumbling buildings and i actually saw it) it was just badass nuffsaid
i love the way la members write (im more active on another site)
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hustler for death, no heaven for a gangster
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Calibra
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I think we should have a new person to do Open Mic Classics, cause I've got atleast 3.
When do you ever see hanGing online?
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I-SEE-GRIPS
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The city looks like its suffered for months..
Survivors just scurry in gutters, lookin for lunch Puddles of blood : Frozen soldiers stuck in the mud God's tried to throw snow down to cover them up Loved these lines above
Enjoyed the read point thought it was outstanding
good job
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DressToKill
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This was sick man..to many quotables, painted a vivid picture and seemed effortless. Nice
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The original comeback kid
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Exoduzt
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the way you just seemed to throw words around effortlessly is just insane...seems to come easy...
"Crimson clouds hover over the land of chilling silence Lifeless battlefields, where Death stepped in to kill the violence" opening just had so much to it, how could anyone not want to keep reading... "To this widow of a city, once again lookin for love" that was my favorite line in the whole piece...imagery and wording just seems to come so natural amazing piece.. Edited by Exoduzt - 04 July 2009 at 5:01am |
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