Open Mic: Freeda5th Pt. 5 - Fifth Element

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    Posted: 01 August 2006 at 12:58pm
appreciate that dave...thanks...
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Hotness.

I agree with King. This piece is not for everyone, because not everyone will be able to catch all the plays and shit. I really enjoyed it though. I like how you combined topical with battle approaches. Long as fuck, but I still enjoyed it, ha ha. Clap

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thanks alot for the feedback guys...and yeah, that part jehu quoted, when writing it i was aimin for blood symbolism as well as wat u said because i was represent the 5th element of hip-hop which is me of course, lol, but like ya kno, taggin is one of the other 4...(real ones lol)...as much as it is personal, this piece is also to depict skills, battle approaches, topical subjects, all mixed together, that was my overall mindstate when creating my parts of "Freeda5th"...anyway, thanks for the feedback guys...
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holy shit... Ppl can sit at a desk and spend hours just breaking everything down. Tere's so much imagery, so many sick multisillable rhyme chains, so many plays that people won't catch,

engage danger - with taints that will paint pavements- -
Staining street canvas[s]



that made me think of graffiti, and there were other lines in there that had me wondering if even you knew how many things you touched on, lol


Very deep shit, above many people's heads. Definitely no for everyone though. I'm gonna go try to read your other shit...
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Read that whole shit... Can't complain wit' the flow really... seems like you goin' insane on this one though fam... like, alotta shit you wrote probably won't be understood unless we see exactly where you comin' from... I'd say it's a nice spit.. one of those pieces where you might not catch somethin' here 'n there... gotta think about the audience a lil' more,'cus this shit seemed like personal insanity nah mean...haha..1
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hah, I'm sure most people will open this shit, scroll down, and then press the "Back" button on the top left of their screen... I'll def. leave feed on this lata though... was expectin' a quick read.. haha
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i didnt want to post it here before postin da other parts, but i said fuk it since the other parts are old shit already, this one is a couple of months old, so i decided that i let u guys read this one...

Freeda5th Part 5

Who’s the first child of the east - Found in the breed of acolytes- -
Scream demonic-cries - Binds the spirit with battle-chimes- -
The High Rank General misfit - Mentally shifted Mastermind- -
Grinding pages to grasp the lines - Of the fables matching rhymes- -
A historical shackled-life - Looking back at the classic times- -
Reflect ‘Illmatic’ like the ‘18th Letter’ - As a pack of Nine- -
Half of the massive ‘Triumph’ - recite ‘36' from the brain’s ‘Chamber’- -
Wording sick-n-deranged anger - Through these lips that contain razors- -
Sustain pain-n-engage danger - with taints that will paint pavements- -
Staining street canvases - advancing a gauge craving- -
Paying visits to death’s manger - I graze the plains of the Dark Night- -
And pray to a Lost Might to spark fright in the heart’s eyes- -
Embark crimes that will lead - to chalked lines for the weak- -
And carve minds with a speech - to scar lives with defeat- -
You know what it is - I’m blowing a kiss to rivet the winds-n-pivot oceans- -
It motions the way I flow-sick since I arose from a Spirit’s focus- -
Wicked notions I contort with - in order to honor this script-devotion- -
I lift-emotions over the seas-n-leave a crease in meridians like this-is-Moses- -
Mixing-portraits of Last Meals with the Bad Seal of the evil’s corporate- -
And craft-steal as it-is-molten into forms forced through spitting-torches- -
I shift-the-orbit of the planet’s axis - with a lyricists rapid-accents- -
Slitting-wrists like my raps-are-axes - Captured in shafts of a rapture’s assets- -
Shatter kats like I blasted glasses - Crack the axil of mental matter- -
Drenches scatter and wet the plaster like I’ve infected the pencil’s bladder- -
Rather demented - I’m set in laughter at the death of veterans- -
Suffer merciful-deficit - Look in the eyes of a victim - Irrelevant- -
I’m never-meant to experience - depletion of sadistic pleasures- -
Verbal exquisite-measures burns my words into cryptic-treasures- -
Yes, sir - I’m sick with excerpts that observe these shitty-experts- -
And curses in lipping-gestures that structures my written-texture- -
I’ve stepped in different steps - Overlapping a legend’s path- -
Cause I’ve solved a better-math that has bred-the-last of the heaven’s past- -
The dead-will-cast a living spell that spells the name of Free-Da-5th- -
And free the fifth element of rap’s relevance - A hidden truth I represent- -
I’ve given booths a better sense - Stepped out with the elegance- -
Of eminence - And live as an imminence that will sever severance- -
I’m evidence that Satan-lives - More severe than Seven sins- -
Every second I step in this - End up  conquering several settlements- -
The streets will remember this - As a memory scary to reminisce- -                                                  
A manifested nemesis using the pen’s defense as a cannabis- -
I’m cancerous when I advance my spits as acidic avarice- -
An answer to all disadvantages ever since I landed the genesis- -
With the hands-n-wrists I plant my fists into your glands-n-strip- -
Your chance to live - A force that expands the end of this land’s extent- -
NO man can test - this human trigger lingering as a lethal caliber- -
Equal Gallagher’s math-n-work as the plan to hurt the mass of Earth- -
I am a man of worth - Birthed to accept the token to take over- -
I’ve spoken a hate towards those chosen to bring torture- -
Labeled a complete masterpiece - I’m able to compete masterly- -
And defeat rapidly - Leaving the deceased ashes free- -
Passionately I create raps that breed the keys to my success- -
I breathe-n-out comes next another weakling to contest- -
The skill in me is at its best - Lyrically undress the useless- -
I suppress as ruthless - a two face nuisance who grew tense- -
That’s why I move dense with grotesque contusions- -
The lieutenant is gruesome - Jumping to bloody conclusions- -
I laid down my two cents - Ninety eight left to let out a buck- -
Set out and struck the crowds and clutched the heads proud enough- -
Pride is crushed through this mic congruence - Compliment my confidence- -
My own conference - Flowing like confluences through the continents- -
A godly influence - The shadow that devours light of heaven’s rise- -
Snap the concrete as my arm’s freed - no more shackled in devil’s ties- -
Now I wage a combat with the tongue strapped over flames- -
Every verb worsens pain - Turning names as worthy lames and purging reign- -
The mirror of shame - I reflect your soul in the glass stain- -
I grab brains and chitter-chat dames - Cranium-detached veins- -
Infiltrate the will of faith - Peel and scrape divinity- -
Feel this blade unveil the spleens - Verbal cervical misery- -
Only born to add on to the roster of Hip-Hop royalty- -
Amateurs mourn in defeat when they wrote a piece that ‘soiled sheets’- -
No adolescence in this mind’s physique - I repeat that revolution- -
Under kings of rap producing - What I speak is: Past Allusive- -
What you see will pass illusions - A mirage of your destiny- -
My barrage will digest emcees - Tear apart all their best they bring- -
My pen’s ink leaks in the sheets and reveals a collage of my entity- -
Exist as an enemy - The figure in which Allah has been meant to cease- -
A star that is meant to freeze after the defeat of angels-n-devils- -
The reason unity of heaven and hell prevails - I’ve trampled the rebels- -
Man handled the metals - Benching bars that can strong strangle your levels- -
Contours tangled my mental - Settled where the Star Spangled was mellowed- -
I’m scarred, mangled in thresholds - Never again meant to inhale- -
But my lungs expand to exhale an excel of excellence I’ve entailed- -
Exit these ingrates when I inflate words to disperse like inmates- -
A work of men’s hate - Maintain as a menace in membranes- -
Dispense vain of less game - I protrude the horizon of my thoughts- -
Start revising the rhyme art - Devised an uprising my mind taught- -
I’ve confined the kind hearts - Only the strong survive in this life hard- -
Stand as my own guard upon the songs beyond and afar- -
I’ve gone from the hard - to an assassin assigning assaults- -
Defining the cost of lost souls - as a reviving of gods- -
My mind is at fault - I mentally challenge any other ‘sick’ artists- -
My spits will restrict and constrict charges - Make you a limp carcass- -
Sickened with sick aura - I’m gifted with tricks off the lips intricate jaws- -
The teeth and the spit waters - Defeat with complete chorus- -
Brain with complete storage - If it’s not enough - Reach for the speech aurous- -
Teach all the weak morals - This rap shit is complete morbid- -
I’ve walked like a freak taurus - Tackled offense in the false tense- -
My jaws bend to rip off limbs - Caught kids in a lyrical hostage- -
My conscious is all dense - The same mere child who contends with nonsense- -
Straight tossed spits in the coffins - Freeda5th is monstrous- -

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