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Rameez
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Sorry for your loss man, this was one of the best heart feeling verse I've ever seen over here, so props for your effort.... life goes on man, so try to relax and take it ez... Peace 1 |
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seek truth
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i know i'm realy late on commenting on this but whatever, that was the best i have seen on this page, fuck this is crazy. sorry for your loss, but wherever he is now, he is proud off you. never deupt that
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Hopesin
Vinnie Paz SwizZz G Mo Skee Apathy Benji (not the one you're thinking about) ...Hip Hop ain't dead....it's just not popular anymore |
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Madeye
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Can't say I can relate- as of yet... and ain't lost someone THAT close to me (god bless).
But, I def~ feel every line of this tribute to your son, Stalin. ~~~My respects.
Alot of lines can be identified with, and personally, I felt I HAD to keep reading.
I could see how the 3rd verse was the toughest to write, speculating on
all the things that could have been... that's some rough moments right there.
Props on this, Fam.
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<font color=darkgray>I'm only offended by those I respect... and I don't respect you[/COLOR]
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-Orion-
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This takes me back . . .
Congratulations to you and yours for keeping on like you have...your progression in these five years deserves recognition, celebration. And this... well this just goes deep into every corner of your consciousness and puts it down on paper...or, screen, whatever...basically. I feel it. You can't not feel it. Honestly if you ever felt like breaking it down into proper bars/consistent structure the whole way through it could qualify as a fucking classic if it ever went down on a track...but I guess that isn't really the point, and would detract from the raw element of all this, which is completely uncensored from start to finish and just gets all that expression out there just as you intended... no embellishment, no padding out with filler, no conformity to criteria, no syllable count, no fear, no fronting... no doubt, you and your verse deserve all the credit they get 1
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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J504
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Can we get this into Classic Verses ?
Big ups to Stalin on this. Peeps need to see it. |
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Manc
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Agreed - this needs to be classified as classic rhyme
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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I Saw this ages ago when it was wrote and cant believe i didnt feed it, i swear i did...
Like most on here the raw emotion and the way this was worded played on heartstrings it had to be the most realest stuff i've ever seen on L.A. Period! Sorry about your Loss Dude, couldnt imagine the pain you'd feel when this actually happens to you and i dont think i'd wish this pain on my worst enemy as life isnt something you wish away from anyone.. I'm struggling to think how hard it must have been for you to write this aswell dude... through blurry eyes and struggling to maintain yourself... somehow you did it.. I Agree with J504... CLASSIC VERSE THIS!
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Psycho Tick
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so what happens if we say something bad?
only playing this a sick piece, loved the raw emotion, and probably one the best pieces ive read on this site so far |
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BIG GAME
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Wow dude! this was very deep and emotional bro! Man, what a sad thing Stal, I feel for you 100. This piece had every bit of your emotion involved and just told your story and feelings so vividly. It's hard to feed this piece because I feel so much pulled into the situation from the read than the actual piece itself. You couldn't have said what you needed to say any better. This line here really caught my attention:
now all I could do is keep my head up and stay as strong as u would Im so sorry Anthony, I had to let u go but I held u as long as I could but the complete piece actually caught my attention. Great drop, sorry for your loss and stay up bro! |
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Stalin
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Seen this bein looked at, just wanted to say thanks to everyone for the comments. I appreciate it. Even reading it now is hard, yalls words mean alot.
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J504
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This is still my jam, you already know.
Stay up, Stal. |
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-Que-
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I dunno if this was dropped during one of my disappearing acts or what. This is truly among the most deepest pieces I've ever read on L.A.
Stalin ..................I am very sorry for your loss bro. |
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Stalin
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Thanks again for the comments everyone.. I still read this at times.
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Stalin
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Thanks for gettin this into classic verses... appreciate it pb
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U.N.L.M.
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Well-deserved as everyone has basically said. The ability to put these emotions into your verse is just spectacular in its own right. It's hard for anyone to read this drop without getting a lump in the back of your throat. Props on this, and keep going strong.
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levy420
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Dam stalin this was really heart felt i got a boy n a girl who i raise on my own i couldnt imagine goin threw thst n i sympathise for wat u where faced with. real talk this had me in tears in the third verse all i could think is dam wat if my son jerome never made it n honestly i dont think i could b as strong as u so u got nothing bur respect from me in that aspect im sure this was a really hard peice for u to write theres nothing to criticide ur workin wit raw emotions so in some points the flows gonna b a lil sloppy but this came together nicely ill prolly read this every now n then. im sorry for ur loss stay up
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Nigma
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Stalin, I read this verse shortly after joining the site. I don't quite recall how I came about finding it however it's one of the reasons I decided to remain active. The true essence of an OM community is inevitably defined by the veterans who inhabit it and I'm happy you're still around.
I can't recall having fed many of your pieces and since I've read through this verse a few times I felt the need jot down a few words. More often than not, I feel songs don't transition well to OM drops, especially with chorus, however you throw the book out the window. Whether this was written in the modernly traditional OM format, prose, iambic pentameter, pig latin, it doesn't matter. It would transition well to anything simply because of the amount of emotion and pain laced from start to finish as well as the translucent letters between the lines. I feel that you have a natural ability to portray emotion through your writing in a way that the readers can essentially feel through your words. When you have a talent like that and pair it with a true tragedy, something beautiful can be born, sparking a small piece of light inside a pit of darkness. Going through something like this will inevitably harden the even the softest of temperaments, but you'll be able to live the rest of your life knowing that you created this rose which has grown through the pavement. I commend you for this piece and give you much overdue condolences. This is probably the most real verse that I've ever read sir. Respect.
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Vib.Klean
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Even though youve never left comment on my shit,ive read over this a bunch of times in the hof andvthe emotion involved in this couldnt be clearer than floridian water. I can see tears dropoingvdown someones cheeks by the end of this.
You definitely know how to pull the audience in with your choice of words and very few people can do that while keeping it short and simple. Fuckvthe regular OM format,you did it your own way cuz u can. This is coming from someone who doesnt give a fuck about anything he says/never think twice. I cant shit on this even if i wanted to.vthat third verse sealed my lips. I see this was long ago ,we went back n forth in the OM for a bit but beef aside(i have none with u btw was just fuckin wit scotty)i give u the salute |
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AshleyKaos
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amazing verse so beautiful... no words can describe hpw much of a perfect piece that was and how beautifully deep its meaning was..... braught a tear to my eye
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NUMBER 1 FEMALE MC TILL THE DEATH OF ME
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Freeda5thDawg
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Classic and beautiful. Glad I got to see this again. Blessings to you, Stal.
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