Open Mic: Clash Of The Titans...Feat. Junior |
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Fatal
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Posted: 10 May 2008 at 1:28pm |
Call me The Janitor, Junior, UnaBomber or Shade
I'm still quick to go boom... like'a fuckin' grenade You lames can't touch me, i'm stuck with the stars
Leavin' kid's 'lost'n in limbo'... "lookin' up to my bars"
You ain't touchin' whats ours, my wordplays'a menace I'm the new Federer.. You'll get served but not Tennis...
Left with'a blemish, J's composed with no stutter
Leavin' foes by the rows to decompose in the gutter
I'll cut ya so fuck ya.. Leave you chopped up in three
Only thing that 'beats me' is how you lost ya V... Ya see ProFound blows homo's, no shit
The only "Album" ya'll drop holds photo's...now kid ...Una showed LA wordplay an' how to diminish dudes
The original "Pedigree"...like the Triple H finish move You disapprove?.. 'n you'll get cracked in the nasal..
So you wanna' see sickness?.. Well here's my boy Fatal....
Haa...They never saw us comin, J
These Muthafuckas Thinking They Hard? We Wreckin They Crews
Yall Gettin Dumped In The Trash Quicker Than Yesterdays News
When We Chin Checkin These Fools, We Leave These Geeks Wit No Teeth
Check Our Records... We've Sonned MORE Kids Than Angelina Jolie!
You Pussys A Threat? Pshh, Your Bars Are Not Hot To Us
Toe To Toe Wit Me?
Your Gettin Out-Punched, Like You Spar'd Wit An Octopuss!
Maimed An Bitter, Im Quick To Slay These Niggas
Shit, I've Served More Tombstones Than Lazy Babysitters!
I'll Eat Ya Plays For Dinner And Leave Ya Family Dead
Im Bringin More "Heat To These Bitches" Than A Fuckin "Tanning Bed!"
Check It,.. Fatal AND Junior?? Its The Clash Of The Titans
You Couldnt DREAM Of Our Punches If You Was "Nappin Wit Tyson!"
Bringin Nothin But Acid When Writin...My Hooks Will Pound Ya Face
When It Comes To Pressure, You Buckle... Like The Belt Around Ya Waist!
So You Think You Can Go The Distance Wit Fatal? Ill Leave Ya Fuckin Burning!
Cuz All Your Seein Is "Death At The Finish Line" Like The Kentucky Derby!
...Nah, They Aint Ready J...
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Junior Shade
Superior Member Aka UnaBomber Joined: 07 June 2005 Location: UK Status: Offline Points: 5015 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 55-14-6 Form: LWWWLW |
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Dopeness... You had 3 or 4 lines that killed it! haha... We'll have to hook up on'a topical or summin' in the next few days...
Holla..!...
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Fatal
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Ha, yea definately J...after you dropped, i knew i had to step up lol. Your shit was on point too man. Watch out for part two, muthafuckas! |
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Madeye
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~~~ Your Gettin Out-Punched, Like You Spar'd Wit An Octopuss! ~~~ ...That line was "Colossal-Obliteration", Fatal...
Fuckin' SICK! Serious!
Liked Junior's openning...
and then...
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Only thing that 'beats me' is how you lost ya V...
Ya see ProFound blows homo's, no shit
The only "Album" ya'll drop holds photo's...now kid
...Una showed LA wordplay an' how to diminish dudes
The original "Pedigree"...like the Triple H finish move You disapprove?.. 'n you'll get cracked in the nasal..
So you wanna' see sickness?.. Well here's my boy Fatal....
...shit, mayng... this was def~ a nice collab...
8.1 / 10... nice, Famz!
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<font color=darkgray>I'm only offended by those I respect... and I don't respect you[/COLOR]
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Rhymez
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So You Think You Can Go The Distance Wit Fatal? Ill Leave Ya Fuckin Burning!
Cuz All Your Seein Is "Death At The Finish Line" Like The Kentucky Derby!
I'll Eat Ya Plays For Dinner And Leave Ya Family Dead
Im Bringin More "Heat To These Bitches" Than A Fuckin "Tanning Bed!" ucucky derby doesnt really rhyme with burning. both drops had good punches but it seemed like junior stood out more because his shit flowed better. overall it was good though. i think its worth like a 8.3/10. didnt like how the tanning bed verse flowed in and the kent Edited by Rhymez - 10 May 2008 at 5:58pm |
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Madeye
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It's imperfect, but it flows and rhymes just fine...
wtf? this guy takin' 'bout?
No hate... Rhymez...
But if you thinkin' "textually"... it "looks" improper... but vocalizing this Ish?....
It's got flava', yo.
... Nice.
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<font color=darkgray>I'm only offended by those I respect... and I don't respect you[/COLOR]
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Fatal
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They do rhyme...when you say it out loud, the consonant rhymes...
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Rameez
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Rhymez bed and dead do rhyme.. sound almost same when u say loud..
anyway.. this was good spit.. the flow was nice.. balance rhyme.. the unique thing about these verses were the plays.. Tombstone was funny play.. "Pedigree" was cool play.. keep it up |
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Kay B
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Dope...Didn't expect to see you two collabin tbh for a few reasons the biggest one being that fatal NEVER drops open mics but this was dope nice verse's from each. Nice shit by J not his best but it's expected after not writing for so long but it was still doper than alotta people on here could write, fatal usual nice verse dope plays and nice punches....overall a dope collab, good to see
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Rhymez
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So You Think You Can Go The Distance Wit Fatal? Ill Leave Ya Fuckin Burning!
Cuz All Your Seein Is "Death At The Finish Line" Like The Kentucky Derby!this is the bar i was talking about when i say it didnt rhyme. Maybe im wrong but no matter how much i try to sound out kentucky derby and fuckin burning it does not rhyme. im not hating or anything dont get me wrong. Im just giving honest feed back on how i feel. Both drops were good. |
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SageOne
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Dope one fellas...I think Fatal came more correct than Junior as far as wordplay goes...but you both dropped some knowledge on the kids...props on that.
Check Our Records... We've Sonned MORE Kids Than Angelina Jolie!
Always a pleasure fellas.
Big ups.
Peace.
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Madeye
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Perhaps you should remove ya' boi's dick out you mouth, Ram'z... It's fuckin' up you annunciation - giving you a fucked up accent. What're you? - German? |
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Junior Shade
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Thanks Kay & Sage... I'd be inclined to agree... I'm not exactly rusty, cus' thats a lame excuse... I'm just not "in the zone" & its unlikely i'll ever get back to my best as i'm not that intrested in writing anymore...
So get use to it cunts!... ha!... :) ....
Holla....!
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Rhymez
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nvm
Edited by Rhymez - 10 May 2008 at 7:26pm |
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Junior Shade
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Woooooooo woooo boys... Madeye calm down & Rhymez, he was talkin' to Rameez... But while your here Rhymez... Get at me!, i'm chasing you all over LA...!... :) .. |
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Rhymez
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i tried to get at you but it didnt work. you could get at me at mavelousmike01@yahoo.com
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Junior Shade
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Aiight i added you now...
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mcwoods
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okay, good job
junior - obviously we've seen better, flow was nice as usual, and you have a unique way of working multis which i like, though it wasnt totally present in this verse, grenade play a lil simple, same with tennis / served, its been done, album an pedigree where getting there, nice conepts, well done, overall technically nice, flow etc, but plays and originality lacking a bit. would like to see some of the old J come back, realy only 2-3 nice concepts here, would like to see it bumped up to 4-5-6. in a 8 bar piece, yano what i mean. fatal - opener a little plain, but a nice play, straight to the point, angelina jolie is a nice play, worked well, out punched / octopuss, wasnt really feeling, seems a little pedestrian, a little obvious, and a little stretched. next play was cool, something about it left me feeling not very hard hitting, i.e. only works with the link, quite open to interpretation. next two are classic "insert name" punches.. "bringing the heat to" "dreaming of".... these types of plays have endless posiblilties and they have been done before, these worked in a slightly different way. tanning bed cool, but with a few problems, and if you break it down, napping beside mike tyson wouldnt have you dreaming of fatals punches, nah i mean lol, thats sounds picky as hell, but its my thoughts at this time. i liked the press, buckle, clever play, well worked. kentucky derby nice, but again a little specific. flow and multis nice as usual
overall - a good read, two styles worked and its good for newbs and mroe experienced members a like to see two of the better heads on the site collabing, tho by all accounts, not the highest standard, but thats me being critiical.. awaiting part 2.. |
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D.king
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sick drop.... to me tho i have seen better from fatal didn't realy hooked me to reading..
i think jR ripped this one |
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I resemble the tooth fairy by the way i am taking your crown!!
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NepentheZ
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Pretty much what L.A is all about, tbf. Great flow, great punches, great piece.
Doesn't surprise me heres so much feed here either. A piece that warrants food, gets fed. Simple. Great job guys, great to read, really enjoyed it. |
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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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