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NepentheZ
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Posted: 06 June 2011 at 2:42pm |
I'm using telekinesis to deaden ya' species Edited by NepentheZ - 06 June 2011 at 2:42pm |
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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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Manc
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Dunno what made ya think THIS is "shit compared to others". It was sick!
Flow coulda been better but I'm not even gonna mark ya down for that. You did it in 8 lines ..... used the same multi structure right the way through ..... and it made perfect sense. Loved the play in the closer too lol. This has gotta be a 10/10 from me. Good stuff |
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J504
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You call this rusty? Kid, you ain't missed a step - This was hella nice right here! To me, the only thing that stops this just short of perfection is that if some of the lines were slightly adjusted, it would flow a bit better. 9.5/10 nice to see you still got it.
respect.
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spume corrupt
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Yeah agree was V nice
Thought the rhyming could have been a bit tighter though It's a 9/10 from me |
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CHAIN
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geeez, havent seen u rhyme like that in a long time 9.5/10
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rapdisup
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dope shit neppo nice ima give yu a 9.5 for this wuda been a 10 cos of line count etc an use of words but the flow was kinda off in places but seriously the rhyme in there was dope an thats why this game good cos it makes ya feel like steppin the game up dope
9.5/10
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The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'!
It aint over till I Rapdisup |
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Cuba
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Nice! 9/10 Edited by Cuba - 06 June 2011 at 11:24pm |
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U.N.L.M.
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love the truncated line and the rhymes were on point...9.5/10
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-Que-
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LOL!! Nice to see ya back Ole' Nep......an easy 9.5....nearly flawless.
an manipulate thoughts of that abysmal head that you speak with ^^ LOL!! Nice line bro |
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stuckinthepost
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I really like the way that as well as using the words needed, cats are dropping in extra vocab on this challenge thing. It flowed really well Nep, and had good content. I'm gonna give it a 9, but only 'cos it didn't make me go 'wow' whereas others have a bit more. Nonetheless, was still an awesome drop.
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you come at the king, you best not miss.
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NepentheZ
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Cheers for the feedback guys. Literally didn't think this was all that. First thing I've written in about a year, I would guess. Makes me want to write more. Props.
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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
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$n00z
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9/10
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U already know...
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