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-Orion-
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Posted: 19 August 2012 at 3:31pm |
In the name of gOd Now don't get superstitious I'm the most brutal vicious The most ruthless champ you've ever seen You watch me on the podium from the mezzanine There's none better and let me tell you there will never be Check the track record Oh so many Vs Every vet you've seen got heavy beats in record speed And when it's effort-free YOU demandin' better heat? Now you say he's arrogant You even said he cheats All this jealousy It gets really samey quick 'Cuz I've known I'd great at this since '86 You wantin' more but fuck it I've done it all Top of the food chain You can't catch me Call me Usain Dudes came Dudes saw me conquer So far ahead of my comp it's fuckin' bonkers It's the next leg in the relay Kenyan calibre See me through the distance Resistance Persistence Insistence: Hear what I say next I will not be anything short of the greatest Technical perfection World leader Still on track as the best ever Call me Rudisha Non-believers talkin' drastic ...They still think that I'm past it Baton passed from one hand to my other one 'Cuz anyone who knows me knows I won't ever stop runnin' Disturbin' London South West What? ... Haven't you figured it out yet? Accept me or don't 'cuz it won't matter Gone the distance I'm your champion Call me Mo Farah Last leg to go and I've made more motherfuckin' history than Jesse Owens Haile Selassie won't try to surpass me Fuck it Take it back to the very start Left all the Ancient Greeks with their head and necks apart It's a blessed art Draggin' Zeus's corpse through the Acropolis ...You ain't as hot as this And even without the track record and title belts On flow alone O's got more gold than Michael Phelps
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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J504
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I can't lie, this shit was nice. Layout was dope, lines were simple and effective.
Like I said before, Renegades (minus Neek) still got it.
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Manc
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Yea it'd be nice to see some feed from you
anyway - this was nice. I dont reckon it was suttin you took a lot of time with - but the choppy flow would do good on audio. Loved the Olympic refs - some of the lines were a bit weak IMO, sorta fillerish - but for the most part - you did a decent job with this its DEFO good to see you droppin again. maybe we can get that battle goin, just for fun eh |
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I-kontinue
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It was different. The flow was dope. No crazy concepts, but was a solid piece. I liked the slick wordplay throughout. Really seems like one of those pieces that would be even better via audio, depending on how it's delivered.
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-Orion-
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Thanks.
There wasn't any filler really, but yeah the piece has quite a lot of personal references and is a bit up its own arse so I can see why it might come across that way. The whole thing is a four-stage relay -- I did contemplate just calling it The Relay but wanted to avoid any cheesy Olympics/athletics reference -- based on 'track record', starting with the fastest, then increasing the track distances with each of the first three sets as a metaphor for the longevity; what I've been done on LA and also other shit -- and drawing all the parallels/comparisons between myself and the three gold medallists -- then the last bit does the GOAT shit to finish off. And yeah it's definitely one of those written to a beat that doesn't transmit so universally when standing alone, I appreciate that. Goes down as one of my best for me, knowing every intricacy of it, but to a reader I can see why it doesn't register nearly as much. Three replies from 70 views, now that is something.
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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Cuba
Senior Moderator Legendary Assassin Joined: 14 June 2004 Location: England Status: Offline Points: 12327 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-22-0 Form: WWWWLW |
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It's the new world man, people peep the comments before the drops...
Opening set, I loved it...but yeah, if you don't know about the Zah drop then you aren't going to appreciate the relevance (as opposed to me, who has it on my phone playing right now)...comes across with that same attitude/flavour, also a bit like Jay when he was on top of his game (oooo, subjective)...the bonkers line was just too raw, I see you Winston!! Acropolis/hot as this...nahhhh, rest was styling... |
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Manc
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Oh I seen all that
n when I say 'filler' - I dont wanna take nuttin away from you on this cuz it was decent. but if parts go over the readers head - it needs explaining so that your efforts can be appreciated Im trying ere Orion. I really am and yea - its annoying when you put in the effort and it gets a smidgen of feed in comparison to the views |
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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this is probably the first of the things i've actually read from you O.. since you were here before i joined and was in that On-Off-On period when my activity was at a high before i sunk off then returned..
Gotta say this was nice... the concepts were all there and this worked amazingly well Keep up dude
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Jay Homicide
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I quite enjoyed it really, felt the flow was decemt and liked the concept of it all.
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BiggStankDogg
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Fear the Bow of the Silent Archer |
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BiggStankDogg
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LOL, just playin'. Would be a good audio, I reckon...
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Fear the Bow of the Silent Archer |
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Manc
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-Que-
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Well well well....who awoke the sleeping giant. Really is good to see you flexin across the board again. The structure was wild. I like wild. I use to go back and take a glimpse of your past work. Your aptitude is crazy high. Concepts that make the average have to google some of the references. I can dig it bruh. Anyways .....good tah see ya back.
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Stalin
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my man, nice shit.. honestly I aint likin that layout u got, but thats just visual
Oh so many Vs Every vet you've seen got heavy beats in record speed And when it's effort-free YOU demandin' better heat? Now you say he's arrogant You even said he cheats that was killer |
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J Sass
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yea that shyt was nice...i aint really like tha format either...but shyt was still goin in my nigga
good shyt HG)Sass
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Rameez
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good to see this place is getting bit active again.. never seen a layout like this before but when I read it, it flows well all the way.. gud stuff champion
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Neek
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intro's nice... it's like ladies and gentlemen.. you bout to witness some stuff... and if you're already confused.. the exit is that way... you got your goggles and lab coats? sons about to kick science. from this moment here -> Check the track record I knew it was gonna get serious. the multiple references... the overall nature of it. personally, I think with turning the scheme of your verse into the theme of your verse, was dope. with that said.. I think this section is my favorite: Resistance Persistence Insistence: Hear what I say next I will not be anything short of the greatest Technical perfection World leader Still on track as the best ever Call me Rudisha this is when I was like.. look at this little guy. honorable mention: Last leg to go and I've made more motherfuckin' history than Jesse Owens Haile Selassie won't try to surpass me its dope. I told you as much, but I figured i'd let it breathe and maybe cats would check it out one more time. |
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#Bananas
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-Orion-
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Thanks Jamal. I think 'cats' have had their fill for now, but thanks.
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They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
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Kiki Spirez
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Is it lame to enjoy the structure more than the content and rhyming?
Cos not taking away any of the sick lines or flow you had, but it was the different structure in this that was a big breath of fresh air to me. Keep around.
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J504
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Neek is like a 300 pound Flav.
Everybody needs a hype man. #yeaboy |
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