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hanGing
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Posted: 07 September 2012 at 9:50am |
Not a new piece as such - as some of you know (from my FB) I'm in a band - we do kinda spoken word/heavy poetry type stuff - thought I'd throw some of the words up here. Our EP is being recorded in Oct - with a purely spoken word one to follow (and a "rappier"/soloish with guests EP in early 2013)
And the title has nothing to do with the song. As that would be boring. If only you could leave me alone by staying by my side, Remember me? The one you said you’d never forget |
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spume corrupt
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Very nice Hang that some skill right there
I never seen ya writtens before This was cool |
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hanGing
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Cheers dude.. I'll post the stripped down audio at some point as well.
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Cee-Jay Outlaw
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thats nice that dude... same as spume i cant remember seeing a written from you before...
good to see you posting somewhat!
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-Que-
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YUp Hangin...I was peepin this out earlier. I dig spoken word. Love to write it when I catch the vibe.
Lets dive into to where you told her "I can’t innocently process your innocence when I’m here with open eyes" ^^ Right there I was like ....damm....just the complexity alone was raw....then when applied its becomes all too simple that she is tainted. The "Bed posts of regret statement was clean as fuck.......Makes a person think about how instant gratification can also become a source of disdain and disgust......good one Hangin. Then.....towards the end ....you and her are making a decision to either get past the past or let what you have pass...Nice work Hangin. |
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hanGing
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Nice one Que - pretty much grabbed exactly what the tunes about - we have a female vocal that swings it's way in at the end.. to meld it all in and give some finality (though we're writing a companion piece at the moment)
- rough as fuck vid of it - before we mellowed it a bit for the EP. (and I lose my voice at the end - usually can sing in tune lol) Cee Jay - yeah I don't put my written stuff up on here much - might throw a few more up.
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