Open Mic: Chase These Demons Out

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    Posted: 25 November 2013 at 5:02am
How you think they feel, abandoned emotions
Cant even approach him till daddy has a cold one
U gotta raise these kids so get ya ass to focus
Arrivin at the door to only find a back due notice
The facts u hopin u get that promotion
But u can't pay the penalty that raps imposin
The pain isnt legit? Filled wit anger til im sick
Is the price of fame worth bein a stranger to ya kids
Everyday I pray, so let me ask you...
If im such a good father, why are all of my bills past due??
I aint hidin nothin but my pride is sufferin
When my son pushes me away when I try to hug him
I gotta get right give him the strength that he needs
Im a failure to be seen but hes only aimin to be me
Facin evil now, commit to changin things around
But I gotta be a role model and chase these demons out


Reminisce in my mind that my father was missin at times
My sons wishin id hide but he only finds me listenin to rhymes
Flowin though the only hopes u know im dope
Growin old so I should take every chance to hold him close
They my heart so im workin on fixin the whole thing
Struggle wit all my muscle cuz the guilt isnt consoling
Grabbin his toys to play cuz its my choice to change
Cant see my boy ashamed cuz I drink to avoid the pain
mistakes im payin for, threw away days, aint wastin more
For my son and daughter ima be the father they deserve
Sittin here wit nothin but pressure in sight
can't pay the bills so im stressin tonight
Wish my father was here to give lessons in life
I know ill make it thru it all if steph is my wife
do it for them, the struggles only testin my mind
Got 2 beautiful children the blessins disguised
Place the grieving down to face the evil now
Got my family so im gonna chase these demons out
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Damn Stalin, you absolutely kill these emotional type pieces. Very enjoyable read bruh, I'd like to see ya drop more, but I know being a family man really ties yur hands.
 
I liked this set right here, FIRE....
 
Struggle wit all my muscle cuz the guilt isnt consoling
Grabbin his toys to play cuz its my choice to change
Cant see my boy ashamed cuz I drink to avoid the pain
mistakes im payin for, threw away days, aint wastin more
For my son and daughter ima be the father they deserve
Sittin here wit nothin but pressure in sight
can't pay the bills so im stressin tonight
 
Sick drop here fam!
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Holy Moleys donut shop!!! This was more dope than the contents of Howard Marks lungs!!

Raaaaaaawww emotion - shit got me thinking yano. I'm truly inspired Stal. You hit nerves so easily with these real life verses. Flow's on point, multis-a-plenty, wording was bang on. A lotta man can relate to this, which gives it that extra edge over some made up nonsensical shit ya see on ere from time to time. Very we'll written, and effortlessly put together. Loved it!!!
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It was good...real good... I loved the part where you mentioned your father and wife right after one another... if I was being picky, I would have loved a couple more bars on them, and more specific reference to the actual demons, and a couple less on bills and the kids, which I think you mentioned enough anyway, and the story would have felt a bit more fully explained that way...or you could have kept those two verses as they are and just added a third to round it out a little more...but I think the length was right... Anyway, it was hot, you knOw this
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Another Stalin classic right here. It's the type of shit dudes can relate to whether you are a father or you have a father, even a grandfather, most people know about the pressures of demons when it comes to being a man.

I enjoyed the raw emotion you put into it, that's what makes it stand out for me.
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You already know. 5 stars

We're off that multi shit, you can be the king of realness now

instead of multi-ing in your sleep

You can do what Plies did...go to sleep real and wake up realer, lol


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Thanks yall.. uppin. I'm a try to get yall back wit feed
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W'sup Stalin, solid verse. Flow held up throughout, terrific emotion, engaging read, only thing I could recommend is a bit more substance. This verse with a few more metas, maybe a few lines wit some alliteration woulda taken this from an 8.5 to a 9.5 to me. Not to take away from the piece, with nothing bad to point out all I can offer is my personal opinion on what would make a great thing even better, hope to see stick around with a drop every now and again.
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Stalin coming up on this site i always followed your battles and your OM's and tried to grow and get advice from you where ever i could.. that said you are an experienced writer with raw talent and mixed with the emotion in the piece i felt this is easily a top 5 drop I've personally read of yours.

FACIN EVIL NOW COMMIT TO CHANGING THINGS AROUND….

that was where i think this just hit it for me… nice shit man!

PS Welcome back...
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Thanks everyone for the feed.. i truly appreciate it.

And J Brenn thanks for that.. anything you need.. advice help whatever just pm me. I've always had respect for you bro
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What can I say......you back with a vengeance......Hats off to you bro!!
Loved it!!

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So easy to relate to this as is often the case with you Stal; 

Love it how you champion the common man, there's a great message here


Sittin here wit nothin but pressure in sight
can't pay the bills so im stressin tonight
Wish my father was here to give lessons in life
I know ill make it thru it all if steph is my wife


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Very great piece. Very strong lines...I don't think anyone could not have felt the emotion and meaning behind the verses. Very effective and efficient writing here even at a more simpler form than the more complex of things...and it still being powerful says something about you as a great writer. Awesome job, Stal. Happy to see new work from you. 
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pretty sick stuff Mr. Stalin.  like others said... alot of men can relate to this.. You kept it really simple yet effective in meaning.. That's the stuff I can usually understand lol. I like the way you express your emotion in step of dad who's going through hard time in life.. Sometime people verses becomes really dope when they put there thoughts from personal life experience (and I noticed that alot)


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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Stalin Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 14 December 2013 at 6:25am
Thanks for the feed.. This shot means a lot to me.. I'll try to get back at everybody that gives me feed buts it's hard right now..
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