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Point Blank
Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
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Posted: 13 December 2014 at 8:49pm |
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Hastily I pay the dealer - lazily I blaze the reefa Days and weeks they seem the same - they dissipate beneath this vacant dreamer Yet PB remains the leader of swathes of demons, trained and eager To gracefully evade the Reaper while slaying peeps with blade or cleaver See the Ancient Greeks (my favourite teachers) conveyed in me my famed demeanour As sacred as the great esteemed Arabians that paved Medina The Gods, they couldn't take my crown - face it, you won't take it either Haters need to take a breather and patiently await the Ether I'll take you to a place between a rapist's cell and gates of hell Stick your tongue out, taste the smell of hatred that my veins expel I bade farewell to taking L's, peep the score - it's clean and raw Breach my doors and see the corpses - be warned that I'm in need of more An evil force - with gleaming sword I lead my awesome fleet to war Seeking glory, leaving hordes of weaklings in a scene of gore Destroying foes in brutal ways that even Thor would be in awe From hammer blasts they bleed and soar like creatures in an Eagle's jaw |
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Shankley
Superior Member Joined: 03 September 2013 Location: Leeds, England Status: Offline Points: 3369 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 37-43-1 Form: WNLWWL |
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This was nice PB, great multis, great story and a real nice story. You showed great skill here the way you constructed the lines and worded them was nice,
This section here was my favourite, flowed excellently well and word choice, multis and the little bracketed bit even rhymes with the end rhymes which I thought was a great touch to it. See the Ancient Greeks (my favourite teachers) conveyed in me my famed demeanour As sacred as the great esteemed Arabians that paved Medina The Gods, they couldn't take my crown - face it, you won't take it either Haters need to take a breather and patiently await the Ether Oerall Point great drop and good to see you still dropping shit, props on this. |
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CHAIN
Standard Member Joined: 14 November 2006 Status: Offline Points: 2769 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 8-4-0 Form: LWWLWW |
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Oh shit ....
You were never not the truth. 1.The way you connected those first sets of multis was crazy. 2.The famous teachers ad lib was a nice touch. 3.The medina line lol 4.the smell of hatred my veins expel???? Damn 5.soar like a creature in an eagles jaw......thats sick lil bruh This was a top 5 pb performance. |
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Nigma
Site Moderator Joined: 25 March 2013 Location: Canada Status: Offline Points: 4077 Crew: Elision |
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Wow PB this was fucking raw man. Just flow and content off the charts. Deff agree with Chains 'top 5 performance' comment, I fucked loved this style from you. Looking over his point form notes and comparing them to what I was preparing to type, I would just be echoing him. The flow in the Medina line was beautiful tho.. And that closer was a bomb. Props on this verse, showin them why we're still the top dogs on this site.
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The Law
Site Moderator God of the Minions Joined: 15 June 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5504 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 64-8-8 Form: LNWWWW |
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Super dope shit PB, first verse i read in awhile and I am glad I did, flow and multi's were outstanding. It was very well written, the "crown and hatred" lines were really on another level altogether. They could have just used this fire to burn them buildings down from the ferguson case. Straight heat, nothing else can really be said.
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H4ZE
Standard Member Joined: 13 July 2013 Location: Florida Status: Offline Points: 1859 Crew: eNtiTy Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 4-6-0 Form: WWLLLL |
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This shit is amazing PB. Good to see you dropping again. The multis in this were crazy dope as well as the flow throughout. Very well written, every line was worded great. As for my favorite lines, that vein expell line and the closer were dope as fuck. hard to say though because the whole piece was straight fire man. Great drop.
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Point Blank
Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
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Thanks a lot for the comments fellas, much appreciated
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nomedic
Standard Member Joined: 11 January 2014 Location: South Africa Status: Offline Points: 1578 Crew: Hunger Games Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 35-25-0 Form: WWLLWL |
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Wow this was awesome man
The entire verse was written professionally the delivery was perfect your word usage was timeless the imagery was exceptional you definately set a high bar on the Om's with this PB Dope work look forward to readin more of your work |
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Rutter knows best
Senior Moderator Joined: 15 March 2014 Location: Manny hood Status: Offline Points: 4529 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-12-0 Form: WWWWLW |
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Hey fella. This explains why your a bit of a legend on the site. Real smooth flow throughout. Your choice of wording was spot on and every technical skill you pretty much nailed it. Wasn't to heavy a read and nice balance of content. Look forward to reading more from you.
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#bananas
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Zinaii
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This was elite rhyming here; as I reading it I was kinda bouncing thats how natural the multis came off. Then when you transitioned to a different multi it was super smooth it was like u didnt switch at all tbh. Very impressive man one of the lines that stuck with me was the thor line but every bar was crack. Welcome back
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Titu
Superior Member Joined: 04 July 2013 Location: 🔥 Hell 🔥 Status: Offline Points: 4522 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 47-19-0 Form: WWWWWW |
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This is like 5 stars rhyming stuff. Usually when people over do multis, they sound a bit forced. But that wasnt the case here.. it was a gem iMO. Its good to see ya back. Props
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Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head.
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Point Blank
Superior Member Joined: 20 May 2005 Status: Offline Points: 7234 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 92-27-5 Form: WWNWWN |
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Thanks a lot for all the comments, they're encouraging me to knock something else up...
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Tamfa
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Smirnoff in my veins... Fuck I rapped that shit and it flowed like a motherfuck, dope shit Blank, this shit nice... Now let I continue to mack on these bitches while you keep it sick with this shit...
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Trizzy Tre
Superior Member Joined: 28 March 2013 Status: Offline Points: 5101 Crew: EMPIRE Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 30-7-1 Form: WLWLWW |
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...aaaaaaaaaand BAM PB's back. lol
This was raw from start to finish man. The opening was bananas, that scheme was ill as hell. You seamlessly strung those barz together....shit was jellin. The vocab really elevated everything you were trying to convey. It wasnt like you were throwing in word senselessly either as I do see at times people do. This was hittin bruh...
enjoyed this line.....clever shit.
I'll take you to a place between a rapist's cell and gates of hell
Stick your tongue out, taste the smell of hatred that my veins expel |
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D.Von Doom
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I'll take you to a place between a rapist's cell and gates of hell Stick your tongue out, taste the smell of hatred that my veins expel #sheesh! Destroying foes in brutal ways that even Thor would be in awe From hammer blasts they bleed and soar like creatures in an Eagle's jaw *Face palm* Brilliant drop. this seperates the normal OM from the classics...there was imagery and dope multi's that tied everything in perfectly. Only thing I hate is that it wasn't longer lol Great lyricism PB |
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Exoduzt
Superior Member NaCl Joined: 08 April 2006 Location: Long Island Status: Offline Points: 5331 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 41-7-5 Form: WWWWWW |
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PB my homie. I'm glad to see you dropping in the OM again.
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Pompus
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Not much to say that everyone else hasn't already, so forgive the lack of words, but dope drop man, very enjoyable read, stay up
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HexicKomplex
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very nice work here...very solid structure that flowed flawlessy...nice dark content with some good imagery thrown in there as well....
really enjoyed these lines here: To gracefully evade the Reaper while slaying peeps with blade or cleaver See the Ancient Greeks (my favourite teachers) conveyed in me my famed demeanour As sacred as the great esteemed Arabians that paved Medina The Gods, they couldn't take my crown - face it, you won't take it either Haters need to take a breather and patiently await the Ether |
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iLL ScriptureZ
Standard Member Joined: 13 May 2014 Location: NJ Status: Offline Points: 2477 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 11-5-1 Form: LWWLWW |
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Bruh, that first scheme was fuckin' flawless... talk about liquid... It was rolling off the tongue extremely smooth.. then the ending scheme sounded even better and a great way to send a solid piece. Each bar contributed something & was just as in tune with the previous. The transitions were instrumental in keepin' the rhythm & it was done so clean that I couldnt even tell you changed the rhymes right away. Great writin' style + you owe me a collab... js lol
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