Open Mic: [KOTOM Aug] Scotty Therapy Session Vol. 1
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    Posted: 04 August 2016 at 11:22pm
yo, it's your boy Scotty32, aka the definite pessimist
here's how my visit went with a specialist therapist:


welcome mr. Scotty32, relax, let me get your coat 
just lay down on the couch, while I take some notes
*clears my throat* well doc, I started this crazy shit
stayed with it, this is the motherfucking praise I get?

so what your're feeling is, regrets about lyrical assault?
external factors is typical to fault, but it's fixable offcourse

no, it's difficult because, they just neglect the majority
of my rules, like they don't even respect mah authority!
it wrecks me morally, these pesky noobs are quite a nuisance
not to be prudent, do they think I made a site for amusement?


hold up Scotty, I find this kinda confusing, you're discarding tolerence
it started bothering, but what did you expect from the target audience?
the situation is clear cut obvious, seems you're quite the bossy act
when you anticipate stoned ass novice cats to behave like office rats

they're making me nausesus fast, cos they act sloppily savage
LA is an enterprise, every member must be properly managed!

I'll have mockery banished, my mod squad equals a relentless click
-sorry, but I have to mention this, they sound like pretensious pricks
dude, running this site is expensive shit, they abuse the place!
-Scotty, use your brain, the site ain't much without the userbase

now I find your insights useless mate, you're selling snake oil!
-please, instead of taking this personal, rather try to make one
break some noobs in a battle, that should drop your aggression
that's a clear transgression! that's why I am locking our session!

locking our session? uhm, you can't do that shit in real life..
as the Lord Admin with steel might, I do whatever I feel like!

and why must you be spite? just read the rules you cheeky fool!
I live in a nightmare, everytime I close my eyes I dream of noobs!
*cheeks with drool* why, why, why can't they just heed my rule?

-well now, this meeting is through, I say this in a polite way..
soon some friendly guys in white coates will take you right away

it's still MY site okay? 

was my last words before getting stranded in hell
it's gonna be some time before I'm branded well
is your boy Scotty, freestyling from a padded cell!
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Lmao. It's funny you quoted South Park cause the drop itself had a South Park vibe to it. Just that style of humour. Overall it was really smooth and a really easy read but some parts did stand out more than others.

no, it's difficult because, they just neglect the majority
of my rules, like they don't even respect mah authority!
it wrecks me morally, these pesky noobs are quite a nuisance
not to be prudent, do they think I made a site for amusement?


hold up Scotty, I find this kinda confusing, you're discarding tolerence
it started bothering, but what did you expect from the target audience?
the situation is clear cut obvious, seems you're quite the bossy act
when you anticipate stoned ass novice cats to behave like office rats

they're making me nausesus fast, cos they act sloppily savage
LA is an enterprise, every member must be properly managed!

I'll have mockery banished, my mod squad equals a relentless click
-sorry, but I have to mention this, they sound like pretensious pricks
dude, running this site is expensive shit, they abuse the place!
-Scotty, use your brain, the site ain't much without the userbase

^ This whole section was ill. It kept the flow and rhymes on point and didn't sacrifice any content. No topics dragged on and got boring, all in all it was dope. A really good representation of a childish website owner (no idea what Scotty is actually like lol).
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Aight, thanks for the feed Goryo.
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Damn...just Damn hands down the sickest shit I have read so far I'm a noob and feel compelled to re read the rules.
Catch ya later
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Damn Con, this was dope.
A real fun approach, and a highly enjoyable read.
In fact, when I read it out loud to my missus, and did the different voices, it worked really well as a spoken word piece (but I'll have to take some of the credit there, cos I really breathed life into those characters, lol).

The beginning was clever -
Originally posted by Concrete Concrete wrote:

yo, it's your boy Scotty32, aka the definite pessimist
here's how my visit went with a specialist therapist:
- how you not only introduced the scene but also gave a key for the different characters text, and it still seemed natural.

Then it continues to ease in with the next four lines ... but after that, wow.
Cracking mix of multis, humour, effortless flow, and wall-to-quotables pretty much throughout.

Some favourites :
Originally posted by Concrete Concrete wrote:

so what your're feeling is, regrets about lyrical assault?
external factors is typical to fault, but it's fixable offcourse

no, it's difficult because, they just neglect the majority
of my rules, like they don't even respect mah authority!
Originally posted by Concrete Concrete wrote:

hold up Scotty, I find this kinda confusing, you're discarding tolerence
it started bothering, but what did you expect from the target audience?
Originally posted by Concrete Concrete wrote:

I'll have mockery banished, my mod squad equals a relentless click
-sorry, but I have to mention this, they sound like pretensious pricks
Originally posted by Concrete Concrete wrote:

break some noobs in a battle, that should drop your aggression
that's a clear transgression! that's why I am locking our session!
LMAO @ locking our session
Good shit.
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yeah concrete. This is why you are one my fave writers/battlers on the site. You come up with dope concepts and rarely do you miss you target. This was clever. You made Scotty sound like a dousche. Good shit here man. Stay up and drop some more work broham
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Form: LNWWWW 		Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote The Law Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2016 at 6:12am
This was a cool drop for the KOTM this month and the best one I have read so far. Although, there is a couple more I have to read and drop feed on I believe. 

I thought it was a pretty creative approach using a therapist to get in the mind of Scotty perspective. My favorite section was when you had Scotty try to lock out the therapist and then down from there. Technically, the piece was sound, flowed well and didn't have any mistakes that I saw anyways. 

On a critique side, I thought it'd be cool if you would have been a bit more specific with situations that happened around the site. Instead of just the broad outlook on your idea of Scotty. That doesn't take away from your OM at all though, I just like to add extra 2 cents. It's easily a top contender for this months KOTM. 

Oh, and btw still gotta give you the Big 'Fuck You' for saying ModSquad sounds like pretentious pricks. Refer to my Banana Avy for reference. 
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No worries, satire is supposed to be a little offensive, right?
Anyways, thanks for the feedback yall.
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This was dope as fuck. Wish you wouldn't have dropped it so close to mine you mother fucker. You just gotta go shit on the peons. Great drop, go to hell.
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 Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote Nigma Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 07 August 2016 at 10:36pm
this was some fine ass work! some of the off rhymes didn't really work / feel natural in the beginning quarter but that's the only negative thing I have to say about the piece. as a chunk, this was my favorite section:

 "hold up Scotty, I find this kinda confusing, you're discarding tolerence
it started bothering, but what did you expect from the target audience?
the situation is clear cut obvious, seems you're quite the bossy act
when you anticipate stoned ass novice cats to behave like office rats

they're making me nausesus fast, cos they act sloppily savage
LA is an enterprise, every member must be properly managed!"

many highlights throughout tho. the way you transgressed the story and brought out the plot in 3 tiers was really well executed. went from a pretty funny description of the famous scotty persona, to him being slightly confused with reality tryna lock the session, to him going full blown off his rocker. this was a good read, had me laughin
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