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SELF ACTIVATE
Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
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Posted: 14 December 2016 at 9:06pm |
Hit you wit them bars that'll crack ya fuckin' skull I'm the sickest wit these lyrics wat I'm spittin' is a cold No prescription for the dope, if you listen ya exposed 'Til ya senses overload and ya itchin' fa sum mo' I'm as holy as the Pope when I bless ya wit a quote I'm a legend to the cults that be reppin' the occult Cos the messages & codes in the letters that I wrote Are il•leg•ible to most ... but the RO-Setta Stone Is embedded in the flow, press the pedal to the flo' If them devils wanna go, make 'em wrestle in the snow Melt the glaciers at the poles,'til the ocean overflows And the ancient Eskimos ... start escapin' on the boat That was frozen long ago ... back when Noah had to float Yeah, you know I had to gloat, I be flexin' on them hoes You be desperate & you don't, cos ya thirsty like a throat In a desert full of smoke ... this election was a joke Had us stressin' over votes now we mad at the result Cos it's just the status quo & it's neva gone change 'Less we bang or we revolt like the Haitians on the coast When they had to overthrow ... the French from the throne Napoleon went broke ... lost his grip up on the yoke I can spit that Espanõl, mixed with venom, and Creole Santeria when I flow ... here's some Voodoo fa ya soul! Prolly spook a fuckin' ghost just fa lookin' at me wrong! Have 'em cookin' from the chrome when I light the microphone I'm like Michael in the post, middle fingers to Malone If I shoot it, I'ma swish it, I ain't never missed a goal! My percentage is the biggest, but I split it wit my woes All the bitches at my shows, they be drippin' wit the liquid Have 'em slippin' on the foam... from my sexy syl•la•bles Did I mention I'm the slickest, with this diction, on the low Picture Christmas in the Slopes ... I'm a Yeti & I'm deadly Cos I'm so Abominable, fuck ya Mummy she's a hoe Break them Walls like Jericho, cos she's fuckin' wit the Bull From the Land of Derrick Rose, I'm a Pharaoh from the 'GO Mississippi I'm the Goat, spent some time in M.I.Yay Got acquainted wit the coke, gettin blown in Costa Rica Smokin' reefa by the "O", if that chica is a keepa I'ma freaka Like J. Lo, even tho she kinda old, like a decade overdue But that ass still phat at the age of 42 ... but that bitch is 47!!! That's some marinated cooch! But I serenade and soothe Every crevice wit my flute, make me barricade the coupe Cos they aim'n fa my roof, cos they hate to see me win When they bettin' I'ma lose, it's a "Catch 22" Cos they catch 22 ... bullet holes to the dome ... From these brass .22's ... if they actin' like a fool Crackin' atoms after school, cos them teachers Couldn't reach me, I was Nietzsche in my youth If the money is the ROOT... of .. every .. single .. evil Then the Ego ... is the FRUIT, see this Eagle and salute Put ya hands on ya heads like a military troop Got sum literary proof ... the Messiah was inspired By the fire I produced -- when the climate wasn't blue But the nitrogen consumed every corner of the sky & there was life inside the Moon ... back when Isis told Atum That the Christ was comin' soon, I plugged a mic up to the womb And give him life in sonic booms ... ~~KABOOM!!!! Edited by Cuba - 15 December 2016 at 8:44pm |
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Elite
Superior Member Joined: 16 February 2014 Location: US Status: Offline Points: 3340 Crew: eNtiTy Audio Rank: #3 Stats: 5-0-0 Form: WWWW |
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OM is on fire lately!! this is one of the first pieces ive read from you in a min and this shit was mad hot. found the schemes pretty simplistic but you made up for it was some funny and killer punches. You really picked it up lyrically in the closing portion, starting with the Catch 22 bar all the way to the last. Flow was pretty impressive, this was transition so smoothly on an audio track. overall, keep this shit up. dope ass read
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alicewonder
Standard Member Joined: 09 May 2015 Location: uk Status: Offline Points: 653 Crew: Kratos Kind Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 2-1-2 Form: WWLNN |
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This is why you're one of my favourite writers on this site. Your verses are always varying in terms of approaches. I just loved the schemes you employed here, it was an incredibly smooth read. I'd love to hear a recording of this tbh. The historic references were very well incorporated. You also got me at Nietzsche. It seems simple but I think it has a great depth to it. The Atun reference was another highlight, along with your closing line. Thanks for sharing.
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Sammy
Site Moderator Beacon of Light Joined: 24 October 2015 Status: Offline Points: 2223 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-1 Form: LNW |
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Prolly spook a fuckin' ghost just fa lookin' at me wrong!\
lmao!! this was nuts, man. Smokin' reefa by the "O", if that chica is keepa I'ma freaka Like J. Lo, even tho she kinda old, like a decade overdue But that ass still phat at the age of 42 ... but that bitch is 47!!! That's some marinated cooch! But I serenade and sooth Every crevice wit my flute, AHAH "marinated cooch" yooo on the real, this was dope. flow was picture perfect. rhymescheme was inspring and above all else, this shit MADE ME WANT TO WRITE! Not much else to say but ur an elite writer, bro. salute.
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daydizzle89
Superior Member Joined: 23 July 2014 Status: Offline Points: 3805 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 6-11-0 Form: LWWLLW |
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swag bars with swag flow with agressive swag smacking a swag delivery. Perfect length packed with content, wordplay, laughs and other shit. This was nice my friend. The beginning started off good. And you never let go with thr delivery. This was dope brutter. Im liking this judo flow man. Its pop bam
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SELF ACTIVATE
Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
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@Elite: thanks bro. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I actually wrote this to a beat so I'll definitely record it in the near future. Be sure to check it out. Again, thanks for the read and the feed, bro. It's highly appreciated.
@Alice: I think there is a thing happening between us where we always read each other's work hoping to find all the historical, mythical, and pop references. And you never fail to spot them or to make sense of their inclusion. What's even doper is the fact that I can easily return the favor because you tend to have all of the aforementioned references scattered about in your own verse. This game we play is fun. lol. Thanks for kind words. @Sammy: I think it's contagious, because it was the last few pieces of yours that inspired me. Clearly there is something infectious in the cypher because the OM is nuts right now. I'm just trying to do my part. Thanks for reading my dude. I'm stoked you like it. @Dizzy: Bro, I think your feedback deserves it's own breakdown. You wrote that like a rap lol. You always come thru with the feed and, if what I wrote impresses you, then my job is done. Glad to see you back in the OM. I know there will be much fire from you in the days to come. |
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Rameez
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This was a cool read with balanced rhyming troughout the verse and u said so many different things that I couldn't imagine if I was writing. I liked reading your verse it was fun to read.. keep it up
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SELF ACTIVATE
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@Rameez: Appreciate that, bro. I'm glad you liked it. Respect.
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iLL ScriptureZ
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"If them devils wanna go, make 'em wrestle in the snow
Melt the glaciers at the poles,'til the ocean overflows And the ancient Eskimos ... start escapin' on the boat That was frozen long ago ... back when Noah had to float" "I can spit that Espanõl, mixed with venom, and Creole Santeria when I flow ... here's some Voodoo fa ya soul!""Have 'em cookin' from the chrome when I light the microphone I'm like Michael in the post, middle fingers to Malone""My percentage is the biggest, but I split it wit my woes All the bitches at my shows, they be drippin' wit the liquidHave 'em slippin' on the foam... from my sexy syl•la•bles Did I mention I'm the slickest, with this diction, on the low Picture Christmas in the Slopes ... I'm a Yeti & I'm deadly Cos I'm so Abominable, fuck ya Mummy she's a hoe Break them Walls like Jericho, cos she's fuckin' wit the Bull From the Land of Derrick Rose, I'm a Pharaoh from the 'GO" "Cos they aim'n fa my roof, cos they hate to see me win When they bettin' I'ma lose, it's a "Catch 22"Cos they catch 22 ... bullet holes to the dome ... From these brass .22's ... if they actin' like a fool" come here cuh... come here... *gives dap*... the fuck you on?.... that shit was flames. That shit had me nodding... to a text joint! Reminded me of that Video of Mos Def in the BK spitting in a cypher circle. That cadence, that flow, that delivery is that shit right there. I really can't even fuck wit you right now... that shit was toooo tough... Might be the worst feed back I ever gave... but the way you manipulated that scheme and kept it funky fresh was wild. I haven't enjoyed reading a text joint like that since this dude Satch P back in '04.
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SELF ACTIVATE
Standard Member Joined: 05 February 2016 Location: Kemet Status: Offline Points: 1380 Crew: Elision Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 1-1-0 Form: WL |
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Bro, you gettin' me hype. You gonna make me clock out early, go home, light a joint, and make a whole mixtape like this. lol.
Good lookin' out on the feed iLL. You stay rippin' shit so your props is highly appreciated. Be sure to check the audio when it drops. Respect, dawg! Peace... |
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Crimson Juice
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That flow was insane top to bottom straight out rhyming,lol fuck hype this was making
a statement damn,I said all along you got fire in the pit of your stomach so to speak, and then you just dropped it on us to deal with,this was a solid display of your abilitys as a writer, you have many strings to that bow you wield,and the diversity you bring is always top notch too,it did in a fashion catch me off guard some,with its layered approach and subtle plays depth you had popping here,plus coulpled with in parts fables and facts,just made this piece stand up and out,I really got a kick out of read here,and to be fair quite amazed at the scope and range of your work..RIPE,real Ripe and a pleasure to read..peace. |
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"You need to learn how to make an exit,
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intrikit
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these were the standout lines for me
Like J. Lo, even tho she kinda old, like a decade overdue But that ass still phat at the age of 42 lmao i was dead right here, you followed it up nicely too. I'm like Michael in the post, middle fingers to Malone If I shoot it, I'ma swish it, I ain't never missed a goal! liked the middle fingers to malone lol. clever as hell, i like how u rhymed it at the end too Picture Christmas in the Slopes ... I'm a Yeti & I'm deadly Cos I'm so Abominable, fuck ya Mummy she's a hoe Break them Walls like Jericho, cos she's fuckin' wit the Bull From the Land of Derrick Rose, I'm a Pharaoh from the 'GO Mississippi I'm the Goat, spent some time in M.I.Yay Got acquainted wit the coke, gettin blown in Costa Rica this whole section was crazy leading up to the jlo reference Couldn't reach me, I was Nietzsche in my youth If the money is the ROOT... of .. every .. single .. evil Then the Ego ... is the FRUIT, see this Eagle and salute Put ya hands on ya heads like a military troop nietzche reference almost went over my head yeah this was a smooth read. kept it clean from start to end. that is a really hard thing to do considering you followed a nice rhyme scheme for 50+ lines straight. I like how you used slant rhyming to your advantage here and the slang you use is similar to what i would say sometimes when i write. I've been told by some to try to take a formal approach out of my style but i tell them to go fuck themselves. ebonics is part of who i am and who ive become and it is a very important part of hip hop, your phrases transition cleverly and i dont know whether it was intentional or not but humor was also a big factor here in the entertainment value of the piece. it was structured really cleanly. i cant get over that jlo line man that shit had me dying. |
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Trizzy Tre
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Yooooooo this shit was fire!
'm as holy as the Pope when I bless ya wit a quote I'm a legend to the cults that be reppin' the occult Cos the messages & codes in the letters that I wrote Are il•leg•ible to most ... but the RO-Setta Stone Is embedded in the flow, press the pedal to the flo' If them devils wanna go, make 'em wrestle in the snow Melt the glaciers at the poles,'til the ocean overflows And the ancient Eskimos ... start escapin' on the boat ^^^^^ ..... This part here was sick! The way you flow seems to effortless and seamless throughout the entire verse. Damn This was a long verse, but you pulled the reader in. That j lo part was some funny shit lol honestly there is way to many parts to even quote. This felt like a freestyle and not in the way of it felt rushed it just was you spitting heat and hitting on random thoughts but executing it flawlessly. Shows how well rounded of a writer you are... Dope verse man. |
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rhetorical
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yo, whats up Self. This Kayge/Enoch . . . someone asked me to come through on this site so i figured id test the waters. Fancy meeting you here.
I think i might have fed this on the other site. . but just incase lol . . The focal point was flow. you really kept that dialed in. It never faltered and even though its long, it read at a rapid fire pace and seemed way shorter then it actually looks. . i mean, yea, there is a lot of quotable lines in there. This was easily a super fun read. . glad ya posted it fam. get at me. .
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SELF ACTIVATE
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@Crim: I always look forward to reading your replies. They're always thoughtful and insightful and usually give me a general idea as to the quality of a particular piece. Thus, I am stoked you enjoyed this joint so much. Your opinion is one that is greatly valued. Thanks for the read, fam.
@Intrikit: I'm glad you like this piece my dude. I'm also happy you got a kick out of some of those lines. As for the Nietzsche reference in particular...well, in the spirit of philosophical thinking I prefer to leave it open for interpretation because there are several different ways to view that lines if you're familiar with the person. Thanks for the nice breakdown. @T3: You hit the nail on the head. It was just my version of a flex piece. Sometimes writing standard topicals gets boring and you just wanna spit some actual rap shit. So this was that. Always a pleasure to see you drop in on one of my pieces. Respect. |
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@Rhetorical: Man, I'm just now seeing your reply, bro. My bad. I don't think you've read this one before tho. I just wrote it a few days ago. But thanks for reading and leaving some feed. I'll be lookin' for some more heat from you around the OM. I know you got bags and bags of dope material.
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Beans
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this was dope bro...
Less we bang or we revolt like the Haitians on the coast When they had to overthrow ... the French from the throne Napoleon went broke ... lost his grip up on the yoke I can spit that Espanõl, mixed with venom, and Creole Santeria when I flow ... here's some Voodoo fa ya soul! Prolly spook a fuckin' ghost just fa lookin' at me wrong! Have 'em cookin' from the chrome when I light the microphone I'm like Michael in the post, middle fingers to Malone If I shoot it, I'ma swish it, I ain't never missed a goal! My percentage is the biggest, but I split it wit my woes fire
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1-2 Season 1 Final Champ
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SELF ACTIVATE
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Appreciate that Beans thanks for taking the time to read and feed, bro. Respect.
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