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    Posted: 20 December 2016 at 3:40am
lol i feel like i should write something before the verses but i dont know what the fuck to say

3N1GM4

Been away, back with a flame tantrum, stay blastin

Take action passin through links like chained phantoms

Leave 16’s slain, pack em in 8 caskets

Deliverin straight jabs in a great stance till ya face spastic

After pain, left with a strained neck that you’ll claims fractured

Give you fake bastards Cobain classes of brain damage

A day passes, the flames vanish,  

You change, bashed into stray atoms

You straight backwards, Not gay bashing

Like, play back the frames man!

Framed glasses,  champagne splashing

Aint that an ace? Zen

Amazing?

A maze, man.

I ain’t been afraid yet.

Don’t fade and decay in the shade, just embrace it

Maybe the repayment breaks esteemed opponents

To reach the highest highs you must defeat the lowest

I’ll spawn apocalypse to force feed you locusts

Your speech is hopeless, death exceeds your focus

Theres no lethal dosage in placebo potions, so

The earths ya heart, your severed chest is leaking hemoglobin

Bleeding, broken, left for death in the direction that I heave the globe in



S(HAM)Y

it's like a monster loose. i aint talkin guns when i say i'll cock and shoot

meaning when i see your chick

i'll treat the bitch like a prostitute

if she a chicken head, what u think my cock'll do?

my pen game stays solid who wanna brawl? not u

i'm like Duran, my stone hands can break a jaw or two

I"m Jaws, rappers are like trespassers,

they get chomped and chewed

i'm an atom bomb times two. yall don't want it with duke

cuz when its on then its on, i'm wagin war with heysoos

let the guage loose; ricochet hit ur lady, she through!

cuz yall can't pay me to lose. everyday i lit fuse

and when my rhyme's on .. TIME BOMB, splittins faces in two

Jason face mask, machete slash - lacing ur crew

its not your day, we aint through. go'head Start praying, my dude

its Star War; son, this bar will Force and Leia in tombs

ur pretty much fucked when even my inner conscience urge me to spray 'til ur through

ayo i rage at the moon. beware the fangs that protrudes

hell hound, i'm hellbound, you ask the "were" and the "who"?

in front of u, son. I"m Cerberus, curse to tear up Hera and Zeus




FLEXODUZT

I'm the Top Gun! Theres no debate, so who’s doubtin'?

Defeated Top heads! So many dudes pountin...' -

Topical & battle wise I beat the best but who’s countin?-

Leave my name off your lists when I was movin' mountains-

Yall couldn't wish to be the best like I was lootin' fountains!-

I cruise like falcons,  any time you dudes choose to doubt me-

Lets be honest the OM wouldn't be the same without me!-

To be real I always have the best verse you ought to know-

& just to keep yall in chekk the only one who did text vs audio!-

Yall must of forgot but I'll remind ya when I mention these facts-

I was the only one who took a stand and defended our craft!-

Yall had a lot to PM but no spine, snakes in the grass-

No one lent a hand while I was breaking my back!-

Saw some names in shock like yall like the taste of some ass-

Only studied the past 3 months your whole placement is whack!-

It seems like this site is focused on BS and not whats so important-

For years I've killed you kids like I enlist abortions-

But the past few months I've been in a mystic fortress-

Inhaling the scent of Rigamortis from decrepit corpses -

that were bludgeoned inside dungeons only lit by torches-

By satanic priests who lurk in the shadows of death-

As I practice my alchemy while my victims battle for breath-

Exo is back now!  so you have to deal with this evil that released in me-

Keep me away? nah ya plan didn't work out like people with obesity-



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To every sucka tryna run up ... you fuck 'n round wit Death

Cos I'm a catch a body when I put this shotty to ya chest

You a hobby not a threat, I can kill ya just fa fun & I prolly wouldn't sweat

Watch me lob 'em to the left when they log-on to the "net"

How the fuck a bunch pussies tryna squabble wit a "vet"?

Tryna claw me wit ya text, talkin' softly under breath

... Until we face-to-face and I calmly interject ...

"I am honestly impressed by your comedy and jest

But be cautious where you step cos you cross that fuckin' line

And I'm bombin' on ya set! Where's the homage & respect

For a God ... you'd .. expect? ... But it's hard .. I suspect

...To nod ya fuckin' head ... wit a shard in ya neck!"

... Every card in ya deck that is dealt is a fail

Just to spelled out ya fate all it takes is an "L"

Put ya weight on the scale ... to see if you prevail

Against this ape wit a tail ... a Dragon Ball Z ...

Super Saiyian straight from Hell! Got sum hatred in my Cell(s)

Fa ya Buu and fa yaself, if I Freeza wit the flow ...

You gone need to seek the help ... of a cry•o•geni•cist

Had to copywrite the print ... they been bitin' since forever

Like the wife in Gen•e•sis! ... I could strike 'em wit the fist

That shoved the Titans in the Pit, then caused a Continental Drift

And made Pangea fuckin' split! ... If I brush you on the chin

I'll crush ya mouth & upper-lip cus when I shadow-box the wind

I punch the mountains into cliffs or a pile of busted bricks ...

Or sum powder I can sniff! ... Got ya drownin' in ya piss ...

From the gallons that I spit! ... Ain't no cowards in the clique

Get devoured like a chip ... cos our power is legit

Fuck an outage or a glitch ... fed Galactus on a binge!

An assassin wit a grin ... I been "Deadpool'n" fools

Since Achilles took a swim ... inside... the "River Styx" ...

Just remember I'm the SHIT ... as I defecate these hits!

This is SELF signin' out on your death certificates!!!




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ahhh shit! the intro is perfect, Nigma. Got that New York State of Mind thing going lol


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i spend so much time trying to twist words around images or delving into deeper meanings that when i come across a well done flex piece its like a fresh breath of air. This is a good example of how dope a flex piece can be when properly executed. really, too many punchlines to quote. . ill be typing forever. . so out of probably sheer laziness im not going to do that .. . . however, i do appreciate that even with each others own individual focus and flavor, you guys really complimented one another. All verses had their own personality but stayed in the lane together. truly balanced, nobody out did each other, you each just gave the reader something different which made it feel unpredictable as well as alive. sorry im not offering complete break downs for each verse or anything. . but its late and i just didnt want to log off from here without giving some sort of feed. . good collective here fellas. . keep the pen moving
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Good shit, Nig. I like how you posted this and added an effect to each name. All 3 of you had some dope quotes. I'll probably post a few later on.

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Thanks for the feed, Rhet. Trust, it's more than appreciated and I'm glad you enjoyed, bro. That means it's purpose was served.
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I enjoyed the read. Good job fellas.

The title itself dragged me in here cause i knew something bad was going on lol

damn


one qoute : "You a hobby not a threat, I can kill ya just fa fun & I prolly wouldn't sweat" haha


There's tooo many of em from yall,
yall dropped bombs bros. Dope
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Damn, wish you'd held out a little longer. Just logged on to deliver a verse for it haha. No worries though I'll hold it back for the next one.

Dope shit as always, I won't break down every single line because you all already know how hot that shit is, but a few favourites:

Nigma

The earths ya heart, your severed chest is leaking hemoglobin
Bleeding, broken, left for death in the direction that I heave the globe in
^^ oh lordy, that's some way to close

Sammy

if she a chicken head, what u think my cock'll do
^^ made me laugh, good shit
and loved the way you kept that rhyme scheme running smooth throughout man, you know I'm all about good mechanics like that

Exoduzt

Yall couldn't wish to be the best like I was lootin' fountains!
^^ dope

Self

Man, that section from cryogenicist to the closer was just fire. Got the Marvel references with some ancient Greek mythology mixed in, definitely my kind of shit right there. Dope!
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Nigs
Take action passin through links like chained phantoms
Leave 16’s slain, pack em in 8 caskets
You straight backwards, Not gay bashing
I’ll spawn apocalypse to force feed you locusts
Theres no lethal dosage in placebo potions, so
The earths ya heart, your severed chest is leaking hemoglobin
^^Yeah big homie this shit is flames. Nice to see you posting again. The flow was polished and so what the delivery. In the past, my biggest crit on you was that your lines were so packed with rhymes that I always had a hard time grabbing the flow. That seems to be no longer so what am I going to complain about now? LOL good work you nutty bastard

Sammy
it's like a monster loose. i aint talkin guns when i say i'll cock and shoot
meaning when i see your chick
i'll treat the bitch like a prostitute
if she a chicken head, what u think my cock'll do?
my pen game stays solid who wanna brawl? not u
i'm like Duran, my stone hands can break a jaw or two
I"m Jaws, rappers are like trespassers,
they get chomped and chewed
i'm an atom bomb times two. yall don't want it with duke
its Star War; son, this bar will Force and Leia in tombs
^^^bruh this delivery was fucking flame. Sounded cocky as hell but nonchalant as the same time. It came off super fucking dope. And the lyrics upped that confidence that was seeping through. I added in the Leia line bc i fucked with the wordplay. Shit was fr dope.

Exo
Yall couldn't wish to be the best like I was lootin' fountains!-
was the only one who took a stand and defended our craft!-
Yall had a lot to PM but no spine, snakes in the grass-
No one lent a hand while I was breaking my back!-
But the past few months I've been in a mystic fortress-
Inhaling the scent of Rigamortis from decrepit corpses -
that were bludgeoned inside dungeons only lit by torches-
^^^Yeah bruh you back fr. The aggressiveness was on 100. You really show the poise of a veteran man. And knowing your versatility as an artists just adds the appreciation on each drop you give us. The flow/delivery of the punches were direct. To me thats always the best way to go. None of that bullshit fluff. Top to bottom shit was legit.

Self
To every sucka tryna run up ... you fuck 'n round wit Death
Cos I'm a catch a body when I put this shotty to ya chest
You a hobby not a threat, I can kill ya just fa fun & I prolly wouldn't sweat
Watch me lob 'em to the left when they log-on to the "net"
How the fuck a bunch pussies tryna squabble wit a "vet"?
Tryna claw me wit ya text, talkin' softly under breath
... Until we face-to-face and I calmly interject ...
"I am honestly impressed by your comedy and jest
But be cautious where you step cos you cross that fuckin' line
And I'm bombin' on ya set! Where's the homage & respect
For a God ... you'd .. expect? ... But it's hard .. I suspect
...To nod ya fuckin' head ... wit a shard in ya neck!"
You gone need to seek the help ... of a cry•o•geni•cist
Had to copywrite the print ... they been bitin' since forever
Like the wife in Gen•e•sis! ... I could strike 'em wit the fist
That shoved the Titans in the Pit, then caused a Continental Drift
And made Pangea fuckin' split! ... If I brush you on the chin
I'll crush ya mouth & upper-lip cus when I shadow-box the wind
I punch the mountains into cliffs or a pile of busted bricks ...
^^^....Stern Smile...Dead...cadence/flow/delivery are all top tier. the lyrics are top tier... i hate you, that is all... fr you killed this
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Damn good to see top tier writers dropping as one unit, it's been along time coming guys..


3N1GM4
Been away, back with a flame tantrum, stay blastin
Take action passin through links like chained phantoms
Leave 16’s slain, pack em in 8 caskets
Deliverin straight jabs in a great stance till ya face spastic
After pain, left with a strained neck that you’ll claims fractured

(liked how you opened up here with multi's and inners,gave this a real nice flow/vibe,
I also thought the simile was ripe and well worded,however the spastic seemed to me
to be out of place,yeah it rhymes and suggest your contorting the features to look as
if or to resemble pain,I feel plastic would of been a better choice as it can be moulded,
and it adds more depiction,but that's just my opinion,I will say now though it didn't take
anything away from this segment,just didn't seem to add a lot either..)

Give you fake bastards Cobain classes of brain damage
A day passes, the flames vanish,
You change, bashed into stray atoms
You straight backwards, Not gay bashing
Like, play back the frames man!
Framed glasses, champagne splashing
Aint that an ace? Zen
Amazing?
A maze, man.
I ain’t been afraid yet.

(still keeping that flow going well with the inners and placement words,I liked this part
here,seems you had something to say by the way it was delivered,it had a more of a
directed feel about it,the spin on words was nicely done too i thought,ripe..)

Don’t fade and decay in the shade, just embrace it
Maybe the repayment breaks esteemed opponents
To reach the highest highs you must defeat the lowest
I’ll spawn apocalypse to force feed you locusts
Your speech is hopeless, death exceeds your focus
Theres no lethal dosage in placebo potions, so
The earths ya heart, your severed chest is leaking hemoglobin
Bleeding, broken, left for death in the direction that I heave the globe in

(these short lines are a joy to read,coupled by multi's just comes off as effortless really,
and still playing with the words,to say this is like a shelf-hype/battle oriented,it carried
with it some real nice depth,that just increased the the imagery here,your word choices
were ripe,and to be honest,i expect that from you,and you didn't dissapoint,I really did
enjoy this on the whole,good work,but you knew that already..)


S(HAM)Y
it's like a monster loose. i aint talkin guns when i say i'll cock and shoot
meaning when i see your chick
i'll treat the bitch like a prostitute
if she a chicken head, what u think my cock'll do?
my pen game stays solid who wanna brawl? not u
i'm like Duran, my stone hands can break a jaw or two
I"m Jaws, rappers are like trespassers,
they get chomped and chewed

(first off I liked the similes here,they seem to come thick and fast,I also liked this in and
out rhyme scheme also,plus the vibe was working well I believe,I also liked the angle of
questioning and answering scenario,that was a ripe inclusion which gave this a fresh
slant and depth of it's own,plus it was Slick on reading too..)

i'm an atom bomb times two. yall don't want it with duke
cuz when its on then its on, i'm wagin war with heysoos
let the guage loose; ricochet hit ur lady, she through!
cuz yall can't pay me to lose. everyday i lit fuse
and when my rhyme's on .. TIME BOMB, splittins faces in two
Jason face mask, machete slash - lacing ur crew
its not your day, we aint through. go'head Start praying, my dude

(yeah this segment had the vibe and makings of battle with the lytics/contents you've
deployed here,it also seemed to come off as a parting shot/warning,feeling the past and present concept running within this part,the (i'm and it's/she's through and can't)
also gave this segment depth and imagery..)

its Star War; son, this bar will Force and Leia in tombs
ur pretty much fucked when even my inner conscience urge me to spray 'til ur through
ayo i rage at the moon. beware the fangs that protrudes
hell hound, i'm hellbound, you ask the "were" and the "who"?
in front of u, son. I"m Cerberus, curse to tear up Hera and Zeus

(liked the Mythology in this segment,it really gave this a sense of strength and detail,
you have done a splendid job overall with metaphoric/similes within this verse,that
in turn has brought a rich vibe to it,the star wars line seemed to be out of place at first glance until the end word tomb,which then gave it an aged feel that just blended the
Mythology in,great work..)


FLEXODUZT
I'm the Top Gun! Theres no debate, so who’s doubtin'?
Defeated Top heads! So many dudes pountin...' -
Topical & battle wise I beat the best but who’s countin?-
Leave my name off your lists when I was movin' mountains-
Yall couldn't wish to be the best like I was lootin' fountains!-
I cruise like falcons, any time you dudes choose to doubt me-
Lets be honest the OM wouldn't be the same without me!-

(I liked the swag here,the proclaiming was nice too,kind of added more bragging rights
to this segment,the wording was nice and the end rhymes were solid,there was some
improvement to be had though,(but this is just me and my opinion here) ,some inners,
wouldn't of added a deal more, but it would be slicker,anyways liking this..)

To be real I always have the best verse you ought to know-
& just to keep yall in chekk the only one who did text vs audio!-
Yall must of forgot but I'll remind ya when I mention these facts-
I was the only one who took a stand and defended our craft!-
Yall had a lot to PM but no spine, snakes in the grass-
No one lent a hand while I was breaking my back!-
Saw some names in shock like yall like the taste of some ass-
Only studied the past 3 months your whole placement is whack!-

(erm did you have something festering inside your here?,did somebody piss on your
cornflakes the day you wrote this?..lol,no matter as it happens I do remember you doing text v audio,and I do remember you leading the debate for text heads,so this factual content has alot of merit within,also displayed some emotion here too,good
job putting it to rhyme,came off as powerful..)

It seems like this site is focused on BS and not whats so important-
For years I've killed you kids like I enlist abortions-
But the past few months I've been in a mystic fortress-
Inhaling the scent of Rigamortis from decrepit corpses -
that were bludgeoned inside dungeons only lit by torches-
By satanic priests who lurk in the shadows of death-
As I practice my alchemy while my victims battle for breath-
Exo is back now! so you have to deal with this evil that released in me-
Keep me away? nah ya plan didn't work out like people with obesity-

(liked the similes here,and the detail provided a vivid scene,this segment had a real
poetic slant due to its content,that projected a clear picture in my head on reading,i
really liked this segment,it just conjured up Burke and Hare type scene for me,that
was expressed well,great work and good to see you back again)..(our saviour and defender of the text realm..lol.)


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To every sucka tryna run up ... you fuck 'n round wit Death
Cos I'm a catch a body when I put this shotty to ya chest
You a hobby not a threat, I can kill ya just fa fun & I prolly wouldn't sweat
Watch me lob 'em to the left when they log-on to the "net"
How the fuck a bunch pussies tryna squabble wit a "vet"?
Tryna claw me wit ya text, talkin' softly under breath
... Until we face-to-face and I calmly interject ...
"I am honestly impressed by your comedy and jest
But be cautious where you step cos you cross that fuckin' line
And I'm bombin' on ya set! Where's the homage & respect
For a God ... you'd .. expect? ... But it's hard .. I suspect
...To nod ya fuckin' head ... wit a shard in ya neck!"

(well this was pretty straightforward and directed here,loving the flow also,you could
be quite the battle cat if you ever put you hand to it,I'm enjoying the gritty/grimey
contents your displaying also,came off with a real kind of message stamped,'bring
it',lively opener their dude energetic too..)

... Every card in ya deck that is dealt is a fail
Just to spelled out ya fate all it takes is an "L"
Put ya weight on the scale ... to see if you prevail
Against this ape wit a tail ... a Dragon Ball Z ...
Super Saiyian straight from Hell! Got sum hatred in my Cell(s)
Fa ya Buu and fa yaself, if I Freeza wit the flow ...
You gone need to seek the help ... of a cry•o•geni•cist
Had to copywrite the print ... they been bitin' since forever
Like the wife in Gen•e•sis! ... I could strike 'em wit the fist
That shoved the Titans in the Pit, then caused a Continental Drift

(Whoa steady their friend,you'll give yourself an tumour,I hated breaking the flow
through the this piece,more so here,this rant just hits the right notes for me,it had
a cold and mean feel about it,and the stressing and breaking of words to form short
sentences coupled with punches was real creative,the Titans was a great angle here
also,as I do like me some Mythology,well done this is ripe..)

And made Pangea fuckin' split! ... If I brush you on the chin
I'll crush ya mouth & upper-lip cus when I shadow-box the wind
I punch the mountains into cliffs or a pile of busted bricks ...
Or sum powder I can sniff! ... Got ya drownin' in ya piss ...
From the gallons that I spit! ... Ain't no cowards in the clique
Get devoured like a chip ... cos our power is legit
Fuck an outage or a glitch ... fed Galactus on a binge!
An assassin wit a grin ... I been "Deadpool'n" fools
Since Achilles took a swim ... inside... the "River Styx" ...
Just remember I'm the SHIT ... as I defecate these hits!
This is SELF signin' out on your death certificates!!!

(now this like the last segment was nicely done and expressed here,again Mythology
raises it head with some ripe depictions attached,I also liked the inclusion of starting
with a whole and the breaking it down to morsels or rubble,this was a verse that went in,and beat the shit out of Charon at the Styx River in the process,beautifuly done here,and the inners were a complete joy to read along with the vocab,ripe work,real Ripe..)

Good work guys,this was strong showing from you all,plus an enjoyable one too,and
good to see this top tier writing in a crew drop..thanks for the read..peace.



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@Sky: I'm glad you popped in. I haven't seen you in a minute. Thanks for reading my dude and I'm glad you like that line. I hope it reads the same as I hear it in my head.

@Ven: Damn, bro. We were about to hold out an extra day too. And I know your contribution would have been sick. No need to waste it tho. Drop it in the Crew Chat whenever you can and I'll def jump down on it. Thanks for the feed tho and letting us know which parts you enjoyed best.

@iLL: Trust me ... the hate is mutual lol. No worries tho we can scrap it out in our collab to come. Shits gonna be heat on top of heat. Looking forward to it, bro. Thanks for the feed and the quotes.

Crim: Uhhh ... what can I say, bro? You're an asset to the site and a vital function to this forum. Enjoyed the in-depth break down and your understanding/opinion of nearly every line. Props on top of props!
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EDIT: I meant to write "spell" and obviously not "spelled". lol
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good looks on all these rplies especially crimson you fucking are such an intricate part of this site.  Thanks for the breakdowns everyone.  Also no one pissed in my cereal I just say the truth lol.  

I'll be giving critique for all my fam on this in a bit.

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when i read this drop, i had the urge to rub my nipples, David Chappelle style




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Post Options Post Options   Likes (1) Likes(1)   Quote Lowest Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 21 December 2016 at 8:40am
Man this was fire....
All the intro's were lit but I digged Sammy's craft the most...
The name itself already tells how explosive this will be.

Nigma-
"Been away, back with a flame tantrum, stay blastin
Take action passin through links like chained phantoms
Leave 16’s slain, pack em in 8 caskets
Deliverin straight jabs in a great stance till ya face spastic
After pain, left with a strained neck that you’ll claims fractured
Give you fake bastards Cobain classes of brain damage
A day passes, the flames vanish,
You change, bashed into stray atoms
You straight backwards, Not gay bashing
Like, play back the frames man!
Framed glasses, champagne splashing".
:Straight up on point, I dig the multi's that the layout impeccable.

S(HAM)Y-
it's like a monster loose. i aint talkin guns when i say i'll cock and shoot
meaning when i see your chick
i'll treat the bitch like a prostitute
if she a chicken head, what u think my cock'll do?
my pen game stays solid who wanna brawl? not u
i'm like Duran, my stone hands can break a jaw or two
I"m Jaws, rappers are like trespassers,
they get chomped and chewed.
: Ah yes, this will never get old...Mental destruction kinda bars, the thing that makes it stand out is the humour too. Loved it.

Exo-
Yall couldn't wish to be the best like I was lootin' fountains!-
was the only one who took a stand and defended our craft!-
Yall had a lot to PM but no spine, snakes in the grass-
No one lent a hand while I was breaking my back!-
But the past few months I've been in a mystic fortress-
Inhaling the scent of Rigamortis from decrepit corpses -
that were bludgeoned inside dungeons only lit by torches-
:now this was a massive work of art, spreading knowledge and keeping emcees aware of they stand. Like I said; Work of art

Self Activate-
To every sucka tryna run up ... you fuck 'n round wit Death
Cos I'm a catch a body when I put this shotty to ya chest
You a hobby not a threat, I can kill ya just fa fun & I prolly wouldn't sweat
Watch me lob 'em to the left when they log-on to the "net"
How the fuck a bunch pussies tryna squabble wit a "vet"?
Tryna claw me wit ya text, talkin' softly under breath
... Until we face-to-face and I calmly interject ...
: Applauding...The net and vet lines hit me hard, I'm keeping track of what this being creative thing means by the verse.

Guys this was well accumulated and laced. Props
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Originally posted by Exoduzt Exoduzt wrote:

good looks on all these rplies especially crimson you fucking are such an intricate part of this site.  Thanks for the breakdowns everyone.  Also no one pissed in my cereal I just say the truth lol.  

I'll be giving critique for all my fam on this in a bit.

I think you meant an Integral part of this site. 
Go my Minions!


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Feedback only from this point please
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@Lowest: thanks for the feed my dude it's much appreciated. I'm glad you got something out of those lines.
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