Open Mic: Ya Gonna Die Bitch...And Thats That

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    Posted: 30 January 2005 at 1:01am

this a verse bein put together for an audio collab...peep

And Dont Even Get Me Started On Veronicas Shit
honest She was on it, she thought i really wanted her clit
but i never thought of the bitch, phones off...im dodgin the bitch
One taste and shes askin for more sorta like Oliver Did
I lied to her...said im takin her to a cottage n shit
Gave her a vodka...hell...well Alot of it is
Started sobbing...slut was fallin n Vomiting ::ICHH!!::
Dont you fuckin scream, HELP IS IMPOSSIBLE BITCH!
What are you a fuckin vampire? Often chompin on dicks
Left the poor nigga lookin like you were gnawing on it
ive been plottin this shit since the problems started n shit
You were milkin me hoe, but now your lactose in tolerant bitch
I love you so much...girl ill stick you in a prada coffin n shit
Bury you alive, throw some rocks on top, lock n sauder the bitch



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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote -Orion- Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 30 January 2005 at 10:14am
Like I said... nice continuous rhyme scheme, pretty solid flow... closer and lactose intolerant bits were dope...1
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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4 lines ended in shit, 3 ended in bitch... Other than that, hotness...
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it was off and on..good..bad..good..bad..good..etc. rhyme scheme was simple..other than all that its good
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I wasnt Feelin'... weird Topic... and said 'Bitch' & 'Shit' too much..

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Post Options Post Options   Likes (0) Likes(0)   Quote King Jehu Quote  Post ReplyReply Direct Link To This Post Posted: 04 February 2005 at 8:48pm
Originally posted by Hybrid Hybrid wrote:

rhyme scheme was simple


You must be retarded... you try rhyming 4 syllables for 16 lines and then tell me if it's simple... It's the only reason the "Bitch" and "Shit" are tolerated in the verse.
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