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Anubis
Veteran Joined: 24 October 2003 Location: Australia Status: Offline Points: 964 Text Rank: #12 Stats: 4-6-0 Form: Unknown |
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Posted: 31 May 2005 at 8:52am |
Just something Shortish...
Gunshots, beging of gang warfare, acts of brutality, buckshot, no thoughts of welfare, escalating around me Calmly now, take a breath, aim and pull the trigger They allow themselves death, no skill in this villager Bang, massive bleeding, Bang, loss of feeling BANG, Vision Bluring, BANG, no returning Expectation of continuation as they move in unison Basic formation of intimidation, a move of despiration An ethinc combination, black, white and asian Seeking Compensation for a previous elimination Reaching their destination, feeling of determination Left in tatters, demoralization, Far from salvation Blood Splatters, a lack of information, of preperation Coagulation and the passing of foriegn Congradualtions This harsh reality, bleeding the masses dry Sitting above it all, watching, wondering why they cry Removed from it all, once a factor in their hollow views from the world with its limited knowledge of hues* *Skin colours |
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Fatal
Superior Member ...Wicked Wit Wordplay... Joined: 08 March 2005 Location: Chicago Status: Offline Points: 6441 Crew: The Dynasty Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 44-4-2 Form: WNNWWW |
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nice imagry, storytelling, good vocab.
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20theTruth
Superior Member Joined: 10 August 2004 Location: United States Status: Offline Points: 2155 Text Rank: Unranked Stats: 16-6-0 Form: WWWWWW |
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i really liked this
flowed well and had nice vocab nice meaning and nice portrayal stay up Anubis. |
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