Open Mic: Cornershop Robberies (complete)

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    Posted: 27 July 2005 at 6:48pm

it didnt have a 3rd verse Last time but its done

Comedy Track from Redemption mixtape..

basically its about a Guy who gets so drunk he robs a traditional English Cornershop...3rd verse needs finishin off

beat-Shadowpump-The Buck stops here

Intro.

(drink,Hittin Bar) Ahhh,Damn.....get on the Ground Put em up..Where u going Huh? (gun shots)

Verse 1.

Its was Early 6am,When i Rose From the Bed..
Last Nights Drinkin,Had left Holes in Head..
It took a moment to Shed,the Light Onto the Pupils..
so I ran Butt Naked,Through the Hall to the Cubical..
Shit Didnt Seem usual,I cudnt Remember Anythin..
Last night Damn i was the Drunkest ive ever bin..
a Strong Smell of Piss,Was coming from the Bathroom..
i didnt Take much Noticed till i tripped on sum Trash-Eww..
Bits of Fast-Food..was covering the Floor..
then i noticed in a flash..i had Pissed Up the Door..(shit)
Disided-to-ignore..I strolled Down my Stairs..
Swayed into the Kitchen..And Guess what was There..
A Shiney Black Handgun..but The Chamber was empty..
And Next to Toaster Was a bag full of Twentys..
What cudda Tempt-me..To Face some Evil..
But noticed on the Clock it was the First of April..(phew)
so i Took it a Joke..My Friends Messin-about..
Wasnt No Point at me Stressin-em-out..
So i Chose my Cereal..i cudnt Wait to gobble..
Untill i opened up the Fridge..with no MILK IN THE BOTTLE..(damn)

Hook x2

Stick ur Hands Up,Raise em high in air..
this is not a Joke..theres no Truth or Dare..
so stick em up..yo My Eye Sights Wobberly..
quik Hit the Ground..Its a CornerShop Robberies..

Verse 2

i was Sat at the Counter,With my Head in my Palms..(yawn)
My whole Body's Heavy,I've got Lead in my Arms..
I Pulled on my Coat..Slip my Trainers On..(zip)
Picked up the Ipod, For my Favourite-song..
Strolled out the Door,took a Left down the Street..
Only to Be Stopped By three Armed Police..
The Road Was Blocked off..So i asked what Happened..(huh)
there was an Armed Robbiery n they Guy Started Clappin..
Quickly-Distracted..I Stood there Stunned..
Then my Memory Shot Back to that Empty gun..(fuck)
huh?..Crazy Thoughts Began Rushin about..
So i quickly Turned Round And Headed Back to house..(runnin)
I had to Remove the Handgun..But where cud i Put it..
the Doorbell rang.. [its the Police Can we come in]..
Fuck-it I put the Pistol down my Pants..
Opened The Door..then Adjusted my Stance..(uhh)
The Coppa took a Glace..at my Mis-shapen figure..
i cudnt Stay still with my Cock on the Trigger..
[Mr.Briggs..Can we please Come inside]..
i couldnt say no..but it was on my mind..(wut the..)

Hook x2

Stick ur Hands Up,Raise em high in air..
this is not a Joke..theres no Truth or Dare..
so stick em up..My Eye Sights Wobberly..
quik Hit the Ground..Its a CornerShop Robberies..

[Verse 3].

now the Coppa's in the house..hes lookin about..
this big fat Bastard Sat there on my couch..(Soooo)
i have to Get out..so i said i need the Toilet..(Erm yeah)
i opened the Window..n [yup] i was quick..(Breath)
I didnt want-this..i just Got Shit on my Nike-Air..(Aww shit)
And every corner I turn a Cop is stood right-there..(damn)
The nightmare was worse..[The Suspect is a Mr.Briggs]..(scanner)
[a 5''3 Midgit, wearing Black..that ginger Kid]..(scanner)
time Finish-this..so i hit him with a Lunchable..(ping)
An knowing my Luck the cop was the Cunstable..(SHIT)
[Oi You]..The Cop was Running towards me..(breath)
Next thing i Know Five Cops are all On me..(Get him lads)
I Tried to Break-Free..They hit With the Trunchen..(pow)
This Little Fat that resembled a Munchkin..
Just kept Punchin..I could Barely Stand-up.(uhuhuh)
So they kicked me to ground n Slapped on the Handcuffs..(Snap)
Now im All Banged Up..Its Time to Relax..
Untill im told my Cell mate Killed his wife an Axe..
Infact...The only thing that i fought was funny..(hmm)
Was the Cops Face, when i Asked to keep the money..(haha)

Hook x2

Stick ur Hands Up,Raise em high in air..
this is not a Joke..theres no Truth or Dare..
so stick em up..My Eye Sights Wobberly..
quik Hit the Ground..Its a CornerShop Robberies..

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nice briggz...shit is tight...the rhyming was good and you kept to the story very good...i liked this one...last bar was funny man...lmfao...props

 

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Hmmmm

Ur a good writer, keep it up










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i jus' actually took the time to read this...i dont think i read it b4 ( u said u had dropped the 1st two verses earlier), but yeh, it was worth tha read...the 1st two verses corresponded better tho...its prolly cuz u wrote em together, and waited a bit before u wrote the 3rd? good spit cus i kno not many people can tell stories in rhyme on a beat, usin the degree of complexity u used
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^ agreed. nice tsory telling, had funny parts and nice imagery

i wan hear da finished product
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Goodlookin on the Feed, Hopefully it will be complete soon
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Sorry but in what universe are you a complex MC? This was ok but it's not what I would call "complex"... it's not what I would call "simple" either so I ain't dissin you... it was straight... one of ya better pieces recently... and no I'm not dissin you cuz you're in Front Line I'm jus givin you feedback... but then you're an intelligent human being so u knew that already... Look forward to seein n hearin it all finished up... feelin the story definitely

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. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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And I know ShadowPump... he's dope
. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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I said: good spit cus i kno not many people can tell stories in rhyme on a beat, usin the degree of complexity u used


thats y i added the word "degree" in there...for tellin a story its complex...most would use simplier rhymes when tellin a story is basically what i was sayin
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I love the Beef Yummeee lol

naa goodlookin on the feed Big O

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My bad, if u had said it like that to start with I'da got it...but even so I misread

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personally i liked it

and would like to hear it as an audio
so if sumone could let me know if/when its posted

oh and its nice to see ya can insult ya self
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lol
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