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    Posted: 25 May 2004 at 6:47am
  • 2 rounds
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  • Votes from any accepted, must be explained
  • 5 = KO, 7 = win
  • Max 24hrs between each verse

Me first.. and no it isn't pre-written.. it's just that I wrote it before settin' the thread up...

G'luck, peace.

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They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
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{swallow this...}

SHATTERED-PLATE-GLASS surrounds the dusty floor
TRUST-ME-WHORE!, "pickin' you apart" like a CRUSTY-PORE!
You a spot in the rap game, synonymous with "IR-RI-TATION"
no amount of SEG-RE-GATION could deter the AGG-RI-VATION
of ONE-SINGLE-VOTE goin' AGAINST-YOUR-NAME!:
"That's hate!", "Bullshit!" "I thought we were tight mayne?"
*BUZZER* WRONG!, you been done like a bitch prick
{WIPE THAT BASTARD'S BATTLE SCORE!}
theifin' yo' rep leaves you lookin' ANYTHIN'-BUT-SICK!
CUT-QUICK, VEINS-SPLIT, blood an' puss spray like JAM-an'-MUSTARD
Corpse ENCRUSTED-WIT'-DRY-BLOOD, you been DONE an' daymn! you been DUSTED!

{deep breaths now...}

Virus injected, this is battle-rap perfected
You punch like a virgin, "it's there, I just don't know where to direct it!"
Selected, you've been culled from the flock as the next-kid to be shown the exit
Complex shit
, Orion ain't no snake or whack dog, ILLA stands corrected
now SIT-THE-FUCK-DOWN!, knock you outta this e-town, ILLA got disconnected
I move cold as ice, heat-seek can't detect it, harder than you when Clipz gets ya erected
"Flash quick rhymes" leave you in epileptic fits, pathetic spits don't match my poisonous shit, beat me? Hahah, maybe if you bit like Hectic
Apoplectic
with rage, you infected, goin' green on the battle stage, keelin' over an' spewin' vomit, first time ILLA's "spat sick on a webpage!"

Drop.
Peace

. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 May 2004 at 6:48pm

check this guy out....

{round 1}

(wordplay to show him how its done)

orion....i got u shakin-heavil.....like a non-wankers nutsack
so fuck-that....even if u ejectculated at me.....u still couldnt bust-back!

and im sick-an-vigorous like phaedophiles gettin thurr hands on kiddies
by-the-way...ur rank gon drop like ya numbas a droopin-tittie
and ill squash-ya-spine.....by dancin all over u like im a hundred-diddys

and ya punches are unlandable.....like ufo's...ull actually never see illa landin on the FLOOR
and when ya moms cums round to my crib..i act like santa-claus...all i scream
is 'ho ho whore'

dawg trust...u dont want-no-more....u soft like britney and i got a crew like bugsy malone
i cant believe im fuckin with pup sta-tus....u a high-class english-man...turned into hiphops fake-est

and theses people relate to me like ali....jordan....and 2pac...they relate to u on how to wank in a tube-sock!!

{round 2}

(total blastin)

yo this vigorous-spit.....splits-lips...like dicks to virgin-lips
orion-kicks..but like a baby-bitch...he chills-wid-women...when-ever attached to hoes-hips {MOTHER}

and his pretty face has-had-IT...i dip jokers like u in-acid...
like batman-back at-it?!

an take ur rap-commision...ILLA CEO ov da rap-division....geeks like u....have to ask fo MY-permission
and u MOD-ified like gays attacks-in-prison...a new tail wont let u fail like gay-capitalism

an he's sooo WACK..his flows are like LAX the way his bars be BOLD-in-CRAP

but SCOTTY this webpage has crashed...next time i klash....VIRUS-PROTECT my shit..and dont forget-that-chap!

orion dawg i DONT even UNDASTAND ya spit.... u spittin non-directive pointless and hopeless diss

cus dis cambridge posh-cat loves graspin on sum-dick.....claimin-he-thug?? what??! i thought cambridge-was-rich??!
so get-lost..u a disgace to rap-bitch.....intellectual knowledge in here....gets u wrecked-and-split!

peace da illsta











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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 25 May 2004 at 9:04pm

Round 2. Choke on this...

I don't like the SOUND-OF-YO'-BARK, so I've COME-TO-BITE-KID, I STRIKE-LIKE-LIGHTNIN'
I ain't Kaygee, if you wanna play me best TRY-RE-CY-CLIN'!

Get ON-YO'-BIKE-AN' run for the PARAMEDICS, you SO-PATHETIC, I SPIT-PROFETIC
Northern bastard wit' no class, too dumb fo' Cambridge GEDDIT?

I REP-IT like "YOU-A-CLEAN-JERK", you FALLIN' BEHIND IN ALL ASPECTS
"Stretched" multis, "broken" punches - after Clipz this is HOW-YOUR-ASS-GETS!

Reserved youz CASKETS "swingin' PUNCHES-PER-BAR" like RAP-WRECKIN'-BALLZ
not BREAKIN'-FALLS you FALLIN'-HARD an' fast to yo' SECOND-LOSS

Only GOT-ONE? Bullshit, you weak whack an' samey, done TOO-MANY-POOR-SPITS
DOUBLE-BARREL SHOTGUN in yo' mouth, can't escape through BITCHIN' or FORFEITS

Check the PRAGMATICS, MORE-HITS land than on tha "ILLA EXPOSED" WEBSITE
"kick tha BAD-HABITS", caught in the HEADLIGHTS, HUMMER-HITS YOU DEAD-RIGHT

SHATTERED-SHARDS-of-GLASS, almost as broken as your FUCKED-FLOW-SPITS
Corpse rolls INTO-THE-GRASS, LAST-LAUGH is mine, ENJOY-THE-DOLE-TRIP

SMASHED-YO'-RECORD-DEAL, tighten WIRES-ROUND-YO'-NECK, ENGRAVE THE MIC IN YO' SKULL
DRAG-YO'-FACE along the switchboard, still "PUSHIN' WRONG BUTTONS" an' you STILL-DULL

DISTURBED, this rap leaves your family PERTURBED an' ANXIOUS-WIT'-DREAD
SQUEEZE-n'-POP yo' neck between the LEGS of YO' HOSPITAL-BED!

My SHIT'S-ACIDIC, you CAN'T-RAP, get WIDDIT, "UNLOAD SHELLS" down yo' throat like a LEPROTIC SNAIL
SKULL-CRUSHED, FACE-FLUSHED, BREATH-HUSHED an' weak coma leaves you in NEUROTIC HELL

Game over.

. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
Nah . . .
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 5:31pm

lol.......
damn u are wack son


check-it.....

lol.......
damn u are wack son


check-it.....

{round 1 wordplay-wizard}

YO he may be indian...but im Osama...throwin words-like-planes...i-bring-death
and ya texts suffercated....like i grab letter-necks....and squeezed out every-last-breath

so i changed his religion! he now a christian...not a muslim cus i crucified ALL skriptz
wiped-him-clean
...like his spit was pampers...and tossed-him-a-loss like every1 did to a-clipz

a
nd whats wid clonin syms-style.....damn u stooped-low.....copyin da evil....'ya fakeness gotta go!

suls-prewritten.....illa-stricken.....his flows-bitten....and like kittens i give dis cat 1-good-LICKIN!
and ill pull feathers off this bird...decapi-tate his beak...stand over him and say'now whose da chicken'!

but dawg ur style isnt hiphop...u slang like RoCk....when im HEAVY..and my METAL-pops

so like nikey 'jus do it'.....play wid ya gay-emotions...experiment with guys...wid 5tubs-ov-lotion
so ORION-PROMOTION.....FAGS-WANTED!...to bang balls so hard....his nuts hav DISTORTION

yo like RAP-tor.....imma eat his neck...and rip flesh out...so he gains-my-respect
and my punches got-u-decked....and ya multi's hurt my nose...they be stankin-like-sweat!

so imma keep blastin-dis-bastard..till SUL's white like-he-plastered...
illa da natural-di-saster.....orions life got-answered....he dies tonite...CUS his spit cant-RANSON

so like wizardz-i-hit...allah-kazam-dis-bitch...ex-SPELL posh-spice with DIS acidic-spit

u aint jehu....u cant beat-da-master....id-snap-ya-back...like old ladies....fallin-over with-cancer

now what!?! perfecto-and-jehu.....gon shit-on-u like em and d12....u fuckin book-mark...ur done..ur shelved!

so ill leave u CUT everywhere...then comes orion SEASONIN...salt-and-peppa in the wounds to help the breathe-en-in
dickriders-be-gievin..CAMPain-to-GAY-rights....after his ass-stops-bleedin...
but wid these lefts-and-rights......its like my punches-be-steerin...and this aint close this muthafuckin clear-win

peace da illsta

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 6:01pm
Flow:orion (not as many forced)
Personals:Orion. 'ONE-SINGLE-VOTE goin' AGAINST-YOUR-NAME!:
"That's hate!", "Bullshit!" "I thought we were tight mayne?"< and about ow he recycles .
Multis:close but overall orion <i felt these
Punchs:ILLA <class stuff man.
Wordplay:ILLA <


overall/vote~orion

If ILLA thinks this is dickryding, its not.buts your battle your call

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 6:12pm
now as you know i always vote on punches, and wordplay..

and this is a fucking hard battle to decide -
i feel that punch wise ILLA hurt more apart from the line that raptor higlighted..

wordplay - Orion took this just - bit more creativity but again only just..

Er fuck..

damn close..

ILLA shades it.. just. Mainly on the consistency of the whole thing.





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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 6:17pm
WOW...hot spitz from both...

heres the breakdown

  • Punches ~ Illa
  • Multis ~ Orion
  • Wordplay ~ Illa
  • Flow ~ Orion
  • Structure ~ Both
  • Imagination ~ Orion
  • Personals ~ Orion
This battle was very close, i didnt like the way the wordplay and multis were displayed in either bold or brackets...makes it hard to read, Alot of effort has gone into these verses from both but only one person can win...shame!

vote goes to orion

well done to both

respect to ya both!
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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 8:26pm

I liked this line from orion - "I move cold as ice, heat-seek can't detect it"

and this one""Flash quick rhymes" leave you in epileptic fits"

This line from Illa - "by-the-way...ur rank gon drop like ya numbas a droopin-tittie".

and this one - "an he's sooo WACK..his flows are like LAX the way his bars be BOLD-in-CRAP"

Tyte.

First glance leave's Orions with more constant punches while illa had more filler'z and less plausable effect.

And this from Orion'z second verse - "SHATTERED-SHARDS-of-GLASS, almost as broken as your FUCKED-FLOW-SPITS
Corpse rolls INTO-THE-GRASS, LAST-LAUGH is mine, ENJOY-THE-DOLE-TRIP"

and the following -"SMASHED-YO'-RECORD-DEAL, tighten WIRES-ROUND-YO'-NECK, ENGRAVE THE MIC IN YO' SKULL
DRAG-YO'-FACE along the switchboard, still "PUSHIN' WRONG BUTTONS" an' you STILL-DULL".

Tyte flavour on that last one .

and this - "ANXIOUS-WIT'-DREAD
SQUEEZE-n'-POP yo' neck between the LEGS of YO' HOSPITAL-BED". - NYCE!!!!.

Man this one by illa is my favourite from this battle - "YO he may be indian...but im Osama...throwin words-like-planes...i-bring-death
and ya texts suffercated....like i grab letter-necks....and squeezed out every-last-breath

so i changed his religion! he now a christian...not a muslim cus i crucified ALL skriptz
wiped-him-clean
...like his spit was pampers...and tossed-him-a-loss like every1 did to a-clipz".

This one was alright - "so like nikey 'jus do it'.....play wid ya gay-emotions...experiment with guys...wid 5tubs-ov-lotion
so ORION-PROMOTION.....FAGS-WANTED!...to bang balls so hard....his nuts hav DISTORTION" - Made me laugh - good one.

I had to mention this - "so like wizardz-i-hit...allah-kazam-dis-bitch...ex-SPELL posh-spice with DIS acidic-spit" - Really nyce ryme style wiyth enjoyable content.

final analysis:

Orion'z first 2 good flow'z make up for Illa'z first filler verse and Illa'z really good second verse.

Illa I would give it to you if you came on the first verse like you did on the second but you should'nt have rushed it or whatever you did that fucked it.

Regardless Illa'z second flow nearly took out Orion'z 2 verse'z with one spit - Much prop'z but you can't b that slack brah, you let me down man.

Vote - Orion.


 

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 26 May 2004 at 11:14pm

Damn... if illa's first verse was spat twice, he woulda lost...
He came real hard on the second one. Multis were good in both, though orion had more multi syllable multis. The wordplay is hot on this too... Illa wins it on that. Punches... personals... a real hard one to decide...

based on straight up punches and wordplay, which are the most important aspects of any battle, and after careful addition of everything that this battle encompasses, I have decided on one vote... and it hurts a bit to have to vote against him for the third time... I didn't think it could be done...
Vote: ILLA

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 5:30am

So far 3-1 orion'z way.

I wanna see who the winner is c'mon vote peep'z, 1.

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 7:32am

aite great battle but looking at dis battle v carefully i feel that it was extremely close and that both of you were on top of your game.

Multis - Orion
Personals - Illa
Punches - Orion
Vocab - Illa
Flo - Orion

Vote - Orion

EDIT: for ILLA: I've deleted two posts below where I said his vote won't be counted unless he explains why his vote changed, and he did explain that the second spit ruined it for him. That's it...

Currently: 4-2



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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 9:21am

wot a fucking battle... illa u still dope man caz i aint seen much of ur stuff l8ly but that was gd form, Orion anotha great spit an jus by such a close margin pipped illa here,

Illa u had great personals, an tha vocab was out of this world, im takin notes here.. Orion you had better a better flow to urs and tha multis were jus a bit better than illa's, i think tha pucnhes were quite even both very good came fast an hard hittin,

But ima vote orion because his flowed better

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 9:57am

Wikid battle their very much enjoyed all the rhymes that came out, such a good battle cos uve both got such styles so always good to see them against eachother. But theirs always gota be a winner, i'll show u how i saw this 1:

Orion
Orion u came out their with alot of creativity and alot of great imagination used in your lines. Flowed really well at times, especially like sum of thie rhymes you came out with like:

"Reserved youz CASKETS "swingin' PUNCHES-PER-BAR" like RAP-WRECKIN'-BALLZ
not BREAKIN'-FALLS you FALLIN'-HARD an' fast to yo' SECOND-LOSS"

Thought that right their was a nice 1 from u, also thought u had alot of good structure throughrt, didnt fault 2 much

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Illa yours came together alot more for me, found it much better to read and had alot of good rhymes in their. Wordplay used was good and all came out structured oright. Few of the lines i liked from u were:

"and im sick-an-vigorous like phaedophiles gettin thurr hands on kiddies
by-the-way...ur rank gon drop like ya numbas a droopin-tittie"
and
"so ill leave u CUT everywhere...then comes orion SEASONIN...salt-and-peppa in the wounds to help the breathe-en-in
dickriders-be-gievin..CAMPain-to-GAY-rights....after his ass-stops-bleedin...
but wid these lefts-and-rights......its like my punches-be-steerin...and this aint close this muthafuckin
clear-win"

Finished off well good their liked that, it basically all came together more for me, flowed alot nicer and was much better to read.

Vote: ILLA

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 11:00am

orions .. didnt do his best here, his wordplay and punches in the first round sorta gabbed on, and punches were at quite weak for u. still u didnt do nethin wrong lyrically ie. multi's, flow. vocab, all gud shit, , ya 2nd round was aite but not ur average shit...all round u should of came with more sick punches and less filler, for example your  buzzer line and i thought we were tight mayne bit,wasnt reall a dis to illa. this is the only downfall to your verses

illa: came with the stronger battle verses all round, everyline he threw a dis at orion, with gud personals/punches, his multis was jus as gud as orions , the only reason illa gets my vote is becuase he had the stronger 1st round...

vote: illa

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 12:44pm

5-4.....

yo raptor i thought u coulda explained ur shit alot betta....but whatever

and j-dash-p......i dont like ya vote son
u say u voted orion because my second spit dropped and then u went on showin peeps ur fav lines off me and all ur fav lines where all from my second verse

that aint real dawg......but whatever

uppin

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 1:18pm

J-Dash-P said you lost it 'cuz of your first verse, not your second.

I thought Raptor's was OK.. he gave examples at least, but if you want him to explain it more I'm happy to cancel it till he does.

Peace

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 27 May 2004 at 1:34pm

yeah sorry dash mistake son....

i was a lil crunked when i read it last night but still my first verse annilated my second verse...how u didnt see that i dunno

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 28 May 2004 at 3:29am

ok, here it goes,

Punches: Illa

Multis: Orion

Wordplay: Illa

Flow: Orion

Structure: Illa

Imagination: Orion

Personals: Illa 

Vote: Illa

Good verse(s) by both Illa's killer puches were matched by Orion's Killer multi's, once again great flow by both, well done

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Direct Link To This Post Posted: 28 May 2004 at 7:22am

I don't know man when I was readin ya first verse all ya punches were'nt that hard hittin and I was thinkin what? - This dude is weak somethin - I just was'nt feelin it - no diss brah it was alright but when I read ya first verse I was like wtf - this shyt tyte as fuck - I was like woah!.

Ya second verse though nearly took the cake if you kept the deep pucnches continuous I woulda voted you but it was a near perfect flow. There was only a few weak point'z in my mind in the verse but if u compensated that and brang that lil more edge I woulda been freakin the fuck out and gave that prop'z bad.

Sorry brah I just was'nt feelin ya first verse and that sorta let it down for me and because Orion had 2 decent flow'z it made up for your just short of perfect second verse and your weaker first verse.

The key here for you to understand is your first verse may not have been bad it'z just I did'nt feel it for how I read ryme'z.

I'm a deep thought provocative emcee and I like deep thought out shit. How you come in on the second verse is a great example. You went on for like nearly six lines on the same subject linking all different spectrum'z of the aspect and I liked it.

Over-all this was a tyte battle - Prop'z illa keep up yo shyt man don't let my vote'z ya - If there'z anythin you can elevate from my thesis use it and grow.

Sorry if ya felt I did'nt speculate how u expected me to I'm just tryna be honest.

Peace.

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