State of LA pt II ft unlm & dal
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Topic: State of LA pt II ft unlm & dal
Posted By: Kay B
Subject: State of LA pt II ft unlm & dal
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 9:51am
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State of LA pt II ft unlm & dal Mixed up part I, told story's even ya'self hailed An La state of mind featuring pfeif, new team to tell tales Take a seat and listen up...Let do this U Ya talk shit, dirty mouths considerd as sheilds Things change, never stay the same cos diffrences build Takin' titles, shit all you do is claim dreams Jealous cos shit's run by diffrent members of the SAME team Dyansty's STILL runnin this fucker! It's a shame see, we back down the exact path Where five pages reach a result : ALL you do is extract laughs Now that's harsh, people puttin em' selfs there? Dropping more than crazy mothers desperate for wealthfare! Dal claims ya crazy, i just say you a delirious kid Fatal claims ya ass is fake, i disagree, ya REALLY a bitch Back to serious shit, were clearly lacking in brains I coulda sworn i read three diffrent feedbacks exactly the same Re-tract what ya claim, next minute u reversin ya love Than im the dopest again, well depends on the person above Gimme a sec, I'll tell you what's funny though This gotta be the only time me and U are cummin close Jumped in the ring four times, i aint duckin' shit I aint NEVER take shots at legends...so take a fucking hint Ya shit reversed kid, it's funny how times meet Dal had that busta move quick, like shootin at rhymes feet Attacked the wrong team, a mistakes what they'll say Now you gun think all i did was diss...well thats the state of LA Had enough?...I have, go get em U Moan n' groan at the lost art of advice, nothings nice Thrown on our own when we on the same side of the dice Feed? Give me a cut of that slice, our members sinking Writing and not feeding is like seeing but then not blinking Start thinking, We feel lies rather than words of the wise toward some fighting Realize whys LA only rap site where most bored of writing? Bored of feeding, reading, and needing, where does it stop We're not emotional just say what you feel on the drop If it flop, elevate n' get a chance, you would've lost lesser LA lost substance "trans/parent" like raising a cross dresser Venomous STILL runnin' this fucker! right Point and...Point?Ermm Many used to be sick, but now Ram'll slaughter ya spits LA took a "turn for the wurst" like direction to BBQ pits Bitches quit, and what's worst, people faking their fits Let the "talk show your bitch behind" like Oprah takin' a shit We're breaking quick, is it cool to quit? I'll try it for a bit Then try making new sick shit in hope my motivation is lit Just sit there and ignore the fact they close their eyes Like faulty hacky sacks people ain't got enough balls to rise Place to relate hobbies but not enough room in the halls Being here is like in a relationship where the boyfriend never calls ^Right Fatal?  Getting respect ain't hard..stay active, drop hard, with smiles Be creative, have imagination, collaborations, and a mix of styles Don't take it so seriously, let fate play n' pass another day Pathetic beef a poetic thief but it never changes..the state of LA... This is the state of LA, Where shit is fragrantly foul Where weak herbs think they great, And frequently hate with a smile I'm just breakin' it down, Telling the truths that need to be heard This the place where disrespect is shown without speaking a word Technique is preferred, Speech transfers demanding a presence What other site you know, Where somebody like Ram is a Legend Where else can one crew be fuckin' dead at this second And at the same time, Be run by a professional man that's respect The Amateur presence, Out weights the pro's by a ton And the musical preference, Is ain't track without the smoke of a gun Woods left cause he was hating and hoping that some- One would agree, That a diss was weak, But he was being openly dumb State of LA, Number of Audio artist is growing and spread But somehow, The fucking collab is just about known to be dead Even though we have said on many occasion, We getting it done All we ever do it talk, Kinda funny how the shit ain't begun After numerous attempt, Truth is I'm hating to say That this shit'll never change, It's all just the State Of LA -------------  |
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Posted By: frank white
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 11:04am
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Okk, apart from being left out of these verses i really enjoyed them. Each emcee brought their own individual style. There was a lot of truth expressed about the way that la is progression especially in regard to the lack of crew activity and the nature of feedback people get. Things like a wack joke verse getting 12 pages of feedback but a deope well though out verse getting about 2 peices of feed. Really enjoyed unlm verse as i havent read much of his stuff before and it was dope. Nice job people but dont forget about Franky. ------------- the punching machine 
bad boy 4 life biggie smalls was the illest |
Posted By: Freeda5thDawg
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 12:49pm
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nice shit from all of you...brought not only your different styles, but ur personalities were expressed great in the piece...kay the more fed up style...came attacking much more with some nice lines, especially the opener which i really liked...great flow throughout, great rhyme scheme, truth throughout...U came with the wisdom kinda thing...he was speakin in a more humble manner with da harsh honesty...def agree with da shit u were sayin...sum cool plays u brought in it as well to add some humor to da verse...and dal finished up almost like he's summin up everything of both verses...he mixed in the important points up for a real good verse...real nice flow, and u were sayin some real shit in there that i can agree wit quick...u all brought it well in this, nice stuffness...
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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 12:50pm
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Props, thank free
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Posted By: dalinquent
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 1:34pm
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Good shit kay and U...Felt both verses were dope... Nice aggression shown kay...Was really feeling alot of shit said in here...Such as the two with Dal in em, Lol, j/k...But I thought the verse was hot yo... U, I was really feeling the first section of ya verse, some real street poetry type shit, Second half was good as well, but you flipped the style a bit...Overall good verse Dal, Dope...that's all, just one word for it...lmao ------------- 
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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 6:23pm
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Good job advertising, kay... I clicked on the link from Sage's drop... Heh... Anyway...
Inetersting topic, which is already half the job done when you have an idea of how to write... This was a good read. 3 different styles and each had a line or two that stood out to me... Some lines made me laugh at the raw truth in 'em... Here they are: Kay: Re-tract what ya claim, next minute u reversin ya love Than im the dopest again, well depends on the person above UNLM: We feel lies rather than words of the wise toward some fighting Realize whys LA only rap site where most bored of writing? dal: Technique is preferred, Speech transfers demanding a presence What other site you know, Where somebody like Ram is a Legend |
Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 6:39pm
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This was def a hot collabo...great verses guys. I really cant recall any flaws in the verses....all brought dope shit to the table. Great read yall...
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Posted By: SageOne
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 8:41pm
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Big ups on this one fellas. Heat from all three of you...I especially liked U's verse...straight fire, shit, everybody's was. The way kon put it was true...the "raw truth" is just funny as hell.
"Writing and not feeding is like seeing but then not blinking" And that's the truth haha/
"Jealous cos shit's run by diffrent members of the SAME team"
Also dope...big ups on that line especially.
"I coulda sworn i read three diffrent feedbacks exactly the same"
If you mean what I think you mean by this, then kudos to you haha.
"What other site you know, Where somebody like Ram is a Legend"
Nuff said!
Big ups to everybody on the drop, straight fire all the way through. I dont particularly like readin long ass opens or collabs, but this one was definitely worth it fellas. Props. 1
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Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 11:17pm
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I read it all without knowing wut was the rap abt.. I see Dal was more on the point about the facts and easy to figure out, very crystal clear points... this was funny and real.. UNLM u had some good creativity in yer verses.. Kay u got the most heat in yer verse with more harsh arguments.. My best lines... PROPS!  I didn't know ppl remember me that well, I guess I'm becomin a legend Many used to be sick, but now Ram'll slaughter ya spits What other site you know, Where somebody like Ram is a Legend VVV sorry I hv tendency of editin ma post ------------- 
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Posted By: iCeZ
Date Posted: 20 February 2008 at 11:58pm
kay - as already said to you on msn, dope shit, one of your best for a while ( i think thats 2 dope open mics in a row from you now  )
Jumped in the ring four times, i aint duckin' shit
I aint NEVER take shots at legends...so take a fucking hint that was dope
unlm - you said some pretty true shit here, flow was good i liked this
Don't take it so seriously, let fate play n' pass another day
Pathetic beef a poetic thief but it never changes..the state of LA... dal - nice also some cools thing on the subject in there too,
thought this was funny
Technique is preferred, Speech transfers demanding a presence
What other site you know, Where somebody like Ram is a Legend Overall...a pretty good peice, but instead of just talkin bout how crap LA is or all the negative... how about doing something to turn it into a postive....
start some beef with me or something... Ha ------------- Ice they need time to translate it, That why U let kids down So ya'll should go read my 08 shit, maybe U'll get it now |
Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 8:03am
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Fuck u ice Thanks guys, props on the feed ------------- |
Posted By: G-Pfeif
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 3:04pm
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kay... pretty good.. flow was solid for the most part... loved this line: Re-tract what ya claim, next minute u reversin ya love Than im the dopest again, well depends on the person above nice UNLM... wasnt really feelin it... some lines coulda been good.. but were worded horribly.. like the setup to the trans parent line... flow seemed off to me in places... and some lines were forced... it had a good subject behind it.. but could have been delivered better. Dal.. not bad. flow was pretty good.. but you didnt really say much imo... looks like you left out a few words here and there which made it a lil tough to read... there werent really any punches or plays really... but decent flow.. this line was ok... wording was F'd tho: The Amateur presence, Out weights the pro's by a ton And the musical preference, Is ain't track without the smoke of a gun ------------- <img src="http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v313/G-Pfeif/SuckaMCTo-DoList.png" /> "I'll put a Loss to ya name like a Mexican City" "Ill Put an L to ya EGO like them building blocks" |
Posted By: U.N.L.M.
Date Posted: 21 February 2008 at 3:23pm
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props on all the feed...and ya G, i kind of felt the same way with my piece but at the time i was writing this everything i came up with ideas, lines, etc. seemed forced so i just left it the way it was, but thanks for the feed... Kay you already know what i thought of your verse and Dal your verse was nice all around..Flow was nice and I liked the ram quote and some other ones like this one: This the place where disrespect is shown without speaking a word ------------- 
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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 23 February 2008 at 8:40am
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Props, thanks man
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Posted By: Swift Styles
Date Posted: 24 February 2008 at 9:16pm
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fuckin fire.
great collabo, and awesome idea. I was reaaalllly wanting to see dal drop this tho. Asylum's Still running this bitch! then it would be perfect, seeing how UN and K used it as well. just woulda clicked. UN, ya verse was sick, i liked almost everyline. props all of you for doing this, it was dope -------------  |