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Oh, Shit...50 Bars...Fatal And Dal

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Topic: Oh, Shit...50 Bars...Fatal And Dal
Posted By: Fatal
Subject: Oh, Shit...50 Bars...Fatal And Dal
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 2:45am
Me and Dal fuckin around on MSN...keep in mind that this is all off the top...Dal: Regular font, Fatal: Italic font
 
Enjoy:
 
Yo dog, i go hard, I'll be the one respected next
Cause my flow raw, on beats, im unprotected sex
Protect Ya Neck, Cuz Me And Dal Be Wreckin Heads
We Bringin More Holy Lines Than The New Testement!
Dont Test Us, Bitch,
Or get step on like ants under our feet, bruh
Ya'll cats around more geeks than chemistry sets and beakers
Dont Expect To Beat Us, Cuz We Fryin You Fags
Im Bringin "Shells To A Battle" Like You Was "Fightin Wit Crabs!"
Sendin em right atcha abs, Attackin cats fa the fuck of it yo
You dudes be fleein our flames, Might as well all you fuckers the smoke
One Step And You'll Choke, Im Bringin Flames Like Arsons
And My 'Plays Are Outta This World' Like 'Cardgames Wit Martians!'
You dont wanna start son, Cause ya rhymin bore's newbies
And my punches been known to 'land before time' like that dinosaur movie
Ya Lines Cannot Move Me, Ill Slay These Sinners
Me N Dal Are Rockin Ya Crib, And I Dont Mean Babysitters!
You think you'll take the winners, Dont wanna see us in a brawl
Cause ya ain't 'sayin nothing nice' - Shit you shouldnt say nothing at all
When We Crush Them, They Fall! Our Lines Will De-Rail Them
And We'll 'Fuck Up Ya Delivery' Like 'Negligent Mailmen!"
And give them hell then, Make it obvious you cant hang
Ya'll jus pawns on the net, This shit feels like an online chessgame
We Known To Leave Vets Maimed, Now All These Punks Dead
Ill 'Smash You Dudes In Ya Sleep' And I Dont Mean 'Faulty Bunk Beds!'

We got you callin the feds, Cause we murderin yall when we top charts
And ya bitch forever behind us, Like groupies to rock stars
We Knockin Out Teeth Whenever We Drop Bars, In Fact We Slayin Dentists
So Dont Test Us...You'll 'Get Served Over The Net' Like Games Of Table Tennis!

Leave you gay dudes finished, Drop guys and they spirits
Punches'll have ya face swollen, Like popeye after spinich
You Cant Win This, Cuz Im Nuts So Just Face It
Im Known To Smash Up Bars And Then Fuck The Waitress!
Or touch ya main bitch, You not even findin her cunt
You be like, "Baby its my birthday", She like "its that time of month!"
Now These Dykes Are Done...But Im Like Rambo When Rhymin
You Can Try To Outshine Flash, But Even My Shadow Is Blinded!
Wait, i got to rewind it...Shadow is blinded? That's as dope as it gets
We got you broken to bits, How could you THINK you can cope wit this shit?
There's No Hope When We Spit, These Niggas Need Helping
Im Cuttin Niggas Off The Top Of The Dome Like An Indian Scalping!
You gettin welt man, Nobody's scared of you dudes
Me and Flash like infants, jus call us the terrible two!
Cuz We Smearin You Fools, And When Im Whippin Out My Steel
I'll Have You 'Pussies Tip-Toeing' Around, Like 'Bitches In High Heels!'
We got devine skill, We easily shit on you, sport
Or you'll be in an early grave, Like cummin premature wit a corpse
Leave Em Torn Wit Our Force, When Im Sparkin This Dude
I'll Put The 'Heat To Ya Temple' Like An 'Arsonist Jew!'
 
 
...Boom...

 


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Replies:
Posted By: Swift Styles
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 10:59am
Daaaamn Dope, Fatal going crazy wut h the meta's and dope plays.
Shit was consistant, saw multi spin offs and smooth transactions from both. Enjoyable as hell to read too. but you both brought a different style i think.
what really stood out was Fatal's lines, as they all seemed witty and well worked.
I think the only thing would be too make it different font colors instead of italic's.
dope drop and will probably be a sick example too be used and looked back on for anyone looking to elevate meta's and wordplay.
Thumbs%20Up
 


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Posted By: G-Pfeif
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 11:20am
And my punches been known to 'land before time' like that dinosaur movie
Ill 'Smash You Dudes In Ya Sleep' And I Dont Mean 'Faulty Bunk Beds!'
I'll Put The 'Heat To Ya Temple' Like An 'Arsonist Jew!'

those were some tiiiight lines guys... nice work




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Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 12:28pm
wow this was the dope spit I've seen so far on LA.. like the metaphor and complexity..this was good read all the way and more entertaining then other spits on open mic.. keep spiting..  

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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 1:45pm
Thanks guys for the feedback...me and dal jus started off keystyling cuz we were bored. Dal's dinosaur line was dope...no prewrites baby! lol...

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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 4:55pm
Iono what these guys see in this tbh, it was ok at best not the best from either of you.








That aside, it was preety dope for a key, both had some nice lines best plays were those which g pointed out dal's being my fave cant actually believe its not been used before, well not that iv seen, flow was abit iffy but thats expected tbh...nice shit



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Posted By: Freeda5thDawg
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 9:09pm
not the top-type work from you both but u guys flowed off each other well...the styles blended real nice and the flow kept a well balanced rhythm tho sumtimes lines were a lil stretched...BUT, it's a key, and it was a good one...had some cool lines and plays...they were delivered much better than the effects itself but i enjoyed readin thru and catchin hot ones like the dinosaur one and the jew thing....

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Posted By: World Class
Date Posted: 06 March 2008 at 9:27pm
Sendin em right atcha abs, Attackin cats fa the fuck of it yo
You dudes be fleein our flames, Might as well all you fuckers the smoke
You dont wanna start son, Cause ya rhymin bore's newbies
And my punches been known to 'land before time' like that dinosaur movie
You think you'll take the winners, Dont wanna see us in a brawl
Cause ya ain't 'sayin nothing nice' - Shit you shouldnt say nothing at all
Wait, i got to rewind it...Shadow is blinded? That's as dope as it gets
We got you broken to bits, How could you THINK you can cope wit this shit?
-man, that was some hardcore shit good rhymin wordplay n all , i like your aggressive style better, how the punches seem so direct and offensive and how it all rhymes, this was a great freestyle, used some multies n insulted directly, no like shit except in the dinosaur line which was hot btw, Fatal wordplay hot as hell too, dude plays with words like he was playin scrabble with simile and metaphors he's like a teacher in this sht

You Cant Win This, Cuz Im Nuts So Just Face It
Im Known To Smash Up Bars And Then Fuck The Waitress!
I'll Have You 'Pussies Tip-Toeing' Around, Like 'Bitches In High Heels!'
and what am i supposed to say about that, this was tighter than all my girls' panties man


Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 07 March 2008 at 11:19am
Some of this was hot no doubt, but some were not so great.  You both done well,  many quotable lines, but some were played as fuck! Fatal, you should be ashamed for usin that 'served over the net like table tennis' punch lmao. Hang your head my fellow.
Good job nevertheless


Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 07 March 2008 at 12:24pm
Thanks guys...
 
And Point, didnt you see where i wrote that me and dal were jus messin around over msn, and didnt plan on doin a collabo, it jus happened. So yea, i jus wrote whatever was on my mind, played or not. We started keyin and after a while, we like, "hey this turned out pretty tight"....
 
But yea, thanks for the feed guys...


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Posted By: U.N.L.M.
Date Posted: 10 March 2008 at 11:35pm
Some plays were very tight especially for a key...I could only imagine if ya actually took time to write 50 bars of plays!

Land before time line was nuts
Bunk Bed line was crazy
Waitress bar was cool
Bitches in High heels was a great line
Popeye and spinach line was a cool idea
Arsonist Jew was a great line
Premature with a corpse seemed like a nice idea
Sayin' nothin' at all was a cool line
Indian scalping was cool too..


There were obviously some played and some that maybe could be good ones worked a bit better IMO but there were enough good ones(some i missed in my expo) that i liked to make this a good drop..Dope for a key though...

 





 
 



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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 11 March 2008 at 7:04am
Nice for somethin unexpected. Wacksta's couldnt do this in an MSN key. nice read... some lines were great and some were aight. Good keystyle.



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