Walk on water
Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=15032
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 3:59am
Topic: Walk on water
Posted By: Quintessential
Subject: Walk on water
Date Posted: 13 May 2008 at 12:47pm
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One of my more recent verse. Posted it on another site which I am a member of. Just wanting to get more feedback on it. a slave of passion and dreams, shoulders sprout heavenly wings foreshadows the awakening of the resplendant talent within a skin hardened by scars, beneath exists a spartanized heart ardent and starves to find a place amidst the garden of stars equipped myself with the aegis shield use it as the best defense and brave through swarms of dementors to escape from azkaban reminiscent to david but being pit against ten goliaths as the maker of my destiny, I mould it with these hands of midas and as I wield the excalibur sword, I feel an incredible force engulfs me in its aura only to reveal an impeccable form invade hades with my blade and behead the beast cerberus and take my place at the Round Table on the siege perilous possess the holy grail in my grasp, in it I pore my potion that supplies me the prowess to ride sleipnir, the horse of odin the game is a kingdom and i swore to defend the castle and throne so I break free from this shakles that hold and off to battle I go ------------- Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of... |
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 13 May 2008 at 1:33pm
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Sheeeet!... that was dope man!...lots of quatables... Holla @ me & Unorphadox, i think you'd be'a whole new angle to the crew... ------------- 
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Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 13 May 2008 at 4:29pm
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Word, this was dope. Loved the vocab and the flow was hot. Great read....keep up -------------  |
Posted By: Quintessential
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 9:28am
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actually, its a verse off a track of mine but i suck badly at audios so Imma save ya'll the torment. maybe i will post up the other two verses from the track when i feel like it.
------------- Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of... |
Posted By: Rameez
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 10:43am
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good spit more.. feeling some myth in yer rap.. Excalibur... castle.. throne.. anyways.. lyrically this flow was really smooth, l some nice vocab u used.. and along with multi.. msg was deliver clearly.. keep spiting.. ez ------------- 
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Posted By: Matt The Ripper
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 10:44am
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Two t's, Rameez. Two t's. :) ------------- Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you You aint ready for this, and now you know the truth |
Posted By: Rhymez
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 12:13pm
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Yeah you couldnt do this in audio. this is like another poem but im feeling it still. I like the flow and it was original. no cockyness, money talk, bitches, cars or guns. poem wise 8.8/10 imo |
Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:03pm
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I feel an incredible force engulfs me in its aura only to reveal an impeccable form  gotttttdayummm! that line was fiyah u can definitely rhyme your ass off, you're good at what u do....but that mythological-ish needs ta go, it's cool if you use it sporadically ..sliepner, the horse of odin ...iight lol, do your thing
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Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:24pm
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dope shit, one of the best verses i've seen in a while on here. fuck what everyone else is sayin about the mythology stuff, it's your style and it WORKS. I say run with it. Stay around, if you do it may be worth applying to Asylum. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: hanGing
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 3:55pm
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This could be done in audio deffo..
Nice piece. -------------  |
Posted By: SpellBound
Date Posted: 14 May 2008 at 5:34pm
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As others have already said, dope drop, excellent use of vocabulary and multis. Personally, I'm likin the mythology references, cuz I think it's interesting and put to good use. Keep droppin
-------------  I believe in myself, so count out ever callin me an atheist
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Posted By: Quintessential
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 2:18am
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spell, its me elbee.. didnt you recognize the verse?
------------- Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of... |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 7:50am
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Haha sup elbee, this be bboy dobb, apply to asylum. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Quintessential
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 9:29am
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sorry bro, just applied to unorphodux.. haha.. nice seeing u around
------------- Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of... |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 9:48am
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no worries man, btw diamond on bboy WAS me aswell lol. if shit don't work out with juniors crew then come join asylum. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Quintessential
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 11:14am
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btw, why dont u come around bboy anymore?
------------- Got the style even insomniacs are dreaming of... |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 11:59am
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doesn't interest me anymore man, sick of angel thinkin he runs shit, and the guys who made the thing fun for me (flobot, mode, anaktix, razor, aura) are rarely around. ------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: SageOne
Date Posted: 15 May 2008 at 12:04pm
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Used to stop in on that forum occasionally myself. Dope open mic...especially from a new member...hope to see you stick around. Big ups. |