Open ya eye's for a minute
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:16am
Topic: Open ya eye's for a minute
Posted By: Kay B
Subject: Open ya eye's for a minute
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 12:34am
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Wrote whilst listenin to eminem - beautiful Yup...im still here Open your eyess for a minute, let me exactly explain How i fight the anger, lodged in the back of my brain I'm attackin' it with alchahol, fallin' back into ways But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some Stuck in a slump, trippin out to negative thoughts Pouring another drink, thinking i'm clever and thought Walkin' streets as people would fight n than rob em But vodka would close the shades on the light of the problem Shuttin' myself out from the reality, doors blocked Desperate to escape this room, but it's like the doors locked Memorys touchin' sore spots, envisioning pain Knowing deep down im creating the EXACT same vision again With every toke that i drain, the devils spoken again People preaching for a smile, claiming i supposably changed Doctors diving into my mind, qeustioning pasts Im jus say wondering how long the questions'd last He kept preaching "Kay you'll believe me soon" All i thought is what drink id pour once i leave the room Bes' believe im doomed, so ill release what's true Connected via a split personality, like i was conceived in two Blaming mistakes on the death of a friend "Who died kay?"...ah fuck there's that question again The devil approached me, i was cornerd inside An now the imagine of her in a hospital bed's haunting my mind Damn... -------------  |
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Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 12:38am
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Open your eyess for a minute, let me exactly explain How i fight the anger, lodged in the back of my brain I'm attackin' it with alchahol, fallin' back into ways But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some Imo those were really dope..I loved the similies in there and overall this piece was written really well. It seems the things that are key'ed in like 15 minutes always come out the best because there from the heart..good job ------------- The original comeback kid |
Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 2:06am
| This was sick...loved the flow and the emotion... great read homie |
Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 13 May 2009 at 11:51pm
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props, thanks
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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 3:11am
| I like the Em influence on it... This was one of your best flowing pieces I've read. It was very smooth... Conceptual ideas in the lines were also well done... Nice. |
Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 12:57pm
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props, thanks for the feed kon
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Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 1:12pm
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Yup...flowed lovely But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some But vodka would close the shades on the light of the problem All i thought is what drink id pour once i leave the room  |
Posted By: Bolo
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 12:59am
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damn kay...this was easily the best piece ive ever read by you...u really stepped ur game up...none of ur usual awkward wording...flow was perfect...and the content was dope as hell...good fuckin job, bro, props
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Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 1:08am
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yeah, raw hotness. TBH, I've actually seen better flowing pieces from you, but this was still tight in that area. Content was exceptional, and delivery excellent. Good shit, real deep.
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Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 1:18am
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Props, thanks bo an' nep
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