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Open ya eye's for a minute

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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:16am


Topic: Open ya eye's for a minute
Posted By: Kay B
Subject: Open ya eye's for a minute
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 12:34am
Wrote whilst listenin to eminem - beautiful


Yup...im still here

Open your eyess for a minute, let me exactly explain
How i fight the anger, lodged in the back of my brain
I'm attackin' it with alchahol, fallin' back into ways
But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe
Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun
Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some
Stuck in a slump, trippin out to negative thoughts
Pouring another drink, thinking i'm clever and thought
Walkin' streets as people would fight n than rob em
But vodka would close the shades on the light of the problem
Shuttin' myself out from the reality, doors blocked
Desperate to escape this room, but it's like the doors locked
Memorys touchin' sore spots, envisioning pain
Knowing deep down im creating the EXACT same vision again
With every toke that i drain, the devils spoken again
People preaching for a smile, claiming i supposably changed
Doctors diving into my mind, qeustioning pasts
Im jus say wondering how long the questions'd last
He kept preaching "Kay you'll believe me soon"
All i thought is what drink id pour once i leave the room
Bes' believe im doomed, so ill release what's true
Connected via a split personality, like i was conceived in two
Blaming mistakes on the death of a friend
"Who died kay?"...ah fuck there's that question again
The devil approached me, i was cornerd inside
An now the imagine of her in a hospital bed's haunting my mind

Damn...




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Replies:
Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 12:38am
Open your eyess for a minute, let me exactly explain
How i fight the anger, lodged in the back of my brain
I'm attackin' it with alchahol, fallin' back into ways
But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe
Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun
Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some
 
Imo those were really dope..I loved the similies in there and overall this piece was written really well. It seems the things that are key'ed in like 15 minutes always come out the best because there from the heart..good job


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The original comeback kid


Posted By: Fatal
Date Posted: 11 May 2009 at 2:06am
This was sick...loved the flow and the emotion... great read homie


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 13 May 2009 at 11:51pm
props, thanks

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Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 3:11am
I like the Em influence on it... This was one of your best flowing pieces I've read. It was very smooth... Conceptual ideas in the lines were also well done... Nice.


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 12:57pm
props, thanks for the feed kon

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Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 14 May 2009 at 1:12pm
Yup...flowed lovely


But it's harder to target than dyslexic's crackin' a safe

Lightin the next joint, swayin' but fuck it it's fun
Failin' with numbers, they say are only unlucky for some

But vodka would close the shades on the light of the problem

All i thought is what drink id pour once i leave the room

Clap


Posted By: Bolo
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 12:59am
damn kay...this was easily the best piece ive ever read by you...u really stepped ur game up...none of ur usual awkward wording...flow was perfect...and the content was dope as hell...good fuckin job, bro, props

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I am the one that knocks...


Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 1:08am
yeah, raw hotness. TBH, I've actually seen better flowing pieces from you, but this was still tight in that area. Content was exceptional, and delivery excellent. Good shit, real deep.

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I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying...


Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 15 May 2009 at 1:18am
Props, thanks bo an' nep

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