What'd I let happen to myself?
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 6:28am
Topic: What'd I let happen to myself?
Posted By: DressToKill
Subject: What'd I let happen to myself?
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 4:21am
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I used to be real, writing what came from the heart
Now I can't release what pain I substained from the start
Numb to a certian extent, I have scar's burned in my head
My heart's been broken, an i've struggled merging the ends
It's a curse my friends, I feel mentally tied down
If I swam in all the bues i'd drank, eventually i'd drown
Over the last few month's, my mental energy died out
So around my friend's, I just pretend to be alive now..
Though I wish not to complain, I'll feel like a burden
I just wanna vent like the old days, with a pad to write my words in
Self expression is valueable, and I feel like I went bankrupt
This ain't what I wanted, I never wanted to feel chained..cuffed
Or rain gust's, that would keep me hiding out alone
Figured i'd finally post something, instead of starring at this blank page at home
Suprisingly extremely hard to write..I know it's simple guy's but I haven't written anything in a long time
------------- The original comeback kid |
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Posted By: Mackie
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 4:32am
| aside from the second bar i thought it was dope. |
Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 1:05pm
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Thanks Mack, nice avy lol ------------- The original comeback kid |
Posted By: rapdisup
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 2:09pm
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Na man this felt real i like this sorta stuff man had me reading this so ya done well i jus skipped alotta shit on here lately so keep dropping man
------------- The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'! It aint over till I Rapdisup |
Posted By: Kiki Spirez
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 6:07pm
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Over the last few month's, my mental energy died out
So around my friend's, I just pretend to be alive now..
Deep shit. By you feelin' like you had to make excuses for it, it shows that you haven't done it for a while and that maybe you're not as confident with it. But before readin' that bit at the end, i just came in to this thinkin' "DTK.. This should be dope". And i came in, and read a piece that rolled off the tongue and had some sick lines.
IMO, rusty or not, you're still one of the best on the site, and i always look out for your pieces if i'm going to read any.. Keep up ------------- http://media.photobucket.com/user/Seinamies/media/Big-Dilla-Cover-web.jpg.html" rel="nofollow"> 
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Posted By: mcwoods
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 6:22pm
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yeah, nice one d, do what you do.. the line kiki quoted was the stand out, think everyone can relate to that at some level.. only thing would be don't push for more rhymes if they dont come naturally and make the next piece longer lol nice.
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Posted By: Stalin
Date Posted: 16 January 2010 at 7:05pm
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pretty much what others said.. there were a few rhymes that didnt work greatly. The content was there, some real nice lines. My fave lines were actually the first 2 and the ones Kiki quoted.
Def get back to writin more man. keep it up
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Posted By: DressToKill
Date Posted: 17 January 2010 at 2:10am
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Thank's guy's, I needed a little push like this lol. I'll definently start trying to write more ------------- The original comeback kid |
Posted By: I-SEE-GRIPS
Date Posted: 17 January 2010 at 8:23pm
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I liked this D it felt real man Get back on ya shit dude I know its hard when you stop for ages but you a good writer no doubt ------------- 
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