Representing the People..
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:00am
Topic: Representing the People..
Posted By: Junior Shade
Subject: Representing the People..
Date Posted: 22 January 2010 at 7:37pm
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Inspired by a recent song I heard.. Just flowin' ya know.. been a while.. So, Speakin' the truth, representing the people.. Young guns, middle age'd, old an' feeble.. It's real.. Security, love, warmth there needful.. But instead we let the outcasts turn to a needle.. Britan's evil, we stride straight past the homeless.. No warmth or love their left just hopeless.. Please focus for a moment, an' think of the guy.. Who lost his wife to breast cancer in the blink of an eye.. Then got made redundant by someone in the sky.. Booted out an' left jobless, he can't even ask why.. We joke, we lie, we fight, we whine.. But I feel for the mother who lost her son on the front line.. It's time's like this where you can have your soul stole.. Remember its not the single mom's fault she got thrown on the dole.. This whole things gone to far, overlooked a Goverment of cheats.. But no-one failed to not notice the beggers in the streets.. Good or bad comments welcome.. Out.. |
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Posted By: -DaMadHatter-
Date Posted: 22 January 2010 at 8:27pm
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This sort of seemed too poetic to call a rap, but I liked it. It was well composed, only thing lacking was good use of multies, but they are unessential in this type of verse. |
Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 22 January 2010 at 8:28pm
| Thanks man.. |
Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 24 January 2010 at 9:57pm
| Uppin' anyone.. Will feed your drops too!.. |
Posted By: Kay B
Date Posted: 24 January 2010 at 10:34pm
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Reminded me of akala for some reason haha....Nice shit though, good message and it flowed well, good to see u back
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 24 January 2010 at 11:13pm
| Thanks man, will holla at your latest piece.. |
Posted By: hanGing
Date Posted: 24 January 2010 at 11:26pm
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Like this - really good message - really well worded. The simplicity of the verse adds power to the words. -------------  |
Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 25 January 2010 at 12:32am
| Thanks hanging, much appreciated.. |
Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 25 January 2010 at 11:34pm
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You dropped an Open? Didn't even realize lol
Agree with hanGing, flow was nice, was listening to a beat at the time and it worked for me. Good content and like hanGing said it's simplicity added to it's strength. One thing I will say is though, you're English dude and I know for fact you don't call your Mum Mom, so cut that shit out now lol
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 25 January 2010 at 11:46pm
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LMFAO.. Thats so wierd, I always type Mom an' so other people mentioned it on Facebook the other day an' said exactly what you just said.. Thanks for checkin' it out though man.. |
Posted By: MFJJ86
Date Posted: 26 January 2010 at 2:06am
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This was nice liked it through out I still don't know why people
Say things remind them of poems
when most of the time people
Liked Tupac when that's how he did it
other then that this was a Nice Drop
Liked the word play and word choice
keep them coming Aight
~1~ RESPECT
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 06 February 2010 at 4:00pm
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Quality stuff man, digging it...hadn't even noticed you'd dropped this month! ------------- 
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Posted By: Junior Shade
Date Posted: 06 February 2010 at 10:25pm
| Haha.. Thanks man.. |