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Off My Chest

Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=19138
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 5:44am


Topic: Off My Chest
Posted By: J Sass
Subject: Off My Chest
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 12:19pm

fuck my Pops thats smokes Rock, and my moms that Smokes Bomb(bud)
and my brother that gave all his money to his Baby Moms
and my Cuzzin tried to help, but really his Design
was for me to get off on trackz, and Sky Rocket through his Prime
its like a Rocket in my Mind, i tried to quit Rappin but to Stop it is a Crime
so i Pop in every Line, i'll stick a Fork ina Socket to Shock in every Rhyme
i feel like im Killin alotta people but noone even Listens Tho
JR Assassyn, i mean, is Obviously invissible.........
even with them dotted lines above nobody Seen Me
nobody checks my Threads, nobody Gives me FreeBee's
gotta reply to Every Thread, cuz nobody comes with Feed Free
and Sage didnt Havta Drop a Audio, he coulda Teased me, and Key'd Me
then everybody says Lyricists Inc is tha Wackest Crew
why? cuz we more Active than You, or Actually Rap what we Do?
i mean, Noobs get mad when yall callin em Noobs
and tha, Mods get mad when yall callin em Fools
and tha, Vets just Laugh cuz most have been in their Shoes
and i bet, Scotty gets Mad when yall give em tha News
i dont even fuck wit Cuba or Cali, but i Hit em ona Private Message
fuck it, lets just say they gave me a Lil Private Lesson
showed me how to drop Links in my Verses cuz most of em come wit Questions
and even tho they dont have tha same amount of Stars, i see em as Solid Veterans
i never said i was tha most Lyrical nor will i ever Try to Be
cuz when i stop sayin what i feel just to throw Multies thats when i would Lie to ME!!!
but yall gone start seenin Alotta me, like that bold guy with tha Mustache on Monopoly
and its coo if yall dont reply to this, cuz it'b be just Another Robbery...sumthin that we all are used to by now............

and yall might say that this dosent flow on Text
but it dosent matter just sumthin that had to get OFF MY CHEST


yea man...i just felt like writin...i got more to get off my chest tho

 


Sass



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Replies:
Posted By: Alcatraz
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 3:24pm
nice drop regardless
 
i mean, Noobs get mad when yall callin em Noobs
and tha, Mods get mad when yall callin em Fools
and tha, Vets just Laugh cuz most have been in their Shoes
and i bet, Scotty gets Mad when yall give em tha News
loled at this
 
i never said i was tha most Lyrical nor will i ever Try to Be
cuz when i stop sayin what i feel just to throw Multies thats when i would Lie to ME!!!
but yall gone start seenin Alotta me, like that bold guy with tha Mustache on Monopoly
nice


Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 7:38pm
Very honest, very true and very well said. The message is more important than the rhymes and the flow. The rhymes were fine, the lines were way long on some parts, but nothing had awkward phrasing or overt errors (aside from bold rather than bald). Good job J.

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Posted By: J Sass
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 8:14pm
good lookin  for tha  feed yall .....i think sum lines are Stretched too(sumthin i dont do Often)
and i didnt catch that Typo KJ, but good lookin out..
 
 
Sass


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Posted By: Sick-Witted
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 11:00pm
you definitely got something off your chest via this drop man...peace

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Sick-Witted->means

I'm clever an ill & my best is revealed when

Da pressure is buildin, so step if ya willin

But testin da realest

Will only lead u down a lonely street 2 ya death cuz I kill it


Posted By: $n00z
Date Posted: 16 February 2010 at 11:46pm
i like this sass. these are my fav songs right here. that real life stuff. I gotta couple myself. but these are the type lyrics that you b like "fuck if anyone else feels it" because they will have to b/c u feel it cause it comes from ya heart. I personally liked the whole thing. you want the lyrics to keep you interested all the way thru and that's what these did

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U already know...


Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 17 February 2010 at 7:05pm
Very good stuff Sass, really impressed with the progression. Much like my Russian Roulette pt. 2 open I think you had something you really wanted to say and rather than sacrifice content for flow you sacrificed flow for content, which in my opinion is always the way to go. Wasn't sure how to take the name drop at first but I know you ain't mean anything bad sayin' you don't fucks with me so that's cool.

"cuz when i stop sayin what i feel just to throw Multies thats when i would Lie to ME!!!"

Easily my favourite line. Keep it up dude.


Posted By: J Sass
Date Posted: 22 February 2010 at 6:44am
good lookin for tha feed yall....and Cali, when i said that it was more on sum i dont fuck wit yall to tha Extent to where we on sum MSN type shyt or Collabin....but i still hit yall up and yall didnt Bullshyt me....cuz yall really couldve....but yall didnt and it just showed how real yall were....Senor too...i just forgot to mention him....
but good lookin for tha Feed yall
 
 
Sass


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Posted By: Kiki Spirez
Date Posted: 23 February 2010 at 3:42am
I like pieces that feel like rants, you know that someones felt better through writing it, and it's nice to see rhymin' help someone. Some true shit here.
 
and my Cuzzin tried to help, but really his Design
was for me to get off on trackz, and Sky Rocket through his Prime
 
Highlight for me, liked the wordin'..


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Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 25 February 2010 at 10:23pm
then everybody says Lyricists Inc is tha Wackest Crew
why? cuz we more Active than You, or Actually Rap what we Do?


that's what's up, u need to do a part 2 to this one


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+Sick-Witted+


Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 27 February 2010 at 8:46pm
Well done Sass...this was one of your better pieces.
 
then everybody says Lyricists Inc is tha Wackest Crew
why? cuz we more Active than You, or Actually Rap what we Do?
 
Truth!!!!
 


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Posted By: Stalin
Date Posted: 28 February 2010 at 12:23am
Some real shit there.. dont remember seein this, had some real solid lines in there.  You need to vent more often so you drop more.


Posted By: I-kontinue
Date Posted: 01 March 2010 at 2:00am
It was an interestin' read the whole way through cause I wanted to see what the next problem would be in the next line... So you did ya job... Good way of venting, good rhyming. Some of the line lengths lookded extended, but it flowed to me, and alot of the shit in it was true... Overall, a good address to how you feel. Keep shit real. Ha.



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