Where we go
Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Audio Mic
Forum Description: Where you can link to your own music.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=20239
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:57am
Topic: Where we go
Posted By: Lucky D
Subject: Where we go
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 6:35pm
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http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?genre=HipHop&songid=9584217&q=hi" rel="nofollow - http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?genre=HipHop&songid=9584217&q=hi
Alright...I know I ain't that great..so don't tell me I just suck... Some constructive critisim is what I would like...tips and such.. Oh and tha production isn't great..I'm just learnin'...but whatever A couple slain with a couple blows - From... A couple strays from the gun he holds - Thus... A couple brains from a couple skulls - Touch... The puddles rain above the chrome - Must... His mother wait for her son at home - What... He doesn't say of what she knows - But... She wasn't sane with another dose - Of... A drug she takes going up her nose - Thug... Is just a claim that he runs with so - Sluts... Will come and play for the fun and mo' - Bucks... To stun his name they'll clutch his throat - Cuts... Above his veins with a ton of hope - Crushed... And bloody stains on another note - "Fuck... The love you gave, you are just a ho" - Trust... Is what he breaks from his mother hold - Drunk... To numb the pain till the tunnel glows - Up... -------------  |
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Posted By: BIG GAME
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 6:41pm
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No hate Lucky...
it sounds like you're on some deep shit foreal..but I really can't understand ya..
Maybe your lads can, but I can't..real talk...no hate!
This is exactly my point SS,
you can tell that Lucky is a good emcee and we all know he is a good writer, but production str8 fucked him here.
Yo Lucky,
Sinima aint no fucken punk with the beats huh?
He's a mothafucka with them beats!!!!
I wish I could have understood it so I could give ya some real feed
Sorry homey
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Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 6:48pm
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Thanks Game.... I also added tha lyrics ------------- |
Posted By: BIG GAME
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 6:56pm
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That helped.
This was a nice dramatic piece.
If you took that to the studio and finished it, it would be a hit.
It had a vey deep vibe to it.
Once you posted the lyrics and I read along with it, I was really feeling it..
as far as criticsm:
the obvious...but aye what can ya do about the production when it's some home made music?
Ovewrall...nice piece
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 6:57pm
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Lyrically, very nice sir...I liked the creativity of it. In terms of audio, I didn't like the pauses in between your lines so much...it came across as a bit repetitive. Like it was too much, should've tried to vary it. Production-wise, I can't tell you too much about that. In terms of delivery and such like, it's mainly practice and you'll get better. Listen to your stuff as well, I think that helps. ------------- 
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Posted By: TURTLE
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 7:49pm
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Is there anyway to post the mp3 of this, id like to hear it but I cant stream the media player on my mobile. If not its all good...
-------------  <ce
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Posted By: rapdisup
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:26pm
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im sorta ya audio out now LD im tryna make it clearer jus added a levellr etc but its kinda hard to get it write ill put ya vocals back on the track in five it definately is better than ya last piece jus need the quality! ------------- The Dr said it can't be beaten,I replied it 'can-sir'! It aint over till I Rapdisup |
Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:31pm
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Thanks Raps ------------- |
Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:32pm
Thanks Cuba apreciate tha feedback ------------- |
Cuba wrote:Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:32pm
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I thought it was decent but fuck going to a studio, you don't need a studio to sound good. Go to a studio when you plan to make money off your music, otherwise you're throwing money away out of pure retardedness. All you need for good production values in rap is (most importantly) a good Ear, a basic knowledge of noise reduction, compression/limiting and mixing. That's it. If you pay for that shit when you're not actually going for a career, you're wasting money.
------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Neek
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:34pm
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when I clicked your link it took me to soundclick.com go to your page.. click the thing that says "full song info" under the song title... and message me that link and i'll give you some feedback. |
Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:35pm
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I don't ever plan on goin' to a studio..just kinda messing around at home...I'm startin' to learn about mixing and that but I ain't got much time..so its takin' a while...I'm just havin' fun with it and thought that some kats in here good give me some tips ------------- |
Posted By: SwordedStylez
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:45pm
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Lucky, feel free to add me on msn and I'll give you any help I can with producing your own shit to a high standard.
------------- https://soundcloud.com/lostblueeyes" rel="nofollow - Music Ink - Always remembered, never forgotten (as a fake as fuck piece of shit who tried to steal 2 persona's) |
Posted By: Neek
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:48pm
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thank you for the link Lucky. you know what. I like this, because i've done a similiar song before, over a renegades beat no less. the flow is there, production isn't an issue, you're audible and thats the main part. Maybe next time, turn the beat down a little bit, the piano was REALLY loud. I had to turn down right away. In hip hop, it's not the same as other genre's where you want the instrumental to be focal, in hip hop, vocals are key. So don't feel timid about having loud vocals, after a bit you'll find a nice medium. I felt I could help you there so you can get a 'better sound'.. since you wanted to learn about mixing. Also, with your mic being dynamic. cutting out some of the mid-range-eq and boosting the hi's a bit will come off with more 'clarity', it'll be more 'brittle', butt he clarity will shine. Don't be afraid of reverb either.. it is your friend. For heavier tracks a nice wet one sets it off right, for lighter beats a good dry one will go along way. I hoped this helped. I liked your track, and keep posting man. Thanks again for the link. |
Posted By: Calibra
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:51pm
| Link don't work for me. |
Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:53pm
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Thanks Neek appreciate tha comments...and tha tips...like I said I'm just learnin'..and thats why I posted it hear hopin' ya'll could give me some tips, which ya'll have. Maybe I'll try and use these tips and redo this song. Thanks again ya'll ------------- |
Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 06 September 2010 at 11:55pm
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Alright seein' as it didn't work for some of ya'll I'll post up this.. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=984951&content=songinfo&songID=9584217" rel="nofollow - http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=984951&content=songinfo&songID=9584217 Hopefully it'll work if not than maybe I'll use zshare that I see others usin' ------------- |