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Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=20465
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 5:44am
Topic: Listen
Posted By: Cuba
Subject: Listen
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 12:50am
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Sorry for the structure, but hey, sue me... Recite the patents, coz I'm the boss kicking this like Obama in the United Nations, don't change the station...coz if this was BBC you wouldn't get facts so easily, could rap rapid on 1Xtra, pack packets with mad habits plus hot texture...could kick similes like Wordsworth, Shakespeare and them...could bring Al-Qaeda coz the West straight fearing him...they aint near to him...rip rhythm with precision endeared to him, spin prisms coz their visions are clear as sin. Revered like the Pope, but I'm Benedict to those on benefits...for the hell of it, I plunder politicians like they were celibate...no Immortal Technique, but my rhymes are timeless...unlike the doctrine slithered by those guys that's spineless...I'm the light to miners, getting Chile with the flow coz my lines are priceless, I'm twice a diamond, slice ya wise men, divide ya violence...coz the ink of a scholar is worth more than the blood of martyr, but many spilled their life as price for barter...locked down by the rites of charter, in chambers trading peace and that's just for starters ------------- 
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Posted By: TURTLE
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 1:17am
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Fav line v v v
Revered like the Pope, but I'm Benedict to those on benefits... for the hell of it, I plunder politicians like they were celibate... Nice multis! After a bit I started to catch the rhyme scheme, even though there was no structure I could still follow it. Nice drop CUBA!! -------------  <ce
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 1:58pm
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Cheers Turtle, nice to see someone reading open mics who hasn't just dropped one!! -------------
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Posted By: NepentheZ
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 2:15pm
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If I did sue you, how much would I get? We can settle out of court if you like. I'll accept £5. This piece was sick, too. Actually flowed flawlessly. Great use of vocab (but none of that Kosmo > Thesaurus stuff) - some sick lines. Good read. Drop more. -------------  I'm so fucking intelligent, half the time I don't even know what I'm saying... |
Posted By: J504
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 3:31pm
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Yea man, you already know this was dope. I also gotta applaud you for not holding anybody's hand and walking them through it with elaborate expos or cookie-cutter formatting. I know for me personally, I hate to get caught-up in a repetitious style and I have to change something in order to keep that feeling of actually being productive and creative.
Your first line was just sickness:
"I'm the lyrical equivalent of diligent militants riddling the sickest spits."
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Posted By: Kosmosis
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 6:40pm
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that was mad dope.....you could have even rhymed more too.
for the record you asked for a translator lol... ------------- Receiving backhanded compliments from Orion since 11-28-13. |
Posted By: King Jehu
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 7:14pm
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Cuba, you will hear from my lawyer.
This was so well written it becomes a circular argument. You write about how good you are so well, there's no choice but to believe you. You paradoxical monster ------------- Insert something rappy here |
Posted By: -Orion-
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 7:24pm
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Oomph... sickness, sickness... so many hot lines in this shit, seriously I didn't like the format, I think you could have gone the other way and filled it with line drops, and that would have been more effective I also didn't like the intro. It honestly sounded like some *** shit the way it started and I was like 'oh boy...' but you recovered in tremendous style -- and that's just me nit-pickin'... It got better and better after that and the last two paragraphs were serious business Metaphorically this was a different class Not for nothin', on pure skills this is two classics in two weeks from you... No one has done something of this type to this standard in LA history But you've inspired me -- now if I could just get off work for long enough . . . ------------- They just said that FUCKIN' with me They didn't mean it Nah . . . |
Posted By: Kosmosis
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 7:34pm
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ask cuba who inspired him.....remember the future...
------------- Receiving backhanded compliments from Orion since 11-28-13. |
Posted By: J504
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 7:40pm
Yo Cuba, just thought you should know... Your average line length on my MacBook is about 5.4 inches. 
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 7:47pm
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I wrote on my amigos wall on FB & copy/pasted over to here, that's why it's messed up Keystyle son, key style -------------
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Posted By: J504
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 8:49pm
YO, SHORTEN THEM SHITS, SON!!!!!!!! 
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Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 24 September 2010 at 11:41pm
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Posted By: Lucky D
Date Posted: 26 September 2010 at 10:41pm
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Dope lines like usual...flow was there. But that structure sucks..you'll be hearin' from my lawyer -------------  |