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Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=20915
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 2:16am


Topic: 24
Posted By: J504
Subject: 24
Date Posted: 20 December 2010 at 9:05pm
 
 
I put the 2 to the 4 like I'm takin' six
Makin'lines get the sizzle like some bacon strips
Take the bitch from ya verse then I tape her wrists
And rape her quick like 24 from the Laker's did
It's not my fault, I didn't make her shake her tits
Oh Shit, cops! Quick,somebody flip the breaker switch!
This ain't my Greatest Hits, it's just my latest spit
The Kobe line was a stretch, but I made it fit
I keep my bars Gucci while yours are fake as shit
You can't touch my double dozen with a baker's mitt
I make haters quit and expose those fakest friends
I'm not gonna pretend I'm Jem and make amends
My 24 gets spent with me makin ends
stacking end to end as I rake it in
and make that kid shut up, cause if he irks me
I choke the fucker out with a Griffey jersey
I attack wack cowards and I slap Jack Bauer
with 24 lines and I ain't turning back hours
Doin' line after line like I'm snortin' text  
I own the track, watch me make Jeff Gordon wreck
I go twenty fo, but I can go many mo'
I hate skinny jeans when they on a skinny hoe
Plotting evil on me? you better seek a redeemer
Peep game in Proverbs, you're whats known as a schemer
 
 



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Posted By: Kiki Spirez
Date Posted: 20 December 2010 at 9:39pm
Don't know how you came up with this.. But this is how it went for me..

Rape Line- LOL

Turning back hours Line- Shocked

Good variety in a pretty limited and minimalistic topic, but you did it so well, you always drop creatively man, keep it up.


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Posted By: Stalin
Date Posted: 20 December 2010 at 10:59pm
This shit flowed good.. Some nice lines in there too... Keep comin wit this kinda shit. I was impressed.


Posted By: Cuba
Date Posted: 20 December 2010 at 11:43pm
Nice, couple of funny ones in there...bit simple in parts, but was coolio

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Posted By: TURTLE
Date Posted: 21 December 2010 at 12:04am


Damn J5 you drop too many open mics for me to keep up, lol. This was fire, like roofs in the ghetto. Haha keep bringin it man!!

The stretched line was coo!!

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Posted By: Manc
Date Posted: 21 December 2010 at 12:15pm
this woz a hot drop j. Loved the way u switched between 24 n kobe. The double dozen line woz madness lol. Your scheme woz on point and the multis were used very well. All in all, this woz a decent peice j n you just keep killin it with all these different styles. Bravo kiddo!


Posted By: -Que-
Date Posted: 27 December 2010 at 3:13am
Shit was sick! I was peeping this some days ago.From the opener to the transition ...it was perfect! You already know J......its all good!

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Posted By: kt
Date Posted: 27 December 2010 at 3:19am
I wuv the Kobe refernce


Posted By: -Orion-
Date Posted: 28 December 2010 at 12:19am
Good concept, could have done even more with it but thinking outside the box again which is key...inspiring

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. . . Now who said they fuckin' with me?
They just said that FUCKIN' with me
They didn't mean it
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Posted By: Madeye
Date Posted: 02 January 2011 at 5:36am
...enjoyment throughout.  Theme's nailed more than adequately. 
 
I liked this read.  Well put together.
Let up a smidge near the end, no compromise to flow, though.
 
Good shit.
 
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Posted By: J504
Date Posted: 04 January 2011 at 3:08pm
'preciate the feed on this.



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