Pardon Me, Eulogist
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Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 4:23am
Topic: Pardon Me, Eulogist
Posted By: CHAIN
Subject: Pardon Me, Eulogist
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 8:27pm
 The flyest at the wake; The ways of the exquisite Shape up crispy My waves were too Pacific I waved at the widow My wavy-ness was wicked I waited by the window Where I wavered over business… Decisions, decisions I’m wasting my expenses On liquor ‘cause getting… Wasted’s so expensive Both of my cufflinks Weighed ‘bout 2 syringes I put my cup down ‘cause her waist was too terrific I’m Wade with the Heat My shine never waned Back in the day When them wages were offensive Waivers were submitted Fuck the wafers with the milk This shit is ridic’ Like the Wayans with their films Fuck the wailing and the grieving ‘Give wang to these MILFS’ I’m tryna do numbers Like Wayne and Meek Mill Winking at these women I will prolly meet again When they sons get killed R.I.P to them. HG Feast With Us ------------- |
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Posted By: Kiki Spirez
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 8:30pm
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I liked this. Short but sweet. Some of the flow was great, and I like how you used similar sounds and intonations to mix words together and keep that shit smooth as physically possible. I waved at the widow My wavy-ness was wicked I waited by the window Where I wavered over business… Decisions, decisions ^For example. Keep up. ------------- http://media.photobucket.com/user/Seinamies/media/Big-Dilla-Cover-web.jpg.html" rel="nofollow"> 
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Posted By: The Butcher
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 8:31pm
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this was some sick shit. loved the short bar flow. rhymes were good and some decent wordplay. nice drop brah ------------- 
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Posted By: Brotha Goose
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 8:33pm
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Listen'n to Take it to the head by Dj Khaled.... . Flow was perfect spit yur whole writ with no stumbles DOPE ------------- 
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Posted By: spume corrupt
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 9:09pm
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this was hot bro.......................loved how this played out like an entertaining movie idea with such short lines thats some serious skills Respect -------------  |
Posted By: JBrenn
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 10:55pm
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i can't help but read this like an old bust rhymes style quick with lots of emphasis on syllables… makes me wish you wrote more… good shit chain.. -------------  |
Posted By: Matt The Ripper
Date Posted: 01 January 2014 at 11:05pm
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Not one of your best. ;) lol ------------- Face it, I'm just too Rock N' Roll for you You aint ready for this, and now you know the truth |
Posted By: Freeda5thDawg
Date Posted: 02 January 2014 at 12:33am
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Someone said it above. I already forgot cause I skimmed through feedback but it was like a movie idea. It's pretty remarkable when you can read and visualize very clearly and precisely and that's because of the way you use your words and imagery. Kept it short and simple but always enjoyable and interesting. How'd you come up with the concept? Do tell. Ill stuff, man. -------------  |
Posted By: CHAIN
Date Posted: 02 January 2014 at 11:50pm
lol Well, I was at this wake, and I was looking like money, If I may say so myself. The women there were looking like 'woooo!'..black dresses were super tight. So I just looked up to the sky and in my head I said to my man 'I KNOW you're not mad cause if you was here u'd be doing the same shit'. He wouldn't have it any other way. ------------- |
Freeda5thDawg wrote:Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 02 January 2014 at 11:56pm
| This was mental. To tie in that much alliteration and assonance in short bars while still getting a message across is ridiculously difficult and you make it seem effortless. I found the flow to this one much easier to follow than in your Orion collab because this one was a lot more formulaic I guess. Pleasure as always |
Posted By: Titu
Date Posted: 03 January 2014 at 12:01am
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Short but Dope as fuck. Your flow stayed hot throughout. Good executions and dope concepts. Very effective piece! Lots of props Edit: wanted to quote these. Waivers were submitted Fuck the wafers with the milk This shit is ridic’ Like the Wayans with their films Fuck the wailing and the grieving ‘Give wang to these MILFS’ I’m tryna do numbers Like Wayne and Meek Mill Winking at these women I will prolly meet again When they sons get killed R.I.P to them. ------------- Fuck That Fat smelly cunt Donald Trump, a racist asshole who is fucked in the head. |