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Monster

Printed From: Lyrical Assault
Category: Emcee Lounge
Forum Name: Open Mic
Forum Description: This isnt a Battle Board, this is for your Freestyle Verses to be Rated by other members.
URL: http://www.lyricalassault.co.uk/forum/forum_posts.asp?TID=30082
Printed Date: 27 March 2026 at 5:44am


Topic: Monster
Posted By: Smoothtung
Subject: Monster
Date Posted: 22 January 2014 at 3:33pm

I cleaned up and rode out to a whole crowd of fanatics..
..steal buffed of mold, grout, and chromed out in acids..   
Bolts found and fastened..
a cracked axle reinforced..
..for a dirt track massive as a back mountain ski resort.
..pyrotechnics fizzled out and cracked against the back stands.
Fire exit signals through the black assist the trapped fans.
..i'm revved off the draw of an exhaust valve and locked foot.   
And crept aloft the pause as the fog fell like log wood.    
I'm a Monster of a truck.. solid black with sequenced stripes..
And a spot of luck from off the polish rag the previous night.   
The lighting was classically set - low and stadium style..
Through the silence scattered steps roamed the stone atrium tiles.   

I fought my pistons as they shot shy from the spark sphere..
The shock system sat in all confines of  the park gear.
Driver done and turnt me up and listened to my engine whine. 
Visor scuffed and pursed shut and shifted for a second time..
Geared in and punched it just to see me stand straight up.. 
I veered for a young chick with a kiwi champaign cup.
Retracted my breaks as the driver turned tighter..
And balanced sideways on the curbs of my tires.
Saw the stricken horror as it glistened off her dream-scape
And boxed through torture as he lifted up the e-brake.
Skidded to a halt amidst the fears of the wide eyed.
And the bigot proved to fall to the interior nice guy. 



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Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it



Replies:
Posted By: The Law
Date Posted: 22 January 2014 at 4:10pm
Insanely on topic and dope concept all together.
The imagery and vocab that followed along in this really put a great touch to this piece.
The beginning of the second part was my favorite part of this drop.

Real nice stuff right here smooth

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Go my Minions!




Posted By: Point Blank
Date Posted: 22 January 2014 at 4:13pm
This was dope as fuck man, the multies were ridiculous and the flow was smooth as fuck. This type of verse would be much better to record as an audio than the verses where you structure them with really short lines and have to rush spitting them. I much prefer this style. Keep it up man


Posted By: Smoothtung
Date Posted: 23 January 2014 at 6:18am
appreciate it bros

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Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it


Posted By: IZIAH
Date Posted: 25 January 2014 at 9:29pm
what up smooth? good shit man, i liked it. still writing that interesting crazy multiple rhyme shit aye? good stuff!


Posted By: Exoduzt
Date Posted: 25 January 2014 at 11:27pm
This was fucking nice smooth.  I'm loving the originality of the the whole concept.  It's very unique.  that flow is killer in some sections. 

"I cleaned up and rode out to a whole crowd of fanatics..
..steal buffed of mold, grout, and chromed out in acids..   
Bolts found and fastened..
a cracked axle reinforced..
..for a dirt track massive as a back mountain ski resort."---haha i loved this section rite here. 


The lighting was classically set - low and stadium style..
Through the silence scattered steps roamed the stone atrium tiles.   ----damn this is my favorite line shit was deep my dude. 


Saw the stricken horror as it glistened off her dream-scape
And boxed through torture as he lifted up the e-brake."---flow was crazy

dope unique drop smooth awesome


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Posted By: U.N.L.M.
Date Posted: 25 January 2014 at 11:37pm
I still don't know how you do everything so smoothly lmao...I may have to avoid your verses to feel better about my rhymes and lines...What really makes this drop great is the golden concept...I mean, the title/concept was such an interesting one and you really stayed on point to describe it and lead us through it...Well done.

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Posted By: Smoothtung
Date Posted: 25 January 2014 at 11:44pm
Thanks guys I really appreciate the kind comments

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Imagery so vividly intrinsic you might miss it..
Though you never even had the chance to witness it



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